Emails in English - How to Write an Email in English - Business English Writing

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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Hi, I'm Mike.
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์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š”, ์ €๋Š” ๋งˆ์ดํฌ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:02
Welcome to Oxford Online English.
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์˜ฅ์Šคํฌ๋“œ ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ ์˜์–ด์— ์˜ค์‹  ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ™˜์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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In this lesson, you can learn how to write an email in English.
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์ด ๋‹จ์›์—์„œ๋Š” ์˜์–ด๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ฐฐ์šธ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
00:11
Do you need to write emails at work?
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์ง์žฅ์—์„œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
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Are you worried that your emails arenโ€™t clear, or that you make mistakes in English?
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์˜์–ด๋กœ ์‹ค์ˆ˜ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๊ฑฑ์ •๋˜์‹œ๋‚˜์š”?
00:20
In this lesson, you can see a how to write clear, natural-sounding emails easily and
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์ด ๋ ˆ์Šจ์—์„œ๋Š” ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ž์—ฐ์Šค๋Ÿฌ์šด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์‰ฝ๊ณ 
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quickly.
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๋น ๋ฅด๊ฒŒ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ง€๊ธˆ ๋ฐ”๋กœ ๋”ฐ๋ผํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”
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Weโ€™ll show you how to write an email in English from beginning to end, in simple,
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๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•˜๊ณ  ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ๋‹จ๊ณ„๋ฅผ ํ†ตํ•ด ์ฒ˜์Œ๋ถ€ํ„ฐ ๋๊นŒ์ง€ ์˜์–ด๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
00:35
clear steps that you can follow right now!
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!
00:40
Letโ€™s start at the beginning.
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์ฒ˜์Œ๋ถ€ํ„ฐ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:47
With emails, you can start like a letter.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด ํŽธ์ง€์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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For example:
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์˜ˆ:
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Dear Lina, Dear Sir/Madam,
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Dear Lina, Dear Sir/Madam,
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Dear Mr Hill,
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Dear Mr Hill,
00:58
However, emails are generally much less formal than letters.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์€ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ ํŽธ์ง€๋ณด๋‹ค ํ›จ์”ฌ ๋œ ํ˜•์‹์ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ๋‚ด์šฉ์„ ์“ธ
01:04
Use a greeting with 'dear' only if youโ€™re writing something formal.
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๋•Œ๋งŒ 'dear'์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์„ธ์š” .
01:09
So, what else can you use?
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ๋” ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
01:14
Many emails start with hello, or hi plus the personโ€™s name.
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๋งŽ์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด hello ๋˜๋Š” hi์™€ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์˜ ์ด๋ฆ„์œผ๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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For example,
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด,
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Hello, Hi Ryan,
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Hello, Hi Ryan,
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In many business emails, youโ€™ll follow the greeting with something like:
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๋งŽ์€ ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง ๋’ค์— ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์ด ๋‚˜์˜ต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:28
I hope youโ€™re well.
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์ž˜ ์ง€๋‚ด์‹œ๊ธธ ๋ฐ”๋ž๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:32
or How are you?
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๋˜๋Š” ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ง€๋‚ด์„ธ์š”?
01:37
In business emails, these are simply polite phrases, and they donโ€™t generally need an
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๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ์ด๋“ค์€ ๋‹จ์ˆœํžˆ ๊ณต์†ํ•œ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ์ด๋ฉฐ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋‹ต๋ณ€์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
01:44
answer.
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.
01:45
For more informal emails, you can start with just the word hi or hey, plus a comma:
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๋ณด๋‹ค ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ hi ๋˜๋Š” hey๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด์™€ ์‰ผํ‘œ๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:53
You can also just write the personโ€™s name plus a comma.
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ์˜ ์ด๋ฆ„๊ณผ ์‰ผํ‘œ๋ฅผ ์“ธ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๋” ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ 
01:58
This is a more professional style, even though itโ€™s more informal.
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์ด์ง€๋งŒ ๋” ์ „๋ฌธ์ ์ธ ์Šคํƒ€์ผ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:02
Itโ€™s best with people you already know.
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์ด๋ฏธ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค๊ณผ ํ•จ๊ป˜ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:07
For a very informal email, you might not need a greeting at all.
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๋งค์šฐ ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์ด ์ „ํ˜€ ํ•„์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:13
This is also true if youโ€™re sending several emails to the same person in a short time:
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์งง์€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์— ๊ฐ™์€ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์—๊ฒŒ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ ๊ฐœ์˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๋‚ด๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ์—๋„ ๋งˆ์ฐฌ๊ฐ€์ง€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:19
you donโ€™t need to write a greeting every time.
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๋งค๋ฒˆ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์“ธ ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:23
Letโ€™s review quickly:
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๋น ๋ฅด๊ฒŒ ๊ฒ€ํ† ํ•ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:26
For very formal emails, use a greeting with dear plus a name, like a letter.
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๋งค์šฐ ๊ฒฉ์‹์„ ์ฐจ๋ฆฐ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์นœ์• ํ•˜๋Š” ์ธ์‚ฌ์™€ ํŽธ์ง€์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ์ด๋ฆ„์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
02:34
For most everyday emails, use either hello or hi plus a name.
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๋Œ€๋ถ€๋ถ„์˜ ์ผ์ƒ์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—๋Š” hello ๋˜๋Š” hi์™€ ์ด๋ฆ„์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:42
For less formal emails, use hi or hey without a name, or donโ€™t use a greeting at all.
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๋œ ํ˜•์‹์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด๋ฆ„ ์—†์ด hi ๋˜๋Š” hey๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์ „ํ˜€ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
02:49
Okay, but what next?
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์ข‹์•„์š”, ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๋‹ค์Œ์€์š”?
02:55
After your greeting, you should explain why youโ€™re writing.
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์ธ์‚ฌ ํ›„์—๋Š” ์™œ ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๋Š”์ง€ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:59
Make this as short as possible.
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๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ํ•œ ์งง๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“œ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๋งค์ผ ์ˆ˜๋ฐฑ ํ†ต์˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„
03:02
If youโ€™re writing to someone who receives hundreds of emails every day, you need to
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๋ฐ›๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์—๊ฒŒ ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ด๋‹ค๋ฉด
03:07
make your purpose clear quickly.
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๋ชฉ์ ์„ ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํžˆ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:12
Someone whoโ€™s very busy wonโ€™t spend a lot of time trying to work out what youโ€™re
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๋งค์šฐ ๋ฐ”์œ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋งํ•˜๋ ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์•Œ์•„๋‚ด๋ ค๊ณ  ๋งŽ์€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ๋ณด๋‚ด์ง€ ์•Š์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
03:17
trying to say!
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!
03:20
How can you do this?
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์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ
03:23
Start with a simple phrase, like:
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๊ฐ™์€ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•œ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
03:26
Iโ€™m writing regardingโ€ฆ
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I'm write aboutโ€ฆ
03:29
I wanted to follow up onโ€ฆ
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I wants to follow upโ€ฆ
03:32
I would like to ask aboutโ€ฆ
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I would like to ask aboutโ€ฆ
03:35
These phrases are slightly more formal.
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03:38
Letโ€™s see how you could use them:
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ๋“ค์„ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค:
03:42
Iโ€™m writing regarding the issues weโ€™ve been having with our database system.
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์ €๋Š” ์šฐ๋ฆฌ ๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ๋ฒ ์ด์Šค ์‹œ์Šคํ…œ๊ณผ ๊ด€๋ จ๋œ ๋ฌธ์ œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:50
I wanted to follow up on our meeting last week and confirm our plans for this month.
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์ง€๋‚œ์ฃผ ํšŒ์˜์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ํ›„์† ์กฐ์น˜๋ฅผ ์ทจํ•˜๊ณ  ์ด๋ฒˆ ๋‹ฌ ๊ณ„ํš์„ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:57
I would like to ask about the new budget and whether this will affect our department.
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์ƒˆ ์˜ˆ์‚ฐ๊ณผ ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์šฐ๋ฆฌ ๋ถ€์„œ์— ์˜ํ–ฅ์„ ๋ฏธ์น˜๋Š”์ง€ ์—ฌ๋ถ€์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋ฌป๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:05
In a more informal email, you wouldnโ€™t use a phrase like this.
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๋ณด๋‹ค ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ๋Š” ์ด์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:09
You might ask a more direct question or make a direct statement, like this:
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๋ณด๋‹ค ์ง์ ‘์ ์ธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด ์ง์ ‘์ ์ธ ์ง„์ˆ ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:16
Do you know when the database issues will be fixed?
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๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ๋ฒ ์ด์Šค ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์–ธ์ œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ๋ ์ง€ ์•„์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
04:20
Letโ€™s confirm our plans for this month.
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์ด๋ฒˆ ๋‹ฌ์˜ ๊ณ„ํš์„ ํ™•์ธํ•ฉ์‹œ๋‹ค.
04:26
How will the new budget affect our department?
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์ƒˆ ์˜ˆ์‚ฐ์ด ์šฐ๋ฆฌ ๋ถ€์„œ์— ์–ด๋–ค ์˜ํ–ฅ์„ ๋ฏธ์น˜๋‚˜์š”? ๋ฌธ์ œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์„
04:31
If youโ€™re writing because you want to find a solution to a problem, here are some useful
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์ฐพ๊ณ  ์‹ถ์–ด์„œ ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์œ ์šฉํ•œ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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phrases:
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04:38
Iโ€™m concerned aboutโ€ฆ or I need to bring something to your attention.
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.
04:46
Again, these are more formal phrases.
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๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ, ์ด๋“ค์€ ์ข€ ๋” ํ˜•์‹์ ์ธ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:50
Letโ€™s see how you can use them:
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์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค. ์ตœ๊ทผ์— ์ง์›๋“ค์ด
04:54
Iโ€™m concerned about the number of sick days staff have been taking recently.
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์–ผ๋งˆ๋‚˜ ๋งŽ์€ ๋ณ‘๊ฐ€๋ฅผ ๋ƒˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๊ฑฑ์ •๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
05:00
I need to bring something to your attention: using outdated software puts us at risk of
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์ฃผ์˜ํ•  ์‚ฌํ•ญ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ž˜๋œ ์†Œํ”„ํŠธ์›จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด
05:07
malware infections and data loss.
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๋งฌ์›จ์–ด ๊ฐ์—ผ ๋ฐ ๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ ์†์‹ค์˜ ์œ„ํ—˜์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:12
Now itโ€™s your turn.
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์ด์ œ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์ฐจ๋ก€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:14
Imagine that youโ€™re writing an email to your manager, colleague, or client.
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๊ด€๋ฆฌ์ž, ๋™๋ฃŒ ๋˜๋Š” ๊ณ ๊ฐ์—๊ฒŒ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ์ƒํ•ด ๋ณด์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
05:19
You need to write an appropriate greeting, then write one or two sentences to explain
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์ ์ ˆํ•œ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์“ด ๋‹ค์Œ, ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๋Š” ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๋Š” ํ•œ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:26
why youโ€™re writing.
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05:29
Pause the video and do it now!
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์˜์ƒ์„ ๋ฉˆ์ถ”๊ณ  ์ง€๊ธˆ ํ•ด๋ณด์„ธ์š”!
05:32
Start again when youโ€™ve finished.
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์™„๋ฃŒ๋˜๋ฉด ๋‹ค์‹œ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
05:36
Ready?
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์ค€๋น„๊ฐ€ ๋œ?
05:38
Letโ€™s move on.
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๊ณ„์† ๊ฐ‘์‹œ๋‹ค.
05:43
After you introduce why youโ€™re writing, you need to add more details and supporting information,
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๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๋Š” ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•œ ํ›„์—๋Š” ๋…์ž๊ฐ€ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๋Š” ์ƒํ™ฉ์„ ์ดํ•ดํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋„๋ก ์ž์„ธํ•œ ๋‚ด์šฉ๊ณผ ์ง€์› ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:50
so that your reader understands the situation youโ€™re describing.
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05:56
Put this information in a new paragraph.
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์ด ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ƒˆ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์— ๋„ฃ์œผ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
06:01
This will make your email clear and easy to follow.
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์ด๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‰ฝ๊ฒŒ ๋”ฐ๋ผ๊ฐˆ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:06
First, ask yourself what the person youโ€™re writing to needs to know.
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๋จผ์ €, ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด ์•Œ์•„์•ผ ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ์Šค์Šค๋กœ์—๊ฒŒ ๋ฌผ์–ด๋ณด์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค .
06:15
With emails, less is more.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์€ ์ ์„์ˆ˜๋ก ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:17
No one wants to read a very long email, and itโ€™s hard to make yourself clear if you
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์•„๋ฌด๋„ ๋งค์šฐ ๊ธด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ฝ๊ณ  ์‹ถ์–ดํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์œผ๋ฉฐ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋งŽ์ด ์“ฐ๋ฉด ์ž์‹ ์„ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๊ธฐ๊ฐ€ ์–ด๋ ต์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
06:22
write too much.
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06:24
So, try to limit yourself to two to three sentences.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ 2~3๊ฐœ์˜ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ์ž์‹ ์„ ์ œํ•œํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค .
06:30
Put your most important point first.
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๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ ์„ ๋จผ์ € ๋‘์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
06:32
Letโ€™s look at some examples:
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๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ๋ฒ ์ด์Šค์™€ ๊ด€๋ จํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•œ
06:36
Iโ€™m writing regarding the issues weโ€™ve been having with our database
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๋ฌธ์ œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:42
Both clients and staff have been experiencing severe problems for several days now.
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ํด๋ผ์ด์–ธํŠธ์™€ ์ง์› ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋ฉฐ์น  ๋™์•ˆ ์‹ฌ๊ฐํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ๊ฒช๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:49
We are unable to update records or access information on customer interactions.
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๊ธฐ๋ก์„ ์—…๋ฐ์ดํŠธํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๊ณ ๊ฐ ์ƒํ˜ธ ์ž‘์šฉ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ •๋ณด์— ์•ก์„ธ์Šคํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:56
This is costing us large amounts of money, both in time spent trying to fix the problem,
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์ด๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ์†Œ์š”๋˜๋Š” ์‹œ๊ฐ„
07:04
and in lost sales.
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๊ณผ ํŒ๋งค ์†์‹ค ๋ชจ๋‘์—์„œ ๋งŽ์€ ๋น„์šฉ์ด ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:06
Hereโ€™s one more:
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ํ•œ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋” ๋ง์”€๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ตœ๊ทผ ์ง์›๋“ค์˜
07:09
Iโ€™m concerned about the number of sick days staff have been taking recently.
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๋ณ‘๊ฐ€ ์ผ์ˆ˜๊ฐ€ ๊ฑฑ์ •๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
07:16
Staff in the IT department have taken a total of 44 sick days so far this month, compared
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IT ๋ถ€์„œ์˜ ์ง์›์€ ์ด๋ฒˆ ๋‹ฌ๊นŒ์ง€ ์ด 44์ผ์˜ ๋ณ‘๊ฐ€๋ฅผ ๋ƒˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:22
to a total of 23 for last month, and just 18 for the previous month.
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07:28
This is affecting productivity, and also placing a lot of stress on the employees who do come
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์ƒ์‚ฐ์„ฑ์— ์˜ํ–ฅ์„ ๋ฏธ์น˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ถœ๊ทผํ•˜๋Š” ์ง์›๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ๋งŽ์€ ์ŠคํŠธ๋ ˆ์Šค๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:36
to work.
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07:37
In both cases, youโ€™re writing to describe a problem.
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๋‘ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
07:42
Your first sentence introduces the problem, and then your next paragraph gives more details.
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์†Œ๊ฐœ ํ•˜๊ณ  ๋‹ค์Œ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์—์„œ ์ž์„ธํ•œ ๋‚ด์šฉ์„ ์ œ๊ณตํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:51
You can see that in both examples, we use just two sentences, but you can include a
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๋‘ ์˜ˆ์—์„œ ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ๋งŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ
07:58
lot of useful information in two sentences.
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๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์— ๋งŽ์€ ์œ ์šฉํ•œ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ํฌํ•จํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Œ์„ ์•Œ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ
08:02
If you have more than one point to make in your email, you can repeat this pattern: first
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์— ์š”์ ์ด ๋‘ ๊ฐœ ์ด์ƒ์ธ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ํŒจํ„ด์„ ๋ฐ˜๋ณตํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋จผ์ €
08:10
put a short sentence to introduce your point, then add a paragraph with two to three sentences
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์š”์ ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•˜๋Š” ์งง์€ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ๋„ฃ์€ ๋‹ค์Œ ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด 2~3๊ฐœ์˜ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ๋œ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
08:18
to add details.
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. ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ
08:21
You can move from one point to another using a phrase like:
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์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ํ•œ ์ง€์ ์—์„œ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ง€์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ด๋™ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๋‹น์‹ ๊ณผ
08:26
Thereโ€™s one more thing Iโ€™d like to discuss with you.
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๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ๊ฒƒ์ด ํ•˜๋‚˜ ๋” ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
08:31
Regardingโ€ฆ
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๊ด€๋ จํ•˜์—ฌโ€ฆ
08:33
Iโ€™d also like to ask you aboutโ€ฆ
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๋˜ํ•œ ๋ฌป๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹คโ€ฆ
08:38
Use one of these phrases to change the topic, and then introduce your next point.
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์ด ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ ์ค‘ ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ์ฃผ์ œ๋ฅผ ๋ณ€๊ฒฝํ•œ ํ›„ ๋‹ค์Œ ์š”์ ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:44
For example:
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค๋ฉด: ๋‹น์‹ ๊ณผ
08:47
Thereโ€™s one more thing Iโ€™d like to discuss with you.
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๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ๊ฒƒ์ด ํ•˜๋‚˜ ๋” ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
08:51
It seems like the number of customer complaints has been increasing for three monthsโ€ฆ
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3๊ฐœ์›”์งธ ๊ณ ๊ฐ๋ถˆ๋งŒ์ด ๋Š˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™์€๋ฐโ€ฆ
08:58
Now, you can practice.
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09:02
Take the email you started before.
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์ด์ „์— ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๊ฐ€์ ธ์˜ต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:04
Add a new paragraph, which should be two to three sentences long.
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2~3๋ฌธ์žฅ ๊ธธ์ด์˜ ์ƒˆ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
09:11
Add details to the point you introduced before.
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์ด์ „์— ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•œ ํฌ์ธํŠธ์— ๋””ํ…Œ์ผ์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:15
Pause the video and do it now.
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๋น„๋””์˜ค๋ฅผ ์ผ์‹œ ์ค‘์ง€ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ง€๊ธˆ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
09:18
If you want extra practice, add another topic to your email, using one of the linking phrases
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์ถ”๊ฐ€ ์—ฐ์Šต์„ ์›ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋ฐฉ๊ธˆ ๋ณธ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ ์ค‘ ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ฃผ์ œ๋ฅผ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜์„ธ์š”
09:25
you just saw.
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. ๋งํ•˜๊ณ 
09:27
After you explain all the points you want to make, what should you do next?
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์‹ถ์€ ์ ์„ ๋ชจ๋‘ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•œ ํ›„์—๋Š” ๋‹ค์Œ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
09:35
When you write an email, you should make it clear what you expect from the person youโ€™re
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ๋•Œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๋‚ด๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์—๊ฒŒ ๊ธฐ๋Œ€ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ”๋ฅผ ๋ช…ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
09:42
sending it to.
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. ์ƒ๋Œ€๋ฐฉ์—๊ฒŒ ์•ฝ๊ฐ„์˜ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ
09:45
Even if youโ€™re writing just to give the other person some information, itโ€™s a good
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์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๊ธ€์„ ์“ฐ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ์—๋„
09:49
idea to make that clear.
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์ด๋ฅผ ๋ช…ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ํด๋ฆญ
09:53
Put your call to action in a new paragraph.
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์œ ๋„ ๋ฌธ์•ˆ์„ ์ƒˆ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์— ๋„ฃ์œผ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
09:56
Again, putting each thing in its own paragraph makes your email structured and easy to follow.
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๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ, ๊ฐ ํ•ญ๋ชฉ์„ ์ž์ฒด ๋‹จ๋ฝ์— ๋„ฃ์œผ๋ฉด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ๊ตฌ์กฐํ™”๋˜๊ณ  ๋”ฐ๋ผ๊ฐ€๊ธฐ ์‰ฌ์›Œ์ง‘๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:03
So, what can you write here?
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์“ธ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
10:06
First, letโ€™s consider situations where you need the other person to do something urgently.
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๋จผ์ €, ์ƒ๋Œ€๋ฐฉ์ด ๊ธ‰ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋ญ”๊ฐ€๋ฅผ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•˜๋Š” ์ƒํ™ฉ์„ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด
10:15
You could say:
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๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:18
Please โ€ฆ by tomorrow at the latest.
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์ œ๋ฐœ... ๋Šฆ์–ด๋„ ๋‚ด์ผ๊นŒ์ง€.
10:23
As a matter of urgency, you need toโ€ฆ
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๊ธด๊ธ‰ํ•œ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋กœ ๋‹ค์Œ์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ˆ
10:26
For example:
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: ๋Šฆ์–ด๋„ ๋‚ด์ผ๊นŒ์ง€
10:30
Please arrange a meeting of all department heads by tomorrow at the latest.
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๋ชจ๋“  ๋ถ€์„œ์žฅ ํšŒ์˜๋ฅผ ์ฃผ์„ ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค .
10:36
As a matter of urgency, you need to contact all the clients who may have been affected
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๊ธด๊ธ‰ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์ด ๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ ์œ„๋ฐ˜์˜ ์˜ํ–ฅ์„ ๋ฐ›์•˜์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ณ ๊ฐ์—๊ฒŒ ์—ฐ๋ฝํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
10:42
by this data breach.
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.
10:45
If your request is less urgent, you could use phrases such as:
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๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ๋œ ๊ธด๊ธ‰ํ•œ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:50
Could you pleaseโ€ฆ?
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๋ถ€ํƒ๋“œ๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค...?
10:53
I would like you toโ€ฆ
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10:56
For example:
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค๋ฉด:
10:59
Could you please talk to Matt in the HR department and clarify our options on this?
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HR ๋ถ€์„œ์˜ Matt์™€ ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์„ ํƒ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์„ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•ด ์ฃผ์‹œ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
11:05
I would like you to design a poster to inform staff about the new policies.
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์ƒˆ ์ •์ฑ…์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ง์›๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ์•Œ๋ฆฌ๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ ํฌ์Šคํ„ฐ๋ฅผ ๋””์ž์ธํ•ด ์ฃผ์…จ์œผ๋ฉด ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ํด๋ฆญ ์œ ๋„๋ฌธ์•ˆ์„
11:11
With calls to action, you should think about your relationship with the person youโ€™re
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์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๊ณผ์˜ ๊ด€๊ณ„์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
11:18
writing to.
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.
11:20
For example, saying something like, you need toโ€ฆ or I would like you toโ€ฆ is relatively
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด, you need to... ๋˜๋Š” I would like you to...์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ง์€ ๋น„๊ต์ 
11:29
direct.
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์ง์ ‘์ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ํŒ€ ์ค‘ ํ•œ ๋ช…์—๊ฒŒ ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ
11:31
Thatโ€™s fine if youโ€™re a manager writing to one of your team, but it might sound inappropriate
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์“ฐ๋Š” ๊ด€๋ฆฌ์ž๋ผ๋ฉด ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์ง€๋งŒ
11:39
if you write that to your manager.
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๊ด€๋ฆฌ์ž์—๊ฒŒ ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๋ฉด ๋ถ€์ ์ ˆํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋“ค๋ฆด ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:43
This also depends on the corporate culture where you work.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋˜ํ•œ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ผํ•˜๋Š” ๊ธฐ์—… ๋ฌธํ™”์— ๋‹ฌ๋ ค ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
11:47
Generally, if you arenโ€™t sure, itโ€™s better to be less direct.
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์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ ํ™•์‹คํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์€ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋œ ์ง์ ‘์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:54
For example:
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์˜ˆ:
11:55
I suggest that you contact all clients who may have been affected by the data breach.
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๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ ์œ ์ถœ๋กœ ์ธํ•ด ์˜ํ–ฅ์„ ๋ฐ›์•˜์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ณ ๊ฐ์—๊ฒŒ ์—ฐ๋ฝํ•  ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ œ์•ˆํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:00
Can I ask you to design a poster to inform staff about the new policies?
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์ง์›๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ์ƒˆ ์ •์ฑ…์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์•Œ๋ฆฌ๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ ํฌ์Šคํ„ฐ ๋””์ž์ธ์„ ๋ถ€ํƒํ•ด๋„ ๋ ๊นŒ์š”?
12:07
But, be careful!
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์กฐ์‹ฌํ•˜์„ธ์š”!
12:10
Donโ€™t be so indirect that the other person doesnโ€™t understand what you need.
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์ƒ๋Œ€๋ฐฉ์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํ•„์š”๋กœ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜์ง€ ๋ชปํ•  ์ •๋„๋กœ ๊ฐ„์ ‘์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋งํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
12:18
If you donโ€™t need a response from the other person, say something like:
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๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์˜ ์‘๋‹ต์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์€ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด ๋งํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
12:23
This is just to keep you updated.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹จ์ง€ ์ตœ์‹  ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:28
This doesnโ€™t require any immediate response, but please keep an eye on the situation.
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์ฆ‰๊ฐ์ ์ธ ๋Œ€์‘์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•˜์ง€๋Š” ์•Š์ง€๋งŒ ์ƒํ™ฉ์„ ์ฃผ์‹œํ•˜์‹œ๊ธฐ ๋ฐ”๋ž๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:35
Now, itโ€™s your turn!
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์ด์ œ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์ฐจ๋ก€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
12:38
Pause the video and add a call to action to the end of your email.
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๋น„๋””์˜ค๋ฅผ ์ผ์‹œ ์ค‘์ง€ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ๋์— ํด๋ฆญ ์œ ๋„ ๋ฌธ์•ˆ์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค .
12:44
Think about who youโ€™re writing to, and make your call-to-action appropriately direct or
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๋ˆ„๊ตฌ์—๊ฒŒ ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๋Š”์ง€ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๊ณ  ์ ์ ˆํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์ง๊ฐ„์ ‘์ ์œผ๋กœ ํด๋ฆญ ์œ ๋„๋ฌธ์•ˆ์„ ๋งŒ๋“œ์„ธ์š”
12:50
indirect.
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.
12:52
So, now youโ€™re nearly finished.
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์ด์ œ ๊ฑฐ์˜ ๋๋‚ฌ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:55
Whatโ€™s left?
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๋ฌด์—‡์ด ๋‚จ์•˜๋‚˜์š”?
13:00
Finish your email with a sign-off and your name.
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์„œ๋ช…๊ณผ ๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ์ด๋ฆ„์œผ๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋งˆ๋ฌด๋ฆฌํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค . ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด
13:05
You can use a lot of the same sign-offs you can use in a paper letter, such as:
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์ข…์ด ํŽธ์ง€์— ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋™์ผํ•œ ์„œ๋ช…์„ ๋งŽ์ด ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:12
Regards, Best Wishes,
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์•ˆ๋ถ€ ์ธ์‚ฌ,
13:16
Kind Regards,
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์•ˆ๋ถ€ ์ธ์‚ฌ,
13:18
Like with greetings, you wouldnโ€™t generally use very formal sign-offs like Yours Sincerely
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์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง๊ณผ ๋งˆ์ฐฌ๊ฐ€์ง€๋กœ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ Yours Sincerely in an
13:24
in an email.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ.
13:26
You might see it sometimes, but only in very formal emails.
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๊ฐ€๋” ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๋งค์šฐ ๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ๋งŒ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์‚ฌ์ธ ์˜คํ”„์˜
13:30
Donโ€™t forget to write each word of your sign-off with a capital letter, and put a
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๊ฐ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ์“ฐ๊ณ 
13:35
comma at the end.
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๋์— ์‰ผํ‘œ๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์žŠ์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
13:38
The sign-offs youโ€™ve just seen are neutral and can be used in almost any situation.
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๋ฐฉ๊ธˆ ๋ณธ ์‚ฌ์ธ์˜คํ”„๋Š” ์ค‘๋ฆฝ์  ์ด๋ฉฐ ๊ฑฐ์˜ ๋ชจ๋“  ์ƒํ™ฉ์—์„œ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:44
If youโ€™re writing something more informal, you might use a sign-off like:
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์ข€ ๋” ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ๊ธ€์„ ์“ด๋‹ค๋ฉด
13:53
Cheers, Take care,
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Cheers, Take care,
13:56
In this case, you wouldnโ€™t capitalise each word, which is why care in take care has a
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์ด ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๊ฐ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ์“ฐ์ง€ ์•Š์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด care in take care์—
14:02
small โ€˜cโ€™.
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์†Œ๋ฌธ์ž 'c'๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๋Š” ์ด์œ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:05
Like with greetings, you might not need a sign-off at all in an informal email.
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์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง๊ณผ ๋งˆ์ฐฌ๊ฐ€์ง€๋กœ ๋น„๊ณต์‹ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ๋Š” ์„œ๋ช…์ด ์ „ํ˜€ ํ•„์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:11
Just write your name at the bottom, or donโ€™t write anything at all!
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ํ•˜๋‹จ์— ์ด๋ฆ„๋งŒ ์“ฐ๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์•„๋ฌด ๊ฒƒ๋„ ์“ฐ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”!
14:16
After you put your sign-off, add your name, and youโ€™ve finished!
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์„œ๋ช…์„ ํ•œ ํ›„ ์ด๋ฆ„์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜๋ฉด ์™„๋ฃŒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค!
14:23
For example,
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14:23
Regards,
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด,
์•ˆ๋ถ€ ์ธ์‚ฌ,
14:25
Vijay
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Vijay
14:26
Cheers,
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Cheers,
14:27
Katya
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Katya
14:30
Now you know how to write a clear, effective email in English.
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์ด์ œ ์˜์–ด๋กœ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ณ  ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์•Œ์•˜์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
14:36
Letโ€™s put everything youโ€™ve learned together.
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋ฐฐ์šด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ๋„ฃ์–ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
14:44
To write an effective email in English, you need to:
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์˜์–ด๋กœ ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ๋‹ค์Œ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:50
1. Use an appropriate greeting.
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1. ์ ์ ˆํ•œ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:53
2. Introduce your topic in a single sentence.
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2. ์ฃผ์ œ๋ฅผ ํ•œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:57
3. Add details to your topic in a short paragraph.
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3. ์งง์€ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์œผ๋กœ ์ฃผ์ œ์— ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:03
4. Add a call-to-action to explain what you need the other person to do.
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4. ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ์ผ์„ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๋Š” ํด๋ฆญ ์œ ๋„๋ฌธ์•ˆ์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜์„ธ์š” .
15:09
5. Use an appropriate signoff.
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5. ์ ์ ˆํ•œ ์‚ฌ์ธ์˜คํ”„๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
15:13
Letโ€™s do a longer example together:
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๋” ๊ธด ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:17
Dear Lina,
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์นœ์• ํ•˜๋Š” Lina, ์ฃผ์˜ํ• 
15:18
I need to bring something to your attention: many staff are using very weak passwords on
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์‚ฌํ•ญ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋งŽ์€ ์ง์›์ด ๋…ธํŠธ๋ถ๊ณผ ๋ฐ์ดํ„ฐ๋ฒ ์ด์Šค ์•ก์„ธ์Šค์— ๋งค์šฐ ์ทจ์•ฝํ•œ ์•”ํ˜ธ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
15:25
their laptops and for database access.
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15:29
Our work depends on keeping our clientsโ€™ personal financial information safe.
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ์˜ ์—…๋ฌด๋Š” ๊ณ ๊ฐ์˜ ๊ฐœ์ธ ๊ธˆ์œต ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์•ˆ์ „ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์œ ์ง€ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ๋‹ฌ๋ ค ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:36
If we lose our clientsโ€™ trust on this issue, it will not be easy to recover.
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์ด ๋ฌธ์ œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ณ ๊ฐ์˜ ์‹ ๋ขฐ๋ฅผ ์žƒ์œผ๋ฉด ํšŒ๋ณตํ•˜๊ธฐ ์‰ฝ์ง€ ์•Š์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•œ ํ›„๋ณด๋‹ค ์ง€๊ธˆ ์กฐ์น˜๋ฅผ ์ทจํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด
15:42
I trust that you can see that it is better to take action now, rather than after something
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๋” ๋‚ซ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์ด ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋ฏฟ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
15:49
goes wrong.
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15:51
I suggest we make a rule that passwords must be a specific length, and that staff must
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์•”ํ˜ธ๋Š” ํŠน์ • ๊ธธ์ด์—ฌ์•ผ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ง์›์€
15:58
change their passwords at least once a month.
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์ ์–ด๋„ ํ•œ ๋‹ฌ์— ํ•œ ๋ฒˆ ์•”ํ˜ธ๋ฅผ ๋ณ€๊ฒฝํ•ด์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ทœ์น™์„ ๋งŒ๋“ค ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ œ์•ˆํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
16:03
Please let me know what you think about this.
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์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ์•Œ๋ ค์ฃผ์„ธ์š”.
16:07
Regards,
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๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค,
16:10
Vijay
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Vijay
16:12
What do you think: could you write an email like this?
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์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์„ธ์š”: ์ด๋Ÿฐ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์“ธ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋‚˜์š” ?
16:16
Try it!
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์‹œ๋„ ํ•ด๋ด!
16:18
Use words and phrases from the lesson.
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๊ณต๊ณผ์˜ ๋‹จ์–ด์™€ ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๋ณด์—ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฐ ๊ฒƒ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ
16:21
Remember to organise your email into paragraphs, like we showed you.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์œผ๋กœ ์ •๋ฆฌํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์žŠ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” .
16:27
This will make it easier to keep your ideas structured and clear.
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์ด๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฒด๊ณ„์ ์ด๊ณ  ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์œ ์ง€ํ•˜๊ธฐ๊ฐ€ ๋” ์‰ฌ์›Œ์ง‘๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
16:33
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๋” ๋งŽ์€ ๋ฌด๋ฃŒ ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ์›ํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์ €ํฌ ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์„ธ์š”:
16:37
Oxford Online English dot com
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Oxford Online English dot com
16:41
Thanks for watching! See you next time!
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์‹œ์ฒญํ•ด ์ฃผ์…”์„œ ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค! ๋‹ค์Œ์— ๋งŒ๋‚˜์š”!
์ด ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ ์ •๋ณด

์ด ์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ํ•™์Šต์— ์œ ์šฉํ•œ YouTube ๋™์˜์ƒ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „ ์„ธ๊ณ„ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜๋“ค์ด ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ ๋™์˜์ƒ ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ” ํด๋ฆญํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ณณ์—์„œ ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์žฌ์ƒ์— ๋งž์ถฐ ์ž๋ง‰์ด ์Šคํฌ๋กค๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด๋‚˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ๋ฌธ์˜ ์–‘์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฌธ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.

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