Email: Invitations and Requests - Improve Your English Writing Skills

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English with Jennifer


μ•„λž˜ μ˜λ¬Έμžλ§‰μ„ λ”λΈ”ν΄λ¦­ν•˜μ‹œλ©΄ μ˜μƒμ΄ μž¬μƒλ©λ‹ˆλ‹€. λ²ˆμ—­λœ μžλ§‰μ€ 기계 λ²ˆμ—­λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.

00:01
When you're making a request or giving an invitation,
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μš”μ²­μ„ ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ μ΄ˆλŒ€λ₯Ό ν•  λ•Œ
00:05
your word choice can make the difference between
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단어 선택에 따라
00:07
getting and not getting what you want.
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μ›ν•˜λŠ” 것을 μ–»κ±°λ‚˜ 얻지 λͺ»ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:11
I'm going to show you two versions of the same message.
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λ™μΌν•œ λ©”μ‹œμ§€μ˜ 두 가지 버전을 보여 λ“œλ¦¬κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:15
I'd like you think - - which one would you respond to more positively. And why?
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μ–΄λŠ μͺ½μ΄ 더 κΈμ •μ μœΌλ‘œ λ°˜μ‘ν• μ§€ μƒκ°ν•΄λ³΄μ…¨μœΌλ©΄ ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. 그리고 μ™œ?
00:23
Subject: Cookie exchange
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제λͺ©: μΏ ν‚€ κ΅ν™˜ 이
01:26
Hopefully, you agree that this second version is stronger.
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두 번째 버전이 더 κ°•λ ₯ν•˜λ‹€λŠ” 데 λ™μ˜ν•˜μ‹œκΈ°λ₯Ό λ°”λžλ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:30
Longer doesn't always mean better.
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더 κΈΈλ‹€λŠ” 것이 항상 더 λ‚˜μ€ 것을 μ˜λ―Έν•˜μ§€λŠ” μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:32
But in this second draft, Laura took the time to include
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ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ 이 두 번째 μ΄ˆμ•ˆμ—μ„œ LauraλŠ”
01:36
a friendly greeting and a more polite invitation.
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μΉœκ·Όν•œ 인사와 μ •μ€‘ν•œ μ΄ˆλŒ€λ₯Ό ν¬ν•¨ν•˜λŠ” 데 μ‹œκ°„μ„ λ“€μ˜€μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:41
She's not really being formal.
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κ·Έλ…€λŠ” μ •λ§λ‘œ ν˜•μ‹μ μ΄μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:43
But she wrote more because it's helpful to explain the event
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κ·ΈλŸ¬λ‚˜ κ·Έλ…€λŠ” 이벀트λ₯Ό μ„€λͺ…
01:48
and mention some details.
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ν•˜κ³  λͺ‡ 가지 μ„ΈλΆ€ 사항을 μ–ΈκΈ‰ν•˜λŠ” 것이 도움이 되기 λ•Œλ¬Έμ— 더 많이 μΌμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:51
Her neighbors will likely respond positively to this message.
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κ·Έλ…€μ˜ 이웃듀은 이 λ©”μ‹œμ§€μ— 긍정적인 λ°˜μ‘μ„ 보일 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:56
Take a look at one reply.
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λ‹΅κΈ€ ν•œ 번 λ³΄μ„Έμš”.
02:31
Making requests and giving invitations are common in both personal and business email.
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μš”μ²­μ„ ν•˜κ³  μ΄ˆλŒ€λ₯Ό ν•˜λŠ” 것은 개인 및 λΉ„μ¦ˆλ‹ˆμŠ€ 이메일 λͺ¨λ‘μ—μ„œ μΌλ°˜μ μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
02:37
Remember who you're writing to and find the right tone.
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λˆ„κ΅¬μ—κ²Œ νŽΈμ§€λ₯Ό μ“°λŠ”μ§€ κΈ°μ–΅ν•˜κ³  μ˜¬λ°”λ₯Έ μ–΄μ‘°λ₯Ό μ°ΎμœΌμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
02:42
Should you be very polite and formal?
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맀우 μ •μ€‘ν•˜κ³  격식을 μ°¨λ €μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
02:44
Can you be polite but friendly?
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κ³΅μ†ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ μΉœμ ˆν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
02:47
Be brief, but always be nice.
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μ§§μ§€λ§Œ 항상 μΉœμ ˆν•˜μ„Έμš”.
02:51
If you're writing an invitation, remember to include one or two pleasantries.
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μ΄ˆλŒ€μž₯을 μž‘μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 경우 ν•œλ‘ 가지 μœ μΎŒν•œ 말을 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜λŠ” 것을 μžŠμ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
02:57
Share important details, but you don't have to share everything right away.
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μ€‘μš”ν•œ μ„ΈλΆ€ 정보λ₯Ό κ³΅μœ ν•˜λ˜ λͺ¨λ“  것을 μ¦‰μ‹œ κ³΅μœ ν•  ν•„μš”λŠ” μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:02
Wait till you hear back.
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λ‹΅μž₯이 듀릴 λ•ŒκΉŒμ§€ κΈ°λ‹€λ¦¬μ„Έμš”.
03:05
Once the person accepts your invitation,
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κ·Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ΄ μ΄ˆλŒ€λ₯Ό μˆ˜λ½ν•˜λ©΄ λ‚˜λ¨Έμ§€
03:07
then you can share all the remaining details.
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μ„ΈλΆ€ 정보λ₯Ό λͺ¨λ‘ κ³΅μœ ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:10
So just share the most important ones first.
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λ”°λΌμ„œ κ°€μž₯ μ€‘μš”ν•œ 것을 λ¨Όμ € κ³΅μœ ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
03:16
If you're writing a request, make it clear
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μš”μ²­μ„ μž‘μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 경우 λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ²Œ μž‘μ„±
03:20
and make it toward the beginning of your message.
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ν•˜κ³  λ©”μ‹œμ§€μ˜ μ‹œμž‘ 뢀뢄에 μž‘μ„±ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
03:22
So don't waste words.
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κ·ΈλŸ¬λ‹ˆ 말을 λ‚­λΉ„ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš”.
03:24
You can be polite, but get to the point.
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예의 λ°”λ₯΄κ²Œ 말할 수 μžˆμ§€λ§Œ μš”μ μ„ λ§ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
03:28
Explain your request as necessary.
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ν•„μš”μ— 따라 κ·€ν•˜μ˜ μš”μ²­μ„ μ„€λͺ…ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
03:31
If the person is likely to say yes, you can thank them in advance.
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κ·Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ΄ 예라고 λŒ€λ‹΅ν•  것 κ°™μœΌλ©΄ 미리 감사 인사λ₯Ό μ „ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:39
If you're not sure... The person could say no.
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ν™•μ‹€ν•˜μ§€ μ•Šμ€ 경우... κ·Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ€ μ•„λ‹ˆμ˜€λΌκ³  말할 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:42
Maybe you're asking too much.
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μ–΄μ©Œλ©΄ 당신은 λ„ˆλ¬΄ 많이 μš”κ΅¬ν•˜κ³  μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:44
So you could even apologize and say:
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λ”°λΌμ„œ μ‚¬κ³Όν•˜κ³  λ‹€μŒκ³Ό 같이 말할 μˆ˜λ„ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:55
Here are some other phrases you can use in these kinds of emails.
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μ΄λŸ¬ν•œ μ’…λ₯˜μ˜ 이메일에 μ‚¬μš©ν•  수 μžˆλŠ” λ‹€λ₯Έ 문ꡬ가 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:23
Let's look at one more model, a request.
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ν•˜λ‚˜ 더 λͺ¨λΈμΈ μš”μ²­μ„ μ‚΄νŽ΄λ³΄κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:27
You'll see how the tone changes when it's more a business-related matter.
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λΉ„μ¦ˆλ‹ˆμŠ€μ™€ κ΄€λ ¨λœ 문제일 λ•Œ μ–΄μ‘°κ°€ μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ λ³€ν•˜λŠ”μ§€ 확인할 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:35
Subject: Library volunteers needed.
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제λͺ©: λ„μ„œκ΄€ μžμ›λ΄‰μ‚¬μžκ°€ ν•„μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:23
There's an appropriate greeting, but then Ms. Stiller gets right to the point.
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μ μ ˆν•œ 인사말이 μžˆμ§€λ§Œ, Ms. Stillerκ°€ λ°”λ‘œ 본둠으둜 λ“€μ–΄κ°‘λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:28
The school needs volunteers.
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ν•™κ΅λŠ” μžμ›λ΄‰μ‚¬μžκ°€ ν•„μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:33
Some explanation follows, and then
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λͺ‡ 가지 μ„€λͺ…이 이어지고
07:35
there's a clear call to action:
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λͺ…ν™•ν•œ 행동 μœ λ„κ°€ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:38
respond to this message if you're interested.
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관심이 있으면 이 λ©”μ‹œμ§€μ— μ‘λ‹΅ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
07:44
A final pleasantry and a polite closing come before the signature.
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λ§ˆμ§€λ§‰ ν™˜λ‹΄κ³Ό κ³΅μ†ν•œ λ§ˆλ¬΄λ¦¬κ°€ μ„œλͺ… 전에 λ‚˜μ˜΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:49
This is a model of a clear request with the right degree of formality.
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이것은 μ˜¬λ°”λ₯Έ μ •λ„μ˜ ν˜•μ‹μ„ κ°–μΆ˜ λͺ…ν™•ν•œ μš”μ²­μ˜ λͺ¨λΈμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:59
I hope you found everything helpful.
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λͺ¨λ“  것이 도움이 λ˜μ—ˆκΈ°λ₯Ό λ°”λžλ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:02
That's all for now.
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μ§€κΈˆμ€ μ—¬κΈ°κΉŒμ§€μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ‹œμ²­
08:03
Thanks for watching and happy studies!
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ν•΄μ£Όμ…”μ„œ κ°μ‚¬ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. 즐거운 κ³΅λΆ€ν•˜μ„Έμš”!
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