IELTS Essay - How to Write an Introduction (Using Paraphrasing)

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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Hi, Iโ€™m Daniel.
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์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š”, ์ €๋Š” ๋‹ค๋‹ˆ์—˜์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Welcome to Oxford Online English!
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์˜ฅ์Šคํฌ๋“œ ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ ์˜์–ด์— ์˜ค์‹  ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ™˜์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
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In this lesson, you can learn about paraphrasing in IELTS essays.
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์ด ์ˆ˜์—…์—์„œ๋Š” IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋ฐฐ์šธ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
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First question: whatโ€™s paraphrasing?
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ: ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์ด๋ž€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
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Paraphrasing means saying the same thing in a different way.
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ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
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But, Iโ€™m guessing you already knew that.
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ด๋ฏธ ์•Œ๊ณ  ๊ณ„์…จ์œผ๋ฆฌ๋ผ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Probably, youโ€™re watching this video because you think you need to paraphrase the question
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์•„๋งˆ๋„ ๋‹น์‹ ์€
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in your IELTS essay introduction, and you arenโ€™t sure how to do it.
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IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด ์†Œ๊ฐœ์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง๋กœ ๋ฐ”๊ฟ”์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๊ณ  ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ• ์ง€ ํ™•์‹ ์ด ์„œ์ง€ ์•Š๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์ด ๋น„๋””์˜ค๋ฅผ ๋ณด๊ณ  ์žˆ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Weโ€™re making this video because thereโ€™s a lot of bad or inaccurate advice about paraphrasing
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ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ข‹์ง€ ์•Š๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋ถ€์ •ํ™•ํ•œ ์กฐ์–ธ์ด ๋งŽ๊ณ 
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around, and many IELTS students have the wrong idea about what paraphrasing is and how they
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๋งŽ์€ IELTS ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ฉฐ
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should use it in their IELTS essay.
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IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ด์•ผ ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ž˜๋ชป๋œ ์ƒ๊ฐ์„ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์ด ๋น„๋””์˜ค๋ฅผ ์ œ์ž‘ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:45
With our IELTS students, we often have to spend time breaking down bad habits and bad
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IELTS ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค๊ณผ ํ•จ๊ป˜, ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์ข…์ข… ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ์ด๊ฒƒ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๋‚˜์œ ์Šต๊ด€๊ณผ ๋‚˜์œ ์ƒ๊ฐ์„ ๋ถ„ํ•ดํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ๋ณด๋‚ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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ideas which students have about this.
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So, in this lesson, you can learn the truth about paraphrasing in your IELTS essay.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด๋ฒˆ ๊ฐ•์˜์—์„œ๋Š” IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ง„์‹ค์„ ๋ฐฐ์šธ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Youโ€™ll see the number one mistake that IELTS students make with paraphrasing, and youโ€™ll
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IELTS ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์—์„œ ๊ฐ€์žฅ ๋งŽ์ด ์ €์ง€๋ฅด๋Š” ์‹ค์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ณ  IELTS ์ž‘๋ฌธ ์‹œํ—˜
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learn how to use paraphrase effectively in your IELTS writing exam.
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์—์„œ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ฆˆ๋ฅผ ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ฐฐ์šฐ๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๋‹น์‹ ์„
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Letโ€™s start with something that might surprise you:
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๋†€๋ผ๊ฒŒ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๋ถ€ํ„ฐ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค :
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What?
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๋ฌด์—‡?
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But wait, I saw this video, and it said I should paraphrase the question in my introduction.
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ž ๊น, ์ด ์˜์ƒ์„ ๋ดค๋Š”๋ฐ ์„œ๋ก ์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง๋กœ ๋ฐ”๊ฟ”์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ํ•˜๋”๊ตฐ์š”.
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But wait, I read this article, and it said I should paraphrase the question in my introduction.
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ž ๊น, ์ด ๊ธฐ์‚ฌ๋ฅผ ์ฝ์—ˆ๋Š”๋ฐ ์„œ๋ฌธ์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง๋กœ ๋ฐ”๊ฟ”์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋งํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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But wait, my teacher told me I should paraphrase the question in my introduction.
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ž ๊น๋งŒ์š”, ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜์ด ์„œ๋ฌธ์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง๋กœ ๋ฐ”๊ฟ”์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋ง์”€ํ•˜์…จ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
01:32
Okay, we know.
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์•Œ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Thereโ€™s a lot of IELTS advice out there that says, โ€˜paraphrase the question in your
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์‹œ์ค‘์—๋Š” '์„œ๋ก ์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง๋กœ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜์„ธ์š”'๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋Š” IELTS ์กฐ์–ธ์ด ๋งŽ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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introduction.โ€™
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Why should you listen when we say you donโ€™t need to?
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ๋•Œ ์™œ ๋“ค์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
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Donโ€™t pay attention to us; pay attention to the official IELTS scoring scheme.
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ์—๊ฒŒ ์ฃผ์˜๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ์šธ์ด์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๊ณต์‹ IELTS ์ฑ„์  ์ฒด๊ณ„์— ์ฃผ๋ชฉํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
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To save you time, weโ€™ve added links to the official scoring scheme under the video.
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์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ์ ˆ์•ฝํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์•„๋ž˜์— ๊ณต์‹ ์ฑ„์  ์ฒด๊ณ„์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋งํฌ๋ฅผ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:55
You can read it right now!
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์ง€๊ธˆ ๋ฐ”๋กœ ์ฝ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
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Go ahead; read the scoring scheme and find the word โ€˜paraphraseโ€™.
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๊ณ„์†ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ์ฑ„์  ์ฒด๊ณ„๋ฅผ ์ฝ๊ณ  'ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ฆˆ'๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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We can save you some time: it isnโ€™t there.
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์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ์ ˆ์•ฝํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์‹œ๊ฐ„์ด ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Remember, this is the official scoring system, which the examiners use to mark your IELTS
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์‹œํ—˜๊ด€์ด IELTS ์ž‘๋ฌธ ์‹œํ—˜์„ ์ฑ„์ ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ณต์‹ ์ฑ„์  ์‹œ์Šคํ…œ์ž„์„ ๊ธฐ์–ตํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค
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writing exam.
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The writing mark scheme does not talk about paraphrase AT ALL.
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์“ฐ๊ธฐ ํ‘œ์‹œ ์ฒด๊ณ„๋Š” ์˜์—ญ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ „ํ˜€ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:17
Why not?
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์™œ ์•ˆ ๋ผ? ์„œ๋ก ์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„
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Because you donโ€™t have to paraphrase the question in your introduction.
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๋ฐ”๊ฟ” ๋งํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
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Okay, you think, so how do I start my essay?
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์ž, ๊ทธ๋Ÿผ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ด์•ผ ํ• ๊นŒ์š”?
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Surely paraphrasing the question is better than nothing?
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ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ์˜์—ญํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์—†๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๋ณด๋‹ค ๋‚ซ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
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I donโ€™t know what else to doโ€ฆ
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๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ํ•ด์•ผํ• ์ง€ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค...
02:35
Hereโ€™s how a lot of students approach paraphrasing.
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๋งŽ์€ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์— ์ ‘๊ทผํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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See if this looks familiar to you.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์นœ์ˆ™ํ•ด ๋ณด์ด๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
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Letโ€™s take a question:
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•ด๋ณด์ž:
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Robots, computers, and machines are becoming more advanced, and can perform many jobs which
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๋กœ๋ด‡, ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ ๋ฐ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„๋Š” ์ ์  ๋” ๋ฐœ์ „ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด ํ•˜๋˜ ๋งŽ์€ ์ผ์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
02:50
used to be done by people.
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What problems does this cause, and how can these problems be solved?
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์ด๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ์–ด๋–ค ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•˜๋ฉฐ ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
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So, letโ€™s practice bad paraphrasing!
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‹ˆ ์ž˜๋ชป๋œ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์„ ์—ฐ์Šตํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค!
03:03
Letโ€™s see now, we need to change the words.
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์ด์ œ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋ฐ”๊ฟ”์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:07
Letโ€™s find some synonyms:
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๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ์•„๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค:
03:11
robot = automaton advanced = cutting-edge
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๋กœ๋ด‡ = ์ง„๋ณด๋œ ์ž๋™ ์žฅ์น˜ = ์ตœ์ฒจ๋‹จ
03:16
machine = apparatus job = assignment
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๊ธฐ๊ณ„ = ์žฅ์น˜ ์ง์—… = ํ• ๋‹น
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people = folks
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ = ์‚ฌ๋žŒ
03:25
Wow, great synonyms, right?
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์™€์šฐ, ์ข‹์€ ๋™์˜์–ด์ฃ ? ๋‚˜์œ ์˜์—ญ์„
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Letโ€™s plug them into our sentence to create a bad paraphrase:
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๋งŒ๋“ค๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๋ฌธ์žฅ์— ์—ฐ๊ฒฐํ•ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
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Automata, computers, and apparatus are becoming more cutting-edge, and can perform many assignments
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Automata, ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ ๋ฐ ์žฅ์น˜๋Š” ์ ์  ๋” ์ฒจ๋‹จํ™”๋˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ–ˆ๋˜ ๋งŽ์€ ์ž‘์—…์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
03:39
which used to be done by folks.
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03:41
Letโ€™s change a couple of small things so itโ€™s not so close to the original:
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๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ž‘์€ ๊ฒƒ๋“ค์„ ๋ณ€๊ฒฝํ•˜์—ฌ ์›๋ณธ๊ณผ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๊ฐ€๊น์ง€ ์•Š๊ฒŒ ํ•ฉ์‹œ๋‹ค.
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Automata, computers, and apparatus are more and more cutting-edge, and can do many assignments
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Automata, ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ ๋ฐ ์žฅ์น˜๋Š” ์ ์  ๋” ์ฒจ๋‹จํ™”๋˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ
03:52
which were done by folks in the past.
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๊ณผ๊ฑฐ์— ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ–ˆ๋˜ ๋งŽ์€ ์ž‘์—…์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:54
Finished!
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์™„์„ฑ๋œ!
03:55
What a great paraphrase!
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์ •๋ง ๋Œ€๋‹จํ•œ ์˜์—ญ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
03:57
No, no, no!
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์•„๋‹ˆ, ์•„๋‹ˆ!
03:58
This is terrible, and it will only hurt your IELTS score.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋”์ฐํ•˜๋ฉฐ IELTS ์ ์ˆ˜์—๋งŒ ํ•ด๋ฅผ ๋ผ์น  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
04:03
Donโ€™t do this!
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์ด๋Ÿฌ์ง€ ๋งˆ!
04:05
This is what many IELTS students do, but itโ€™s a bad idea.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋งŽ์€ IELTS ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ํ•˜๋Š” ์ผ์ด์ง€๋งŒ ๋‚˜์œ ์ƒ๊ฐ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:10
Letโ€™s see why this doesnโ€™t work.
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์™œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์ž‘๋™ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
04:13
First, a question: whatโ€™s a synonym?
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๋จผ์ € ์งˆ๋ฌธ: ๋™์˜์–ด๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ๊ฐ€์š”?
04:19
You probably said something like, โ€œa word with the same meaning as another word.โ€
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์•„๋งˆ๋„ " ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง„ ๋‹จ์–ด"์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ง์„ ํ–ˆ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:23
Thatโ€™s more or less true.
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์–ด๋Š ์ •๋„ ์‚ฌ์‹ค์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:25
However, a true synonym is a word which can replace another word in any sentence.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ์ง„์ •ํ•œ ๋™์˜์–ด๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:30
So, imagine you have two words: A and B.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ A์™€ B๋ผ๋Š” ๋‘ ๋‹จ์–ด๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ์ƒํ•ด ๋ณด์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
04:33
If word A can be replaced with word B in any sentence, theyโ€™re synonyms.
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์–ด๋–ค ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ A๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ B๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋กœ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋™์˜์–ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:38
If word A can be replaced with word B sometimes, but not always, theyโ€™re not true synonyms.
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๋‹จ์–ด A๊ฐ€ ๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ ๋‹จ์–ด B๋กœ ๋Œ€์ฒด๋  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ํ•ญ์ƒ ๊ทธ๋ ‡์ง€๋Š” ์•Š๋‹ค๋ฉด ์ง„์ •ํ•œ ๋™์˜์–ด๊ฐ€ ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:44
Maybe they have a similar meaning, but they arenโ€™t the same.
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๋น„์Šทํ•œ ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์งˆ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๋™์ผํ•˜์ง€๋Š” ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:47
Whatโ€™s the point of all this?
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์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์˜ ์š”์ ์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
04:49
The point is that there are very few true synonyms in English, or any language.
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์š”์ ์€ ์˜์–ด๋‚˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์–ธ์–ด์—๋Š” ์ง„์ •ํ•œ ๋™์˜์–ด๊ฐ€ ๊ฑฐ์˜ ์—†๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:56
Just because two words have the same meaning does not mean they can be used in the same
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๋‘ ๋‹จ์–ด๊ฐ€ ๊ฐ™์€ ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ–๋Š”๋‹ค๊ณ  ํ•ด์„œ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:03
way.
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.
05:04
The words people and folks have the same basic meaning, but that doesnโ€™t mean that you
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ๊ณผ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด์˜ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์ธ ์˜๋ฏธ๋Š” ๋™์ผํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ
05:10
can say folks any time you say people.
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ๋•Œ๋งˆ๋‹ค ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์„ ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ์˜๋ฏธ๋Š” ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:14
They arenโ€™t true synonyms.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ์ง„์ •ํ•œ ๋™์˜์–ด๊ฐ€ ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:18
Why not?
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์™œ ์•ˆ ๋ผ?
05:19
Because vocabulary usage depends on more than just meaning.
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์–ดํœ˜ ์‚ฌ์šฉ์€ ๋‹จ์ˆœํ•œ ์˜๋ฏธ ์ด์ƒ์— ๋‹ฌ๋ ค ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
05:24
Register and collocation are equally important.
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๋ ˆ์ง€์Šคํ„ฐ์™€ ๋ฐฐ์—ด๋„ ๋˜‘๊ฐ™์ด ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:29
Also, many words which have a similar meaning donโ€™t have exactly the same meaning.
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๋˜ํ•œ ๋น„์Šทํ•œ ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง„ ๋งŽ์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๊ฐ€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ๊ฐ™์€ ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ–์ง€๋Š” ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:34
Machine and apparatus are similar, but they arenโ€™t the same.
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๊ธฐ๊ณ„์™€ ์žฅ์น˜๋Š” ๋น„์Šทํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๊ฐ™์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:38
Job and assignment are similar, but they arenโ€™t the same.
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์ง์—…๊ณผ ์ž„๋ฌด๋Š” ๋น„์Šทํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๊ฐ™์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:41
So, thatโ€™s problem number one.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๋ฌธ์ œ 1๋ฒˆ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:44
When you use words that you think are synonyms, they probably arenโ€™t true synonyms.
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๋™์˜์–ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด ์‹ค์ œ ๋™์˜์–ด๊ฐ€ ์•„๋‹ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:49
That means youโ€™re changing the meaningโ€”which is dangerousโ€”and also making language mistakes,
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์ฆ‰, ์œ„ํ—˜ํ•œ ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๋ณ€๊ฒฝ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์–ธ์–ด ์‹ค์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ํ•˜์—ฌ
05:54
which can hurt your vocabulary score.
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์–ดํœ˜ ์ ์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋–จ์–ด๋œจ๋ฆด ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:55
Thereโ€™s a second problem: this is a really weird and unnatural thing to do.
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๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์ •๋ง ์ด์ƒํ•˜๊ณ  ๋ถ€์ž์—ฐ์Šค๋Ÿฌ์šด ์ผ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:01
Imagine someone asks you a question.
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๋ˆ„๊ตฐ๊ฐ€ ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ์ƒํ•ด ๋ณด์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
06:04
What do you do?
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๋„ˆ ๋ญํ•˜๋‹ˆ?
06:05
Do you repeat the question back, using different words?
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๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋‹ค์‹œ ๋ฐ˜๋ณตํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
06:10
Hey!
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์š”!
06:11
How was your weekend?
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์ฃผ๋ง์€ ์–ด๋• ์–ด?
06:13
Ahโ€ฆ
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์•„...
06:14
You wish to enquire about my recent non-working days?
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์ตœ๊ทผ ๋‚ด ํœด๋ฌด์ผ์„ ๋ฌผ์–ด๋ณผ๋ž˜ ?
06:18
Howโ€™s the weather in the US?
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๋ฏธ๊ตญ์˜ ๋‚ ์”จ๋Š” ์–ด๋–ป์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
06:21
Soโ€ฆ
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œโ€ฆ ๋ถ๋ฏธ์˜
06:22
You want to know about the climatic conditions in North America?
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๊ธฐํ›„ ์กฐ๊ฑด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์•Œ๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
06:25
No!
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์•„๋‹ˆ์š”!
06:26
This is weird!
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์ด์ƒํ•˜๋‹ค!
06:27
When someone asks you a question, you answer the question.
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๋ˆ„๊ตฐ๊ฐ€ ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๊ทธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋Œ€๋‹ตํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:31
Your IELTS essay is the same.
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๋‹น์‹ ์˜ IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ๋™์ผํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:34
The task asks you a question.
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์ž‘์—…์—์„œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:36
Your essay should answer the question.
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๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋‹ตํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:39
Your answer starts from your first sentence.
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๋‹ต์€ ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ ์‹œ์ž‘๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:45
Bad paraphrase adds nothing to your answer.
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์ž˜๋ชป๋œ ์˜์—ญ์€ ๋‹ต๋ณ€์— ์•„๋ฌด๊ฒƒ๋„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:48
No paraphrase is better than bad paraphrase.
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๋‚˜์œ ์˜์—ญ๋ณด๋‹ค ๋‚˜์€ ์˜์—ญ์€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:52
A bad paraphrase is only an empty sentence with language mistakes.
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์ž˜๋ชป๋œ ์˜์—ญ์€ ์–ธ์–ด ์˜ค๋ฅ˜๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋นˆ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ผ ๋ฟ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
06:56
Thatโ€™s all the examiner will see.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ์‹œํ—˜๊ด€์ด ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ์ „๋ถ€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:58
For your IELTS score, this is only negative.
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IELTS ์ ์ˆ˜์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด๋Š” ์Œ์ˆ˜์ผ ๋ฟ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:01
Ok, you think, so how do I start my essay?
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์ž, ๊ทธ๋Ÿผ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ด์•ผ ํ• ๊นŒ์š”?
07:05
You have two options, and it depends on your target score.
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๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์˜ต์…˜์ด ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ๋ชฉํ‘œ ์ ์ˆ˜์— ๋”ฐ๋ผ ๋‹ค๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
07:08
Letโ€™s look.
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ํ•œ๋ฒˆ ๋ณด์ž.
07:13
This is going to be a short section.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์งง์€ ์„น์…˜์ด ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:15
If your target score is 6 or maybe 6.5, and you donโ€™t know how to start your essay,
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๋ชฉํ‘œ ์ ์ˆ˜๊ฐ€ 6 ๋˜๋Š” 6.5์ด๊ณ  ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ชจ๋ฅธ๋‹ค๋ฉด
07:22
hereโ€™s what you do:
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๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
07:25
Write an introduction which is one sentence.
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ํ•œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ๋œ ์„œ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
07:28
Write a thesis statement.
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๋…ผ๋ฌธ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
07:31
That means you explain what youโ€™re going to talk about and what youโ€™re trying to
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์ฆ‰, ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ํ†ตํ•ด ๋ฌด์—‡์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๊ณ  ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์ฆ๋ช…ํ•˜๋ ค๊ณ  ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:36
prove with your essay.
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.
07:39
For example:
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์˜ˆ:
07:41
In this essay, I will discuss possible solutions to the problems caused by robots and computers
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์ด ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ๋‚˜๋Š” ๋กœ๋ด‡๊ณผ ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ๊ฐ€
07:47
taking peopleโ€™s jobs.
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์˜ ์ผ์ž๋ฆฌ๋ฅผ ๋นผ์•—์•„ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฌธ์ œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋…ผ์˜ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:49
Or: I intend to show that the problems caused by robots and computers taking peopleโ€™s
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๋˜๋Š”: ์ธ๊ฐ„์˜ ์ผ์ž๋ฆฌ๋ฅผ ๋นผ์•—๋Š” ๋กœ๋ด‡๊ณผ ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€
07:54
jobs are serious, but also possible to solve.
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์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•  ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Œ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๊ณ ์ž ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:58
Or even: Robots and computers are replacing people at work.
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๋˜๋Š” ๋กœ๋ด‡๊ณผ ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ๊ฐ€ ์ง์žฅ์—์„œ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์„ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:02
This is a serious problem, and I will discuss how we can solve it.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ์ด๋ฉฐ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:07
Thatโ€™s all you need.
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๊ทธ๊ฒŒ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•œ ์ „๋ถ€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:09
But, you say, isnโ€™t that too short?
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ์งง์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
08:12
Noโ€”not at all.
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์•„๋‹ˆ์š”. ์ „ํ˜€ ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:14
First of all, your introduction can be any length.
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์šฐ์„ , ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์†Œ๊ฐœ๋Š” ์–ผ๋งˆ๋“ ์ง€ ๋  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
08:17
Your introduction can be one sentence.
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์†Œ๊ฐœ๋Š” ํ•œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
08:19
Hereโ€™s an important point: your introduction is the least important part of your IELTS
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์†Œ๊ฐœ๋Š” IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์€ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
08:24
essay.
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08:26
Are the example introductions you saw above great?
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์œ„์—์„œ ๋ณธ ์˜ˆ์ œ ์†Œ๊ฐœ๊ฐ€ ํ›Œ๋ฅญํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
08:30
No.
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08:30
Theyโ€™re not great, but they are easily good enough.
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์•„๋‹ˆ์š”.
ํ›Œ๋ฅญํ•˜์ง€๋Š” ์•Š์ง€๋งŒ ์‰ฝ๊ฒŒ ์ถฉ๋ถ„ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:35
Your conclusion is super-important.
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๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์€ ๋งค์šฐ ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:38
How you organise your ideas into paragraphs is very important.
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์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์œผ๋กœ ๊ตฌ์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ๋งค์šฐ ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:42
How you support and connect your ideas is extremely important.
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์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์ง€์›ํ•˜๊ณ  ์—ฐ๊ฒฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ๋งค์šฐ ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:47
Your introduction is not that important.
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๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์†Œ๊ฐœ๋Š” ๊ทธ๋‹ค์ง€ ์ค‘์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:49
You can get a high score with a very basic introduction.
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์•„์ฃผ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์ธ ์†Œ๊ฐœ๋งŒ์œผ๋กœ๋„ ๋†’์€ ์ ์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋ฐ›์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
08:52
So, hereโ€™s a simple solution: if you donโ€™t know what to write in your IELTS essay introduction,
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๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด ์†Œ๊ฐœ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์จ์•ผ ํ• ์ง€ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ๋‹ค๋ฉด
08:58
donโ€™t write much at all.
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๋งŽ์ด ์“ฐ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
09:00
Write a short thesis statement, and then start the body of your essay.
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์งง์€ ๋…ผ์ œ ์„œ์ˆ ๋ฌธ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•œ ๋‹ค์Œ ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ์„ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
09:04
This is good advice if your target is 6 or 6.5, but what if youโ€™re aiming for a higher
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๋ชฉํ‘œ๊ฐ€ 6 ๋˜๋Š” 6.5๋ผ๋ฉด ์ข‹์€ ์กฐ์–ธ์ด์ง€๋งŒ ๋” ๋†’์€ ์ ์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋ชฉํ‘œ๋กœ ํ•œ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์–ด๋–จ๊นŒ์š”
09:10
score?
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?
09:13
So, what does effective paraphrase look like?
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๋‹ค๋ฉด ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ธ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ฆˆ๋Š” ์–ด๋–ค ๋ชจ์Šต์ผ๊นŒ์š”? ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์—์„œ ๊ฐ•๋ ฅํ•œ IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด
09:17
Remember, youโ€™re thinking about writing a strong IELTS essay here.
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์ž‘์„ฑ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Œ์„ ๊ธฐ์–ตํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค .
09:23
That means an essay which scores between seven and nine.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ 7์ ์—์„œ 9์  ์‚ฌ์ด์˜ ์ ์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋ฐ›์€ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
09:27
Hereโ€™s the thing: when you write a strong essay, you canโ€™t think about it as lots
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์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ฐ•๋ ฅํ•œ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ๋•Œ ๋งŽ์€ ๊ฐœ๋ณ„ ํ•ญ๋ชฉ์œผ๋กœ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์—†๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
09:34
of separate things.
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09:36
Lots of IELTS students write essays in this way: โ€œOk, first I have to paraphrase the
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๋งŽ์€ IELTS ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ
09:41
question, then I need to write a thesis statement.
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์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:44
Ok, first body paragraph: I need a topic sentence, then a supporting example, then a linking
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์ข‹์•„, ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ: ์ฃผ์ œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•˜๊ณ , ๊ทธ ๋‹ค์Œ์—๋Š” ์ง€์› ์˜ˆ, ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ
09:50
phrase, then a second supporting exampleโ€ฆ et cetera.โ€
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๋ฌธ๊ตฌ, ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์ง€์› ์˜ˆ ๋“ฑ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.โ€
09:55
That can work for intermediate IELTS scores: 5.5 to 6.5, but itโ€™s not a good approach
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5.5์—์„œ 6.5 ์‚ฌ์ด์˜ ์ค‘๊ธ‰ IELTS ์ ์ˆ˜์—๋Š” ํšจ๊ณผ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ
10:01
for higher scores.
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๋” ๋†’์€ ์ ์ˆ˜์—๋Š” ์ ํ•ฉํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:02
For higher scores, your essay needs to be one coherent, connected piece.
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๋” ๋†’์€ ์ ์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋ฐ›์œผ๋ ค๋ฉด ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ํ•˜๋‚˜์˜ ์ผ๊ด€๋˜๊ณ  ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:07
What does that mean, practically?
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ์‹ค์งˆ์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
10:09
And what does it have to do with paraphrasing?
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•๊ณผ ์–ด๋–ค ๊ด€๋ จ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
10:12
First point: your first sentence should be connected to everything else in your essay.
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์š”์ : ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์€ ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ๊ณผ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋˜์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:18
That means you need to know exactly where your essay is going before you start writing.
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์ฆ‰, ์“ฐ๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์ „์— ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์–ด๋””๋กœ ๊ฐ€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ์•Œ์•„์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:25
Before you put one word on the page, you need to know all the important things you want
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ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ž…๋ ฅํ•˜๊ธฐ ์ „์— ๋งํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ๋ชจ๋“  ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๋‚ด์šฉ์„ ์•Œ์•„์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
10:30
to say.
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10:32
Practically, that means you need to know what your conclusion is going to be before you
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์‹ค์งˆ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ด๋Š” ๊ธ€์“ฐ๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์ „์— ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์ด ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋ ์ง€ ์•Œ์•„์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
10:39
start writing.
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10:41
You also need to know exactly how many body paragraphs youโ€™re going to have, and what
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๋˜ํ•œ ์–ผ๋งˆ๋‚˜ ๋งŽ์€ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์„ ๊ฐ€์งˆ ๊ฒƒ์ธ์ง€,
10:48
youโ€™re going to put in each one.
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๊ฐ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ๋„ฃ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ธ์ง€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ์•Œ์•„์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:51
To be clear, that means when you write your first sentence, you arenโ€™t just thinking,
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ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ๋งํ•˜์ž๋ฉด, ์ฒซ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์“ธ ๋•Œ
10:57
โ€œHow can I find a synonym for this word?โ€
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"์ด ๋‹จ์–ด์˜ ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ฐพ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์„๊นŒ์š”?"๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ๋Š” ๋œป์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:00
Good paraphrasing isnโ€™t about that.
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์ข‹์€ ์˜์—ญ์€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋„๋‹ฌ
11:04
You already know the conclusion you want to reach, and you know the ideas you want to
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ํ•˜๋ ค๋Š” ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ด๋ฏธ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ณ  ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๋ ค๋Š” ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
11:10
discuss.
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11:12
Effective paraphrasing includes this.
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ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ธ ์˜์—ญ์—๋Š” ๋‹ค์Œ์ด ํฌํ•จ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:14
It shows your readerโ€”the examinersโ€”where your essay is going.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์–ด๋””๋กœ ๊ฐ€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๋…์ž(์‹œํ—˜๊ด€)๋ฅผ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
11:19
Effective paraphrasing shows how you understand the key ideas in the question, and what conclusion
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ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ธ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์€ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์˜ ํ•ต์‹ฌ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•๊ณผ
11:24
your essay is trying to reach.
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์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ๋„๋‹ฌํ•˜๋ ค๋Š” ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:26
So, the main point: paraphrasing depends on planning.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์š”์ ์€ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์€ ๊ณ„ํš์— ๋‹ฌ๋ ค ์žˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
11:29
Itโ€™s not a simple thing; itโ€™s not just taking some words and replacing them with
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๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•œ ์ผ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹จ์ˆœํžˆ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ ธ์™€
11:34
other wordsโ€”itโ€™s connected to other parts of your essay.
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๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋กœ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ถ€๋ถ„๊ณผ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
11:37
Itโ€™s connected to your ideas and opinions.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์ƒ๊ฐ๊ณผ ์˜๊ฒฌ๊ณผ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:40
If you donโ€™t know the conclusion of your essay, you canโ€™t write a good introduction.
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์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๋ฉด ์ข‹์€ ์„œ๋ก ์„ ์“ธ ์ˆ˜ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:44
To write a good introduction, you need to know exactly where youโ€™re trying to go.
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์ข‹์€ ์„œ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ์–ด๋””๋กœ ๊ฐ€๋ ค๊ณ  ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ์•Œ์•„์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:48
Letโ€™s see how this can work in practice.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์‹ค์ œ๋กœ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ž‘๋™ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
11:52
To paraphrase effectively, you need to take the ideas in the question and add your own
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ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์œผ๋กœ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•ํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์˜ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์ทจํ•˜๊ณ  ์ž์‹ ์˜
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interpretation.
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ํ•ด์„์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:59
Hereโ€™s the question you saw before: Some questions:
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์ด์ „์— ๋ณธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์งˆ๋ฌธ:
12:05
The question talks about robots, computers, and machines.
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๋กœ๋ด‡, ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ ๋ฐ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
12:09
What do these words mean in this context?
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์ด ๋ฌธ๋งฅ์—์„œ ์ด ๋‹จ์–ด๋“ค์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
12:12
Can you think of specific examples?
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๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ธ ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
12:16
What exactly does advanced mean?
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๊ณ ๊ธ‰์ด๋ž€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
12:19
Advanced in what way?
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์–ด๋–ค ๋ฉด์—์„œ ๊ณ ๊ธ‰?
12:21
The question mentions jobs which used to be done by people.
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ํ•˜๋˜ ์ผ์„ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
12:25
Like what?
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๋ฌด์—‡์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ?
12:27
The question asks: what problems does this cause?
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ์–ด๋–ค ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
12:30
Are these problems serious, or not?
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์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ๊ฐ€์š”? ๊ทธ
12:33
Why or why not?
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์ด์œ ๋Š” ๋ฌด์—‡?
12:35
Pause the video and think about these.
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๋น„๋””์˜ค๋ฅผ ์ผ์‹œ ์ค‘์ง€ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด ๋ณด์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
12:38
If you want to write a good introduction, you need to have clear answers to all of these
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์ข‹์€ ์„œ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ๋‹ต์ด ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
12:44
questions!
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!
12:45
Now, letโ€™s see how you could effectively paraphrase this question:
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์ด์ œ ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง๋กœ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
12:49
Advances in technology have led to the automation of many jobs, especially low-level or manual
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๊ธฐ์ˆ ์˜ ๋ฐœ์ „์œผ๋กœ ๋งŽ์€ ์ž‘์—…, ํŠนํžˆ ๋‚ฎ์€ ์ˆ˜์ค€์˜ ์ž‘์—…์ด๋‚˜ ์ˆ˜๋™
12:54
positions.
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์ž‘์—…์ด ์ž๋™ํ™”๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:55
This has led to many serious problems, including unemployment and increasing rates of poverty
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์ด๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ์‹ค์—…, ๋นˆ๊ณค์œจ
13:00
and inequality.
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๋ฐ ๋ถˆํ‰๋“ฑ ์ฆ๊ฐ€ ๋“ฑ ๋งŽ์€ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:02
This is what a good paraphrase looks like.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์ข‹์€ ์˜์—ญ์˜ ๋ชจ์Šต์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:05
Hereโ€™s a question: which way do you think this essay is going?
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์–ด๋–ค ๋ฐฉํ–ฅ์œผ๋กœ ๊ฐ€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
13:09
Do you think the writer will be positive, negative or neutral about the effects of automation?
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์ž‘๊ฐ€๊ฐ€ ์ž๋™ํ™”์˜ ์˜ํ–ฅ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๊ธ์ •์ , ๋ถ€์ •์  ๋˜๋Š” ์ค‘๋ฆฝ์ ์ผ ๊ฒƒ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
13:16
It sounds negative.
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๋ถ€์ •์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋“ค๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:18
You can guess that the essay will conclude that automation causes serious problems which
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์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ์ž๋™ํ™”๊ฐ€ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ธฐ ์‰ฝ์ง€ ์•Š์€ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์•ผ๊ธฐํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ๋‚ด๋ฆด ๊ฒƒ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ง์ž‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
13:23
are not easy to solve.
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.
13:26
Someone who reads the first sentence of your introduction should be able to do the same
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์„œ๋ก ์˜ ์ฒซ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์ฝ๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋„ ๊ฐ™์€ ์ผ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
13:31
thing; they should be able to guess where your essay is going.
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. ๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์–ด๋””๋กœ ๊ฐ€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ์ถ”์ธกํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:37
Remember: this starts in your head.
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๊ธฐ์–ตํ•˜์„ธ์š”: ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๋จธ๋ฆฌ์—์„œ ์‹œ์ž‘๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๊ธฐ ์ „์—
13:41
Everything needs to be clear in your head before you write anything.
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๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋จธ๋ฆฟ์†์—์„œ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
13:47
Another point to notice: our paraphrase doesnโ€™t have the same sentence structure as the task.
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์ฃผ๋ชฉํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ๋˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ ์€ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์˜์—ญ์ด ์ž‘์—…๊ณผ ๋™์ผํ•œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ์ง€ ์•Š๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:52
The paraphrase is two sentences, while the task is just one.
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์˜์—ญ์€ ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด๊ณ  ์ž‘์—…์€ ํ•œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:56
The task asks a question: โ€œWhat problems does this cause?โ€
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์ด ์ž‘์—…์€ "์ด๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ์–ด๋–ค ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"๋ผ๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋˜์ง‘๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:00
Our paraphrase replaces this with a statement: โ€œThis has led to many serious problems.โ€
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์˜์—ญ์€ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ โ€œ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋งŽ์€ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์•ผ๊ธฐํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.โ€๋ผ๋Š” ์ง„์ˆ ๋กœ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:06
Also, our paraphrase replaces general ideas in the question with more specific ideas.
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๋˜ํ•œ, ์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์˜์—ญ์€ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์˜ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ๋ณด๋‹ค ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋กœ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:11
The question mentions โ€œmany jobs,โ€ but our paraphrase talks about โ€œlow-level or
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ "๋งŽ์€ ์ง์—…"์„ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์˜์—ญ์€ "๋‚ฎ์€ ์ˆ˜์ค€ ๋˜๋Š”
14:16
manual positions.โ€
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์ˆ˜๋™ ์œ„์น˜"์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋งํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:18
The question mentions โ€œproblems,โ€ but our paraphrase talks about โ€œserious problems,
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ "๋ฌธ์ œ"๋ฅผ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์˜์—ญ์€ "
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including unemployment and inequality.โ€
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์‹ค์—…๊ณผ ๋ถˆํ‰๋“ฑ์„ ํฌํ•จํ•œ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ"์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋งํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:26
To review, to write an effective paraphrase, you need to do three things:
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ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ธ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ฆˆ๋ฅผ ๊ฒ€ํ† ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ๋‹ค์Œ ์„ธ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋ฅผ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:32
One: have a clear plan in your head, with a clear conclusion, which should be obvious
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ํ•˜๋‚˜๋Š” ๋จธ๋ฆฟ์†์— ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ๊ณ„ํš๊ณผ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์ด ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Š” ์—์„ธ์ด
14:38
to your reader from the first sentence of your essay.
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์˜ ์ฒซ ๋ฌธ์žฅ๋ถ€ํ„ฐ ๋…์ž์—๊ฒŒ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
14:42
Two: donโ€™t try to stick too closely to the sentence structure in the question.
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๋‘˜์งธ, ์งˆ๋ฌธ์˜ ๋ฌธ์žฅ ๊ตฌ์กฐ์— ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ์ง‘์ฐฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” .
14:47
Paraphrasing is about ideas, not just words.
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ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ง•์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๊ฐ€ ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:50
Three: interpret and develop the ideas in the task, so that you replace general ideas
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์„ธ ๋ฒˆ์งธ: ์ž‘์—…์˜ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ํ•ด์„ํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ฐœ๋ฐœํ•˜์—ฌ
14:56
in the task with your own more specific ones.
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์ž‘์—…์˜ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์ž์‹ ์˜ ๋ณด๋‹ค ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋กœ ๋Œ€์ฒดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:00
Now, you should understand more about how to paraphrase in your IELTS essay.
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์ด์ œ IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ํŒจ๋Ÿฌํ”„๋ ˆ์ด์ฆˆํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋” ๋งŽ์ด ์ดํ•ดํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:06
Good luck if you have an IELTS exam coming up soon!
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IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์ด ๊ณง ๋‹ค๊ฐ€์˜จ๋‹ค๋ฉด ํ–‰์šด์„ ๋น•๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ! ์˜ฅ์Šคํผ๋“œ ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ ์˜์–ด ๋‹ท ์ปด ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ์—์„œ IELTS ์ค€๋น„ ์ˆ˜์—…์„
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You can find more free English lessons, including IELTS preparation lessons, on our website:
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ํฌํ•จํ•œ ๋” ๋งŽ์€ ๋ฌด๋ฃŒ ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ์ฐพ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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Oxford Online English dot com.
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15:17
Thanks for watching!
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์‹œ์ฒญ ํ•ด์ฃผ์…”์„œ ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
15:18
See you next time!
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