Three anti-social skills to improve your writing - Nadia Kalman

Translator: tom carter Reviewer: Bedirhan Cinar

Prevodilac: Marija L. Lektor: Milenka Okuka

Dialogue gives a story color,

Dijalog priči daje boju,

makes it exciting and moves it forward.

čini je zanimljivom i pokreće napred.

Romeo: O, wilt thou leave me so unsatisfied?

Romeo: “I ostavljaš me zar bez utehe?”

Juliet: What satisfaction canst thou have tonight?

Julija: “Šta noćas da ti dam za utehu?”

Romeo: The exchange of thy love's faithful vows for mine.

Romeo: ”Veru da ljubav vratiš mi za ljubav.”

Without dialogue: (cricket sounds)

Bez dijaloga: (zvuk cvrčaka)

So what goes into writing effective dialogue?

Dakle, šta je potrebno za pisanje uspešnog dijaloga?

Well, there are social skills:

Pa, imamo društvene veštine:

making friends, solving conflicts, being pleasant and polite.

druželjubivost,

umeće rešavanja konflikta, ljubaznost i učtivost.

We won't be using any of those today.

Nama neće trebati ništa od toga danas.

Instead, we'll be working on -- let's call them "anti-social skills."

Umesto toga, mi ćemo pričati o -

hajde da ih nazovemo “antidruštvenim veštinama”.

If you're a writer, you may already have a few of these.

Ako ste pisac, možda već posedujete neke od njih.

The first is eavesdropping.

Prva je prisluškivanje.

If you're riding a bus and hear an interesting conversation, you could write it all down.

Ako se vozite autobusom i čujete zanimljiv razgovor,

mogli biste da ga zapišete.

Of course, when you write fiction, you're not describing real people,

Naravno, kada pišete fikciju,

ne opisujete stvarne ljude,

već izmišljate likove.

you're making up characters.

But sometimes the words you overhear can give you ideas.

Ali ponekad, reči koje čujete mogu vam dati ideje.

"I did not," says one person.

“Nisam”, kaže prva osoba.

"I saw you," the other replies.

“Videla sam te”, odgovara druga.

Who might be saying those words?

Ko bi mogao da govori ove reči?

Maybe it's two kids in a class, and the boy thinks the girl pushed him.

Možda su to dvoje dece na času,

i dečak misli da ga je devojčica gurnula.

Maybe it's a couple, but one of them is a vampire,

Možda je to par, ali jedno od njih je vampir,

and the woman vampire saw the man flirting with a zombie.

i žena vampir je videla muškarca kako flertuje sa zombijem.

Or maybe not.

Ili možda ne.

Maybe the characters are a teenager and his mother,

Možda su likovi tinejdžer i njegova majka,

and they're supposed to be vegetarians, but the mother saw him eating a burger.

i oni bi trebalo da su vegetarijanci,

ali majka je videla sina kako jede pljeskavicu.

So let's say you've decided on some characters.

Recimo da ste se odlučili za neke likove.

This is anti-social skill number two:

Ovo je antidruštvena veština broj dva:

start pretending they're real.

počnite da se pravite da su oni stvarni.

What are they like? Where are they from? What music do they listen to?

Kakvi su oni? Odakle su? Kakvu muziku slušaju?

Spend some time with them.

Provedite malo vremena s njima.

If you're on a bus, think about what they might be doing if they were there too.

Ako ste u autobusu, razmišljajte šta bi oni radili da su tu sa vama.

Would they talk on the phone, listen to music,

Da li bi pričali telefonom, slušali muziku,

draw pictures, sleep?

crtali, spavali?

What we say depends on who we are.

Šta govorimo zavisi od toga ko smo.

An older person might speak differently than a younger person.

Starija osoba će možda govoriti drugačije nego mlada.

Someone from the south might speak differently than someone from the north.

Neko sa juga će pričati drugačije od nekog sa severa.

Once you know your characters, you can figure out how they talk.

Kada upoznate svoje likove, znaćete kako oni govore.

At this stage, it's helpful to use anti-social skill number three:

U ovoj fazi, pomaže pribegavanje antidruštvenoj veštini broj tri:

muttering to yourself.

mrmljanje sebi u bradu.

When you speak your character's words, you can hear whether they sound natural,

Kada izgovarate reči svojih likova, možete čuti da li one zvuče prirodno,

and fix them if necessary.

i možete da ih popravite ako treba.

Remember, most people are usually pretty informal when they speak.

Ne zaboravite, većina ljudi obično priča neformalnim govorom.

They use simple language and contractions.

Koriste jednostavan jezik i skraćuju rečenice.

So, "Do not attempt to lie to me" sounds more natural as "Don't try to lie to me."

Na primer: “Ne usuđuj se pokušati da me lažeš”

zvuči bolje zamenjeno sa: ”Nemoj da me lažeš.”

Also keep it short.

Osim toga, skratite priču.

People tend to speak in short bursts,

Ljudi obično pričaju u kratkim replikama, a ne dugim besedama.

not lengthy speeches.

And let the dialogue do the work.

I pustite da dijalog odradi svoje.

Ask yourself: do I really need that adverb?

Zapitajte se: da li mi stvarno treba taj prilog?

For instance, "'Your money or your life,' she said threateningly."

Na primer: “‘Pare ili život’, rekla je, preteći.”

Here, "threateningly" is redundant, so you can get rid of it.

Ovde je “preteći” suvišno, tako da možete da ga izbacite.

But if the words and the actions don't match, an adverb can be helpful.

Ali, ako reči ne prate dela, prilog može biti od koristi.

"'Your money or your life,' she said lovingly."

“‘Pare ili život’, rekla je, s ljubavlju.”

So, to recap:

Dakle, da ponovimo:

First, eavesdrop. Next, pretend imaginary people are real.

Prvo, prisluškujte.

Sledeće, pravite se da su izmišljeni likovi stvarni.

Finally, mutter to yourself, and write it all down.

Na kraju, mrmljajte za sebe. I zapišite sve.

You already have everything you need.

Već imate sve što vam je potrebno.

This is fictional dialogue, or "How to Hear Voices in Your Head."

Ovo je zamišljeni dijalog ili: “Kako da čujete glasove u svojoj glavi.”