Three anti-social skills to improve your writing - Nadia Kalman

Tri antisocijalne vještine za poboljšanje pisanja - Nadia Kalman

Translator: tom carter Reviewer: Bedirhan Cinar

Prevoditelj: Ivana Dvorski Lacković Recezent: Ivan Stamenković

Dialogue gives a story color,

Dijalog priči daje boju,

makes it exciting and moves it forward.

čini je uzbudljivom i napetom.

Romeo: O, wilt thou leave me so unsatisfied?

Romeo: O, hoćeš li me ostaviti tako nezadovoljnog?

Juliet: What satisfaction canst thou have tonight?

Julija: Kakvo zadovoljstvo možeš imati večeras?

Romeo: The exchange of thy love's faithful vows for mine.

Romeo: Razmjenu naših ljubavnih zavjeta.

Without dialogue: (cricket sounds)

Bez dijaloga: (glasanje cvrčka)

So what goes into writing effective dialogue?

Kako se može napisti efektivan dijalog?

Well, there are social skills:

Postoje socijalne vještine:

making friends, solving conflicts, being pleasant and polite.

stvaranje prijatelja, rješavanje konflikata, ljubaznost i pristojnost.

We won't be using any of those today.

Danas se nećemo fokusirati na njih.

Instead, we'll be working on -- let's call them "anti-social skills."

Umjesto toga radit ćemo na "antisocijalnim vještinama".

If you're a writer, you may already have a few of these.

Ukoliko ste pisac, možda neke od njih već posjedujete.

The first is eavesdropping.

Prva je prisluškivanje.

If you're riding a bus and hear an interesting conversation, you could write it all down.

Ukoliko se vozite busom i čujete zanimljiv razgovor, možete ga zapisati.

Of course, when you write fiction, you're not describing real people,

Kad pišete fikciju, ne opisujete stvarne ljude,

you're making up characters.

nego izmišljate likove.

But sometimes the words you overhear can give you ideas.

Ali ponekad vam riječi koje čujete mogu dati ideje.

"I did not," says one person.

"Nisam", kaže prva osoba.

"I saw you," the other replies.

"Vidio sam te", druga osoba odgovara.

Who might be saying those words?

Tko bi mogao govoriti te riječi?

Maybe it's two kids in a class, and the boy thinks the girl pushed him.

Možda dvoje djece u razredu pri čemu dječak misli da ga je curica gurnula.

Maybe it's a couple, but one of them is a vampire,

Možda par, ali je jedan od njih vampir

and the woman vampire saw the man flirting with a zombie.

i žena vampir je vidjela muškarca da flertuje sa zombijem.

Or maybe not.

Ili možda ne.

Maybe the characters are a teenager and his mother,

Možda su likovi tinejdžer i njegova majka

and they're supposed to be vegetarians, but the mother saw him eating a burger.

i možda su vegetarijanci, a mama ga je vidjela da jede burger.

So let's say you've decided on some characters.

Recimo da ste odlučili koje likove imate.

This is anti-social skill number two:

Ovo je antisocijalna vještina broj dva:

start pretending they're real.

počnite se pretvarati da su živi.

What are they like? Where are they from? What music do they listen to?

Kakvi su? Odakle su? Kakvu glazbu slušaju?

Spend some time with them.

Provedite neko vrijeme s njima.

If you're on a bus, think about what they might be doing if they were there too.

Ako ste na busu, razmišljajte što bi mogli raditi da su i oni.

Would they talk on the phone, listen to music,

Bi li pričali na telefon, slušali glazbu,

draw pictures, sleep?

crtali slike, spavali?

What we say depends on who we are.

Ono što kažemo ovisi o onome što smo.

An older person might speak differently than a younger person.

Odrasla osoba priča drugačije nego mlada osoba.

Someone from the south might speak differently than someone from the north.

Netko s juga priča drugačije nego netko sa sjevera.

Once you know your characters, you can figure out how they talk.

Jednom kad poznajete svoj lik, možete odrediti kako pričaju.

At this stage, it's helpful to use anti-social skill number three:

U ovoj fazi korisno je koristiti antisocijalnu vještinu broj tri:

muttering to yourself.

mrmljanje sam sebi.

When you speak your character's words, you can hear whether they sound natural,

Kad izgovarate riječi svog lika, možete čuti zvuče li prirodno

and fix them if necessary.

te ih popraviti ukoliko je potrebno.

Remember, most people are usually pretty informal when they speak.

Zapamtite, većina je ljudi poprilično neformalna kad govori.

They use simple language and contractions.

Koriste jednostavan jezik i skraćenice.

So, "Do not attempt to lie to me" sounds more natural as "Don't try to lie to me."

"Da nisi pokušao da mi lažeš" zvuči prirodnije "Nemoj mi probati lagati".

Also keep it short.

Skratite.

People tend to speak in short bursts,

Ljudi govore u kratkim naletima,

not lengthy speeches.

ne dugim govorima.

And let the dialogue do the work.

I pustite dijalog da napravi svoje.

Ask yourself: do I really need that adverb?

Pitajte se: trebam li koristiti prilog?

For instance, "'Your money or your life,' she said threateningly."

Primjerice: "Novac ili život, rekla je prijeteće".

Here, "threateningly" is redundant, so you can get rid of it.

Ovdje je "prijeteće" redundantno stoga ga se možete riješiti.

But if the words and the actions don't match, an adverb can be helpful.

Ali ako se riječi i postupci ne slažu prilog može biti koristan.

"'Your money or your life,' she said lovingly."

"Novac ili život, rekla je s ljubavlju."

So, to recap:

Da ponovimo:

First, eavesdrop. Next, pretend imaginary people are real.

Prvo, prisluškivanje. Dalje, pravite se da su likovi stvarni.

Finally, mutter to yourself, and write it all down.

Naposljetku, šapćite si i sve zapišite.

You already have everything you need.

Već imate sve što je potrebno.

This is fictional dialogue, or "How to Hear Voices in Your Head."

Ovo je fikcionalan dijalog ili "Kako čuti glasove u svojoj glavi."