How to Write Effective Emails in English - Avoid 12 Mistakes

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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Hi everyone. I'm Jennifer from Englishย  with Jennifer. Part of my daily routineย ย 
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์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š” ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„. ์ €๋Š” Jennifer์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ์˜์–ด์—์„œ ์˜จ Jennifer์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‚ด ์ผ์ƒ์˜ ์ผ๋ถ€๋Š”
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seven days a week includes time forย  responding to public comments and email.ย ย 
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์ผ์ฃผ์ผ ๋‚ด๋‚ด ๊ณต๊ฐœ ๋Œ“๊ธ€๊ณผ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ์‘๋‹ตํ•˜๋Š” ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ํฌํ•จํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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If you write email even half as much as I do,ย  you'll want to be sure you're writing the bestย ย 
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์ €๋ณด๋‹ค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ ˆ๋ฐ˜๋งŒ ์“ด๋‹ค๋ฉด
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messages possible to be effective and efficient.ย  Email requires clear communication. If you aren'tย ย 
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ํšจ๊ณผ์ ์ด๊ณ  ํšจ์œจ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์€ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ์ปค๋ฎค๋‹ˆ์ผ€์ด์…˜์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์œผ๋ฉด
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clear, you can create a misunderstanding. Anย  appropriate tone is also important becauseย ย 
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์˜คํ•ด๋ฅผ ์ผ์œผํ‚ฌ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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sounding too formal or informal isn't good forย  any kind of relationship. So, let's talk aboutย ย 
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๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๊ฒฉ์‹์„ ์ฐจ๋ฆฌ๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๊ฒฉ์‹์„ ์ฐจ๋ฆฌ์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๋ง์€ ์–ด๋–ค ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๊ด€๊ณ„์—๋„ ์ข‹์ง€ ์•Š๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์ ์ ˆํ•œ ์–ด์กฐ๋„ ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋Ÿผ
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12 common mistakes people make when they writeย  email, and I'll teach you how to avoid them.
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ๋•Œ ํ”ํžˆ ์ €์ง€๋ฅด๋Š” 12๊ฐ€์ง€ ์‹ค์ˆ˜์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ด๋ฅผ ๋ฐฉ์ง€ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์•Œ๋ ค๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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In an earlier lesson on writing email, I sharedย  five basic don'ts. Let's quickly review those.ย ย 
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ž‘์„ฑ์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ์ด์ „ ์ˆ˜์—…์—์„œ 5๊ฐ€์ง€ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ ๊ธˆ์ง€ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์„ ๊ณต์œ ํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น ๋ฅด๊ฒŒ ๊ฒ€ํ† ํ•ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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One. Don't forget to writeย  a subject line. Be concise.
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ํ•˜๋‚˜. ์ œ๋ชฉ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์žŠ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” . ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Two. Don't write your wholeย  message in CAPS (capital letters).
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๋‘˜. ์ „์ฒด ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋ฅผ CAPS(๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž)๋กœ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
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Three. Don't write in all lowercase letters.
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์‚ผ. ๋ชจ๋‘ ์†Œ๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ์“ฐ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
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Four. Don't start each sentence on a new line.
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๋„ท. ์ƒˆ ์ค„์—์„œ ๊ฐ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
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Five. Don't write your whole messageย  as one paragraph. Use line breaks.
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๋‹ค์„ฏ. ์ „์ฒด ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋ฅผ ํ•œ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์œผ๋กœ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” . ์ค„ ๋ฐ”๊ฟˆ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๊ฐ•์กฐํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด
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Don't overuse CAPS or other formatting, likeย  underlining, for emphasis. If something is urgent,ย ย 
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CAPS ๋˜๋Š” ๋ฐ‘์ค„๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๊ธฐํƒ€ ์„œ์‹์„ ๊ณผ๋„ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” . ๊ธด๊ธ‰ํ•œ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋ณผ๋“œ์ฒด
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you can sparingly use boldfacing or italics,ย  or you can simply express the urgency or theย ย 
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๋‚˜ ์ดํƒค๋ฆญ์ฒด๋ฅผ ๋“œ๋ฌผ๊ฒŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋‹จ์ˆœํžˆ ๊ธด๊ธ‰์„ฑ์ด๋‚˜
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importance in words. Check out these examples. Inย  the subject line, you can simply use title case:ย ย 
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์ค‘์š”์„ฑ์„ ๋ง๋กœ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ์ œ๋ชฉ์— ๊ฐ„๋‹จํžˆ ์ œ๋ชฉ ์ผ€์ด์Šค๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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we capitalize the first word, the last word,ย  and all important words like nouns, verbs,ย ย 
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋‹จ์–ด, ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ๋‹จ์–ด, ๋ช…์‚ฌ, ๋™์‚ฌ,
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adjectives, adverbs, and, of course,ย  proper nouns. Some people choose toย ย 
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ํ˜•์šฉ์‚ฌ, ๋ถ€์‚ฌ ๋ฐ ๊ณ ์œ ๋ช…์‚ฌ์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋ชจ๋“  ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ํ‘œ์‹œํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์–ด๋–ค ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์€
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use sentence case. That means you onlyย  capitalize the first word and proper nouns.ย ย 
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๋Œ€์†Œ๋ฌธ์ž๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ธฐ๋กœ ์„ ํƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ฆ‰, ์ฒซ ๋‹จ์–ด์™€ ๊ณ ์œ  ๋ช…์‚ฌ๋งŒ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ํ‘œ๊ธฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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And don't feel the need to use exclamation pointsย  in the subject line, especially in business email.
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ํŠนํžˆ ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ œ๋ชฉ์— ๋Š๋‚Œํ‘œ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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In this sentence, boldfacing is used to highlightย  the date. That's okay. In this sentence,ย ย 
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์ด ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ๋Š” ๋‚ ์งœ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ•์กฐ ํ‘œ์‹œํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๊ตต์€ ๊ธ€์”จ์ฒด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์•„์š”. ์ด ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ
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italics are used to emphasize "not." Do notย  share these internal links. That's all right.
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๊ธฐ์šธ์ž„๊ผด์€ 'not'์„ ๊ฐ•์กฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ๋‚ด๋ถ€ ๋งํฌ๋ฅผ ๊ณต์œ ํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”. ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:03
In this example, we're using words toย  express the urgency, and that's sufficient.
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์ด ์˜ˆ์—์„œ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๊ธด๊ธ‰ํ•จ์„ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์œผ๋กœ ์ถฉ๋ถ„ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Here again, we rely on words toย  express the urgency and importance.
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ๋„ ๊ธด๊ธ‰์„ฑ๊ณผ ์ค‘์š”์„ฑ์„ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๋‹จ์–ด์— ์˜์กดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:21
Don't write email like you talk in conversation.ย ย 
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๋Œ€ํ™”์—์„œ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
05:24
Be more direct and concise. Take a look at theseย  models. Let's see how they can be improved.
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๋ณด๋‹ค ์ง์ ‘์ ์ด๊ณ  ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๋‹ค์Œ ๋ชจ๋ธ์„ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด์„ธ์š” . ๊ทธ๋“ค์ด ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๊ฐœ์„ ๋  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
05:42
Here are my suggestions. Hi Kyle. When you haveย  a minute, you can check out the attached PDF ofย ย 
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ ๋‚ด ์ œ์•ˆ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•ˆ๋…• ์นด์ผ. ์ž ์‹œ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์ด ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉด ๋‚ด ์„œ๋น„์Šค์˜ ์ฒจ๋ถ€๋œ PDF๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ค ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:48
my services. Please reach out if you'd likeย  to talk more or if you have any questions.
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. ๋” ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์—ฐ๋ฝํ•ด ์ฃผ์„ธ์š”.
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We can definitely make thisย  more direct and concise.ย ย 
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ๋” ์ง์ ‘์ ์ด๊ณ  ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:06
Hi. Yes, tomorrow is fine. What time is good forย  you? I can meet in the AM or PM. Let me know.
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์•ˆ๋…•. ๋„ค, ๋‚ด์ผ์€ ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ช‡ ์‹œ๊ฐ€ ์ข‹๋‚˜์š” ? ์˜ค์ „์ด๋‚˜ ์˜คํ›„์— ๋งŒ๋‚  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•Œ๋ ค์ค˜์š”.
06:15
Don't write business email like you text a friend.ย ย 
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์นœ๊ตฌ์—๊ฒŒ ๋ฌธ์ž๋ฅผ ๋ณด๋‚ด๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
06:18
Business email is often friendly, but youย  can still maintain a professional tone.ย ย 
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๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์€ ์นœ๊ทผํ•œ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ๊ฐ€ ๋งŽ์ง€๋งŒ ์—ฌ์ „ํžˆ ์ „๋ฌธ์ ์ธ ์–ด์กฐ๋ฅผ ์œ ์ง€ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:23
How would you change these statements? Makeย  them more appropriate for business email.
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์ด ์ง„์ˆ ์„ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋ฐ”๊พธ์‹œ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ๋” ์ ํ•ฉํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“œ์„ธ์š”.
06:41
Hi Gwen. I got the document. Thanks. I'll readย  it and return a signed copy as soon as possible.ย ย 
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์•ˆ๋…• ๊ทธ์›ฌ. ๋‚˜๋Š” ๋ฌธ์„œ๋ฅผ ์–ป์—ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ด์š”. ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ฝ๊ณ  ์„œ๋ช…ํ•œ ์‚ฌ๋ณธ์„ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ํ•œ ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๋Œ๋ ค๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:47
Best, Teresa
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์ตœ๊ณ , ํ…Œ๋ ˆ์‚ฌ
07:00
Hi Gwen. I read the document, andย  I have a question about item 5.ย ย 
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ํ•˜์ด ๊ทธ์›ฌ. ๋ฌธ์„œ๋ฅผ ์ฝ๊ณ  ํ•ญ๋ชฉ 5์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:03
It asks for an employee code. I don't know whereย  to find that. Please advise. Thanks, Teresa
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์ง์› ์ฝ”๋“œ๋ฅผ ์š”๊ตฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์–ด๋””์„œ ์ฐพ์•„์•ผ ํ• ์ง€ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์กฐ์–ธ ๋ถ€ํƒ๋“œ๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. Teresa
07:13
Don't write every email like a formalย  business letter, especially in a long thread.ย ย 
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๋ชจ๋“  ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์„œ์‹ ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” . ํŠนํžˆ ๊ธด ์Šค๋ ˆ๋“œ๋กœ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
07:20
Email needs to be efficient. Don't wasteย  time on long greetings and closingsย ย 
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์€ ํšจ์œจ์ ์ด์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋Œ€ํ™”๋ชฉ๋ก ๋‚ด์—์„œ ์ฃผ๊ณ ๋ฐ›๋Š” ์†๋„๊ฐ€ ๋งค์šฐ ๋น ๋ฅธ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๊ธด ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง๊ณผ ๋งˆ๋ฌด๋ฆฌ์— ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ๋‚ญ๋น„ํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”
07:25
when the back-and-forthย  within a thread is very fast.
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07:32
Let's look at this thread. It's fairly typical.ย  An early message uses the standard structure.ย ย 
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์ด ์Šค๋ ˆ๋“œ๋ฅผ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ƒ๋‹นํžˆ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ดˆ๊ธฐ ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋Š” ํ‘œ์ค€ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:38
There's a greeting, the body,ย  followed by the closing and signature.ย ย 
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์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง, ๋ณธ๋ฌธ, ํํšŒ ๋ฐ ์„œ๋ช…์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:46
The reply uses the same format: greeting,ย  body, closing signature. The next reply,ย ย 
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ํšŒ์‹ ์€ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง, ๋ณธ๋ฌธ, ์ข…๋ฃŒ ์„œ๋ช…๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋™์ผํ•œ ํ˜•์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:54
which came soon after, omits the greeting andย  closing. The signature is there by default.
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๊ณง์ด์–ด ์˜จ ๋‹ค์Œ ํšŒ์‹ ์€ ์ธ์‚ฌ์™€ ๋งˆ๋ฌด๋ฆฌ๋ฅผ ์ƒ๋žตํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์„œ๋ช…์€ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:08
Don't overuse or misuse punctuation marks.ย ย 
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๋ฌธ์žฅ ๋ถ€ํ˜ธ๋ฅผ ๋‚จ์šฉํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์˜ค์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:12
Let me quickly quiz you. Howย  should we end every sentence?
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๋นจ๋ฆฌ ํ€ด์ฆˆ๋ฅผ ๋‚ด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ชจ๋“  ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋๋‚ด์•ผ ํ• ๊นŒ์š”?
08:19
With a period. And how should a question end?ย  With a question mark. What's this called?
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๊ธฐ๊ฐ„์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋๋‚˜์•ผ ํ• ๊นŒ์š”? ๋ฌผ์Œํ‘œ๋กœ. ์ด๊ฑธ ๋ญ๋ผ๊ณ  ๋ถ€๋ฅด์ง€?
08:32
An exclamation point. It usuallyย  expresses strong emotion.
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๋Š๋‚Œํ‘œ. ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ ๊ฐ•ํ•œ ๊ฐ์ •์„ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:39
Okay. Let's look at a message and see ifย  the punctuation marks are used well or not.
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์ข‹์•„์š”. ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋ฅผ ๋ณด๊ณ  ๋ฌธ์žฅ ๋ถ€ํ˜ธ๊ฐ€ ์ž˜ ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋˜์—ˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
08:48
So, the first thing I see here is the lack ofย  any line breaks. Let's separate the greetingย ย 
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ ๊ฐ€์žฅ ๋จผ์ € ๋ณด๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ์ค„ ๋ฐ”๊ฟˆ์ด ์—†๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง
08:54
and the signature. The most common wayย  to punctuate a greeting is with a comma.ย ย 
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๊ณผ ์„œ๋ช…์„ ๋ถ„๋ฆฌํ•ฉ์‹œ๋‹ค. ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ๊ตฌ๋‘์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ง€์ •ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ์‰ผํ‘œ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:00
Sentences need to start with capital letters, andย  we're not going to join sentences with commas.ย ย 
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๋ฌธ์žฅ์€ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•˜๋ฉฐ ์‰ผํ‘œ๋กœ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:07
A sentence needs to end with a period. Be sureย  you know how to identify a sentence. If it's aย ย 
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๋ฌธ์žฅ์€ ๋งˆ์นจํ‘œ๋กœ ๋๋‚˜์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์‹๋ณ„ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ธ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ
09:14
question, end with a question mark. In businessย  email, don't try to combine a question mark withย ย 
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๋ฌผ์Œํ‘œ๋กœ ๋๋‚ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ๋ฌผ์Œํ‘œ๋ฅผ ๋Š๋‚Œํ‘œ์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”
09:20
an exclamation point. And if it's not aย  real question, it should end with a period.
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. ์‹ค์ œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์•„๋‹Œ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋งˆ์นจํ‘œ๋กœ ๋๋‚˜์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:32
To review standard use ofย  punctuation in American English,ย ย 
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๋ฏธ๊ตญ ์˜์–ด์—์„œ ๊ตฌ๋‘์ ์˜ ํ‘œ์ค€ ์‚ฌ์šฉ์„ ๊ฒ€ํ† ํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด
09:36
check out my writing skills playlist. I'llย  put the link in the video description.
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๋‚ด ์“ฐ๊ธฐ ๊ธฐ์ˆ  ํ”Œ๋ ˆ์ด๋ฆฌ์ŠคํŠธ๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์„ธ์š”. ๋™์˜์ƒ ์„ค๋ช…์— ๋งํฌ๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:44
Don't repeat what isn't necessary. Even formalย  business email can be concise. Polite requests,ย ย 
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ํ•„์š”ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์€ ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ฐ˜๋ณตํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๊ณต์‹์ ์ธ ๋น„์ฆˆ๋‹ˆ์Šค ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ๋„ ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:52
for example, might use longer structures, butย  that doesn't mean a lot of repetition is needed.ย ย 
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด ๊ณต์†ํ•œ ์š”์ฒญ์€ ๋” ๊ธด ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๊ทธ๋ ‡๋‹ค๊ณ  ํ•ด์„œ ๋งŽ์€ ๋ฐ˜๋ณต์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์€ ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ƒ๋žตํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด
09:59
Watch my lesson on ellipsis to gain a betterย  understanding of when words can be omitted.
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๋” ์ž˜ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ์ค„์ž„ํ‘œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ฐ•์˜๋ฅผ ์‹œ์ฒญํ•˜์„ธ์š” .
10:09
Here we have a message from Max.ย  He's writing to an admissions office.ย ย 
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— Max์˜ ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋Š” ์ž…ํ•™์ฒ˜์— ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:13
Let's read his email. Hello. I am applying forย  the MBA program, and I plan to complete someย ย 
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๊ทธ์˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ฝ์–ด๋ณด์ž. ์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š”. MBA ํ”„๋กœ๊ทธ๋žจ์— ์ง€์›ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ผ๋ถ€
10:19
of my coursework remotely. The website does notย  clearly state which courses are offered online.ย ย 
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๊ณผ์ •์„ ์›๊ฒฉ์œผ๋กœ ์™„๋ฃŒํ•  ๊ณ„ํš์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ์—๋Š” ์–ด๋–ค ๊ณผ์ •์ด ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ์œผ๋กœ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋ช…์‹œ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:25
There are a number of electives I amย  specifically interested in taking,ย ย 
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์ œ๊ฐ€ ํŠน๋ณ„ํžˆ ๊ด€์‹ฌ์„ ๊ฐ–๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ์„ ํƒ ๊ณผ๋ชฉ์ด ๋งŽ๊ธฐ
10:29
so I would like to confirm in advance if theyย  are only offered on campus. As I am applying forย ย 
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๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์บ ํผ์Šค์—์„œ๋งŒ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ฏธ๋ฆฌ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:34
the MBA program and the deadline is next week, Iย  wish to clarify my options as soon as possible. Itย ย 
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MBA ํ”„๋กœ๊ทธ๋žจ์— ์ง€์›ํ•˜๊ณ  ๋งˆ๊ฐ์ผ์ด ๋‹ค์Œ ์ฃผ์ด๋ฏ€๋กœ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ํ•œ ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ์„ ํƒ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์„ ๋ช…ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:40
is my hope that you will be able to provide thisย  clarification so that I will be able to meet theย ย 
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10:45
deadline and submit my application on time. Wouldย  you please tell me if the courses listed belowย ย 
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๋งˆ๊ฐ์ผ์„ ๋งž์ถ”๊ณ  ์ œ ์‹ ์ฒญ์„œ๋ฅผ ์ œ์‹œ๊ฐ„์— ์ œ์ถœํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋„๋ก ์ด ์„ค๋ช…์„ ์ œ๊ณตํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ๋ฐ”๋ž๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•„๋ž˜์— ๋‚˜์—ด๋œ ๊ณผ์ •์ด
10:51
are offered online or if they are at least offeredย  online for some semesters if not for others?ย ย 
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์˜จ๋ผ์ธ์œผ๋กœ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋˜๋Š” ์ผ๋ถ€ ํ•™๊ธฐ ๋™์•ˆ์€ ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ์œผ๋กœ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ์•Œ๋ ค์ฃผ์‹œ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
10:58
I would greatly appreciate the clarification.ย  I look forward to your response regarding theย ย 
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๋‚˜๋Š” ์„ค๋ช…์„ ํฌ๊ฒŒ ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๊ด€์‹ฌ์„ ํ‘œ๋ช…ํ•œ ์ด ๊ณผ์ •์˜ ์„ค๋ช…์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ๋‹ต๋ณ€์„ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
11:03
clarification of these courses in which I haveย  expressed interest. Thank you. Best regards, Max.ย ย 
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. ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•ˆ๋ถ€ ์ธ์‚ฌ, ๋งฅ์Šค.
11:11
That was quite wordy. I think it'sย  fair to say it's rather verbose.ย ย 
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ฝค ์žฅํ™ฉํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์†Œ ์žฅํ™ฉํ•˜๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๊ณตํ‰ํ•˜๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:16
All right. Let's help Max and reduceย  repetition. I think we can startย ย 
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€. Max๋ฅผ ๋„์™€ ๋ฐ˜๋ณต์„ ์ค„์ด์„ธ์š”. ๋ฐ”๋กœ ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์„ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
11:20
right around here. We don't need to sayย  we're applying again. Take it out, Max.ย ย 
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. ๋‹ค์‹œ ์‹ ์ฒญํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊บผ๋‚ด, ๋งฅ์Šค.
11:28
All right. Yes, you want to clarify, so don'tย  ask for clarification. Let's take that out.
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€. ์˜ˆ, ์„ค๋ช…์„ ์›ํ•˜๋ฏ€๋กœ ์„ค๋ช…์„ ์š”์ฒญํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”. ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๊บผ๋‚ด์ž.
11:39
Now, if you're concerned about the deadline,ย  it's obvious. Right? So, do we need to explainย ย 
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์ด์ œ ๊ธฐํ•œ์ด ๊ฑฑ์ •๋œ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋‹น์—ฐํ•œ ์ผ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ? ๊ทธ๋ ‡๋‹ค๋ฉด
11:48
why you're concerned about the deadline? No.
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๋งˆ๊ฐ์ผ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์šฐ๋ คํ•˜๋Š” ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•ด์•ผ ํ• ๊นŒ์š”? ์•„๋‹ˆ์š”.
11:53
You don't need to talk about the deadline twice.
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๋งˆ๊ฐ์ผ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ ๋งํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:58
Let's just take that all out.ย  It's all understood. It is clear.
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๊ทธ๋ƒฅ ๋‹ค ๊บผ๋‚ด์ž. ๋ชจ๋‘ ์ดํ•ด๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํ•˜๋‹ค.
12:06
We can certainly reduce this. Let's make itย  shorter, more concise. How about "at any time"?
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ์ค„์ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋” ์งง๊ณ  ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. "์–ธ์ œ๋“ ์ง€"๋Š” ์–ด๋–ป์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
12:15
Okay. This is all polite, but this final part isย  way too long. You just want to look forward to theย ย 
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์ข‹์•„์š”. ๋‹ค ๊ณต์†ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์ด ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๊น๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์‘๋‹ต์„ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ธฐ๋งŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
12:21
response. Perhaps we can combine this appreciationย  with the "thank you." Here's my suggestion.ย ย 
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. ์•„๋งˆ๋„ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์ด ๊ฐ์‚ฌ๋ฅผ '๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค'์™€ ๊ฒฐํ•ฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—ฌ๊ธฐ ์ œ ์ œ์•ˆ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:33
How about, "Thank you in advance"? That'sย  what we need to say. Thank you in advanceย ย 
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"๋ฏธ๋ฆฌ ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋Š” ์–ด๋–ป์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ๋งํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ๋‚ด์–ด ๋„์™€์ฃผ์…”์„œ ๋ฏธ๋ฆฌ ๊ฐ์‚ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
12:40
for your time and assistance.
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.
12:44
Then we'll delete this one, and it looks good.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ ์ด ํ•ญ๋ชฉ์„ ์‚ญ์ œํ•˜๋ฉด ์ข‹์•„ ๋ณด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:49
Of course, Max needs to make his list. Let'sย ย 
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๋ฌผ๋ก  Max๋Š” ๋ชฉ๋ก์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:53
make space for that, so max doesย  not forget to list the courses.
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Max๊ฐ€ ๊ณผ์ •์„ ๋‚˜์—ดํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์žŠ์ง€ ์•Š๋„๋ก ๊ณต๊ฐ„์„ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
13:03
Now let's read the message aloud to see howย  well it flows. Hello. I am applying for theย ย 
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์ด์ œ ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๊ฐ€ ์–ผ๋งˆ๋‚˜ ์ž˜ ์ „๋‹ฌ๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ์†Œ๋ฆฌ๋‚ด์–ด ์ฝ์–ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
13:08
MBA program, and I plan to complete some ofย  my coursework remotely. The website does notย ย 
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MBA ํ”„๋กœ๊ทธ๋žจ์— ์ง€์›ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ผ๋ถ€ ๊ณผ์ •์„ ์›๊ฒฉ์œผ๋กœ ์™„๋ฃŒํ•  ๊ณ„ํš์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ์—๋Š”
13:13
clearly state which courses are offered online.ย  There are a number of electives I am specificallyย ย 
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์–ด๋–ค ๊ณผ์ •์ด ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ์œผ๋กœ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋ช…์‹œ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ œ๊ฐ€ ํŠน๋ณ„ํžˆ ๊ด€์‹ฌ์„ ๊ฐ–๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ์„ ํƒ ๊ณผ๋ชฉ์ด ๋งŽ๊ธฐ
13:19
interested in taking, so I would like to confirmย  in advance if they are only offered on campus.ย ย 
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๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์บ ํผ์Šค์—์„œ๋งŒ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ฏธ๋ฆฌ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:24
As the deadline is next week, I wish toย  clarify my options as soon as possible.ย ย 
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๋งˆ๊ฐ์ผ์ด ๋‹ค์Œ ์ฃผ์ด๋ฏ€๋กœ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ํ•œ ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๋‚ด ์˜ต์…˜์„ ๋ช…ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•„๋ž˜
13:29
Would you please tell me if the courses listedย  below are offered online at any time? I lookย ย 
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๋‚˜์—ด๋œ ๊ณผ์ •์ด ์–ธ์ œ๋“ ์ง€ ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ์œผ๋กœ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ์•Œ๋ ค์ฃผ์‹œ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
13:34
forward to your response. Thank you in advanceย  for your time and assistance. Best regards, Max
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ํšŒ์‹ ์„ ๊ธฐ๋‹ค๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ๋‚ด์–ด ๋„์›€์„ ์ฃผ์…”์„œ ๋ฏธ๋ฆฌ ๊ฐ์‚ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•ˆ๋ถ€ ์ธ์‚ฌ, Max
13:45
Don't forget the need forย  some pleasantries and context.ย ย 
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์•ฝ๊ฐ„์˜ ์œ ์พŒํ•จ๊ณผ ๋งฅ๋ฝ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ํ•„์š”์„ฑ์„ ์žŠ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
13:49
You can't always assume that your readerย  knows exactly what you're referring to.
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๋…์ž๊ฐ€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๋‚ด์šฉ์„ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๊ณ  ํ•ญ์ƒ ๊ฐ€์ •ํ•  ์ˆ˜๋Š” ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์œ ์พŒํ•จ๊ณผ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ํฌํ•จํ•˜์—ฌ
13:55
Check out other lessons I have onย  including pleasantries and email.ย ย 
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๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์„ธ์š” .
14:00
I also teach formal andย  informal greetings and closings.
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๋˜ํ•œ ๊ณต์‹ ๋ฐ ๋น„๊ณต์‹ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง๊ณผ ๋งˆ๋ฌด๋ฆฌ๋„ ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์นฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:06
Let's jump into this message and see how itย  sounds. Hello Mia. Re: 33 Cherry Street. Theseย ย 
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์ด ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋กœ ์ด๋™ํ•˜์—ฌ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋“ค๋ฆฌ๋Š”์ง€ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์•ˆ๋…• ๋ฏธ์•„. Re: ์ฒด๋ฆฌ์ŠคํŠธ๋ฆฌํŠธ 33๋ฒˆ์ง€.
14:13
are the days I am available to view the property:ย  Saturday, Sunday, Monday. Best, Adam Rush.ย ย 
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์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ถ€๋™์‚ฐ์„ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์š”์ผ์€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค: ํ† ์š”์ผ, ์ผ์š”์ผ, ์›”์š”์ผ. ์ตœ๊ณ , ์•„๋‹ด ๋Ÿฌ์‰ฌ.
14:19
Well, Adam, you might be rushing. First of all,ย  I'm not sure if he knows Mia or if Mia knows him.ย ย 
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๊ธ€์Ž„, ์•„๋‹ด, ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์„œ๋‘๋ฅด๊ณ  ์žˆ์„์ง€๋„ ๋ชจ๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์šฐ์„  ๊ทธ๊ฐ€ ๋ฏธ์•„๋ฅผ ์•„๋Š”์ง€ ๋ฏธ์•„๊ฐ€ ๊ทธ๋ฅผ ์•„๋Š”์ง€ ์ž˜ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:28
I'm going to suggest that Adam add a bit moreย  context. He can start in the subject line. Whatย ย 
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Adam์—๊ฒŒ ์ปจํ…์ŠคํŠธ๋ฅผ ์ข€ ๋” ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜๋ผ๊ณ  ์ œ์•ˆํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๊ทธ๋Š” ์ œ๋ชฉ์—์„œ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:35
is the request? Let's be more specific. It's aย  request to view a property, specifically 33 Cherryย ย 
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์š”์ฒญ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ๊ฐ€์š”? ์ข€ ๋” ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋งํ•ด๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค. ์†์„ฑ, ํŠนํžˆ 33 Cherry Street๋ฅผ ๋ณด๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ ์š”์ฒญ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
14:45
Street. Mia must be a listing agent, a real estateย  agent. If this is the first message to Mia, heย ย 
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. Mia๋Š” ๋ฆฌ์ŠคํŒ… ์—์ด์ „ํŠธ, ๋ถ€๋™์‚ฐ ์—์ด์ „ํŠธ์—ฌ์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด Mia์—๊ฒŒ ๋ณด๋‚ด๋Š” ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฉ”์‹œ์ง€๋ผ๋ฉด ๊ทธ๋Š”
14:53
can show a little more respect. Let's write fullย  sentences. Make it sound nice. He's asking for aย ย 
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์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋” ์กด๊ฒฝ์‹ฌ์„ ๋ณด์ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์™„์ „ํ•œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค . ์ข‹์€ ์†Œ๋ฆฌ๋กœ ๋งŒ๋“œ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๊ทธ๋Š”
15:00
favor. He wants to see that house. I noted thatย  you are the listing agent for 33 Cherry Street.ย ย 
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๋ถ€ํƒ์„ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋Š” ๊ทธ ์ง‘์„ ๋ณด๊ณ  ์‹ถ์–ดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ท€ํ•˜๊ฐ€ 33 Cherry Street์˜ ์ƒ์žฅ ๋Œ€๋ฆฌ์ธ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋ง์”€๋“œ๋ ธ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:09
He can explain what he wants and why. Iย  missed the open house earlier this week.ย ย 
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๊ทธ๋Š” ์ž์‹ ์ด ์›ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๊ณผ ๊ทธ ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋ฒˆ ์ฃผ ์ดˆ ์˜คํ”ˆ ํ•˜์šฐ์Šค๋ฅผ ๋†“์ณค์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:17
The request now. Would it be possible to scheduleย  a showing? These are the days I'm available toย ย 
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์ง€๊ธˆ ์š”์ฒญํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ƒ์˜ ์ผ์ •์„ ์žก์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ? ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋ถ€๋™์‚ฐ์„ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋‚ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
15:26
view the property. I think one nice thing to addย  here would be "thank you." Thank you in advance.
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. ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜๋ฉด ์ข‹์„ ํ•œ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋Š” '๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค'๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฏธ๋ฆฌ ๊ฐ์‚ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:35
All right. That looks better, Adam. Ohย  let's add one more thing. Have a good day!ย ย 
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€. ๊ทธ๊ฒŒ ๋” ์ข‹์•„ ๋ณด์ธ๋‹ค, ์•„๋‹ด. ์•„, ํ•œ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋” ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ข‹์€ ํ•˜๋ฃจ ๋ณด๋‚ด์„ธ์š”!
15:41
Since you're asking for something, be nice.ย  Remember not to rush so much that you forgetย ย 
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋ฌด์–ธ๊ฐ€๋ฅผ ์š”๊ตฌํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์œผ๋‹ˆ ์นœ์ ˆํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋Œ€ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
15:46
context and pleasantries.
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๋งฅ๋ฝ๊ณผ ๋†๋‹ด์„ ์žŠ์„ ์ •๋„๋กœ ์„œ๋‘๋ฅด์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
15:51
We'll end here. Please like theย  video if you found it useful.ย ย 
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ ๋งˆ์น˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์œ ์šฉํ–ˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์ข‹์•„์š”๋ฅผ ๋ˆŒ๋Ÿฌ์ฃผ์„ธ์š”.
15:54
As always, thanks for watching and happy studies!
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๋Š˜ ๊ทธ๋ ‡๋“ฏ์ด ์‹œ์ฒญํ•ด์ฃผ์…”์„œ ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ฆ๊ฑฐ์šด ๊ณต๋ถ€ํ•˜์„ธ์š”!
16:00
Follow me on Facebook, Twitter, andย  Instagram. Why not join me on Patreon?ย ย 
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Facebook, Twitter, Instagram์—์„œ ๋‚˜๋ฅผ ํŒ”๋กœ์šฐํ•˜์„ธ์š” . Patreon์—์„œ ๋‚˜์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
16:06
And don't forget to subscribe on YouTube.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์œ ํŠœ๋ธŒ ๊ตฌ๋…๋„ ์žŠ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
์ด ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ ์ •๋ณด

์ด ์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ํ•™์Šต์— ์œ ์šฉํ•œ YouTube ๋™์˜์ƒ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „ ์„ธ๊ณ„ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜๋“ค์ด ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ ๋™์˜์ƒ ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ” ํด๋ฆญํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ณณ์—์„œ ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์žฌ์ƒ์— ๋งž์ถฐ ์ž๋ง‰์ด ์Šคํฌ๋กค๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด๋‚˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ๋ฌธ์˜ ์–‘์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฌธ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.

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