How to Improve Your English Writing - English Writing Lesson

702,724 views ・ 2016-04-22

Oxford Online English


μ•„λž˜ μ˜λ¬Έμžλ§‰μ„ λ”λΈ”ν΄λ¦­ν•˜μ‹œλ©΄ μ˜μƒμ΄ μž¬μƒλ©λ‹ˆλ‹€. λ²ˆμ—­λœ μžλ§‰μ€ 기계 λ²ˆμ—­λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.

00:01
Hello.
0
1930
1000
μ•ˆλ…•ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
00:02
I'm Oli.
1
2930
1000
μ €λŠ” μ˜¬λ¦¬μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:03
Welcome to Oxford Online English!
2
3930
1740
μ˜₯μŠ€ν¬λ“œ 온라인 μ˜μ–΄μ— μ˜€μ‹  것을 ν™˜μ˜ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€!
00:05
In this lesson, you can learn about how to improve your English writing.
3
5670
5930
이 μˆ˜μ—…μ—μ„œλŠ” μ˜μ–΄ μž‘λ¬Έμ„ ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚€λŠ” 방법에 λŒ€ν•΄ 배울 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:11
Learning to write well is often the most difficult skill for English learners.
4
11600
4980
글을 잘 μ“°λŠ” 법을 λ°°μš°λŠ” 것은 μ’…μ’… μ˜μ–΄ ν•™μŠ΅μžμ—κ²Œ κ°€μž₯ μ–΄λ €μš΄ κΈ°μˆ μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:16
Writing well requires great control of language and extreme attention to detail.
5
16580
5790
글을 잘 μ“°λ €λ©΄ μ–Έμ–΄λ₯Ό 잘 μ œμ–΄ ν•˜κ³  μ„ΈλΆ€ 사항에 κ·Ήλ„μ˜ 주의λ₯Ό κΈ°μšΈμ—¬μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:22
Even then, it's not easy, even for native speakers.
6
22370
3950
κ·ΈλŸΌμ—λ„ λΆˆκ΅¬ν•˜κ³  μ›μ–΄λ―Όμ—κ²Œλ„ 쉽지 μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
00:26
In this video, you can see some advice that will help you to improve your English writing,
7
26320
5120
이 λΉ„λ””μ˜€μ—μ„œλŠ”
00:31
whatever level your English is now.
8
31440
3450
ν˜„μž¬ μ˜μ–΄ μˆ˜μ€€μ— 관계없이 μ˜μ–΄ μž‘λ¬Έμ„ ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚€λŠ” 데 도움이 λ˜λŠ” λͺ‡ 가지 쑰언을 λ³Ό 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
00:34
First, understand your audience.
9
34890
4300
첫째, 청쀑을 μ΄ν•΄ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
00:39
Before you start writing, you need to answer two questions.
10
39190
4709
κΈ€μ“°κΈ°λ₯Ό μ‹œμž‘ν•˜κΈ° 전에 두 가지 μ§ˆλ¬Έμ— λ‹΅ν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
00:43
Question one: who are you writing for?
11
43899
4241
질문 1: λˆ„κ΅¬λ₯Ό μœ„ν•΄ 글을 μ“°κ³  μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
00:48
Are you writing for your friend, your colleague, your teacher, your manager, an examiner, who?
12
48140
11079
친ꡬ, λ™λ£Œ, μ„ μƒλ‹˜, λ§€λ‹ˆμ €, 심사관, λˆ„κ΅¬λ₯Ό μœ„ν•΄ 글을 μ“°κ³  μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
00:59
Secondly, what are you trying to achieve?
13
59219
3791
λ‘˜μ§Έ, 무엇을 μ„±μ·¨ν•˜λ €κ³  ν•˜λŠ”κ°€?
01:03
Are you trying to give someone information?
14
63010
2600
λˆ„κ΅°κ°€μ—κ²Œ 정보λ₯Ό μ£Όλ €κ³  ν•˜μ‹œλ‚˜μš”?
01:05
Are you trying to convince somebody of your point of view?
15
65610
5350
λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ 관점을 λ‹€λ₯Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ—κ²Œ λ‚©λ“μ‹œν‚€λ €κ³  λ…Έλ ₯ν•˜κ³  μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ ?
01:10
Are you trying to entertain somebody and make them laugh?
16
70960
3730
λˆ„κ΅°κ°€λ₯Ό 즐겁게 ν•˜κ³  μ›ƒκ²Œ λ§Œλ“€λ €κ³  ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ ?
01:14
Are you just trying to pass an exam, or are you trying to achieve several different things?
17
74690
8740
μ‹œν—˜μ— ν•©κ²©ν•˜λ €κ³  ν•˜μ‹œλ‚˜μš”, μ•„λ‹ˆλ©΄ μ—¬λŸ¬ 가지 λ‹€λ₯Έ 것듀을 μ„±μ·¨ν•˜λ €κ³  ν•˜μ‹œλ‚˜μš”?
01:23
Thinking about your purpose in writing can really help you to organize your ideas.
18
83430
6160
글을 μ“°λŠ” λͺ©μ μ— λŒ€ν•΄ μƒκ°ν•˜λ©΄ 생각을 μ •λ¦¬ν•˜λŠ” 데 정말 도움이 될 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:29
Now these questions: who are you writing for, and what do you want to achieve, they are
19
89590
4750
이제 μ΄λŸ¬ν•œ 질문: λˆ„κ΅¬λ₯Ό μœ„ν•΄ 글을 μ“°κ³  있으며 무엇을 λ‹¬μ„±ν•˜κ³  μ‹ΆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
01:34
important.
20
94340
1139
μ€‘μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:35
But there's an even more important question: what does your reader want?
21
95479
6121
κ·ΈλŸ¬λ‚˜ 훨씬 더 μ€‘μš”ν•œ 질문이 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. λ…μžκ°€ μ›ν•˜λŠ” 것은 λ¬΄μ—‡μž…λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
01:41
Remember, when you write, you're normally writing for someone else, unless you're writing
22
101600
7140
글을 μ“Έ λ•Œ 일반적으둜 λ‹€λ₯Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ„ μœ„ν•΄ 글을 μ“°λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. 단,
01:48
a diary or a journal for yourself, in which case you can write however you want.
23
108740
5910
일기λ₯Ό μ“°κ±°λ‚˜ μžμ‹ μ„ μœ„ν•΄ 일기λ₯Ό μ“°λŠ” κ²½μš°μ—λŠ” μ›ν•˜λŠ” λŒ€λ‘œ μ“Έ 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
01:54
Normally, however, you're writing for another person.
24
114650
5929
κ·ΈλŸ¬λ‚˜ 일반적으둜 λ‹€λ₯Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ„ μœ„ν•΄ μž‘μ„±ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
02:00
Whoever reads your writing will give their time and their attention to read what you've
25
120579
5771
λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ 글을 μ½λŠ” μ‚¬λžŒμ€ λˆ„κ΅¬λ‚˜ 당신이 μ“΄ 글을 읽기 μœ„ν•΄ μ‹œκ°„κ³Ό 관심을 기울일 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€
02:06
written.
26
126350
1550
.
02:07
Why?
27
127900
1550
μ™œ?
02:09
Why will someone give their time to read what you've written?
28
129450
3879
μ™œ λˆ„κ΅°κ°€κ°€ 당신이 μ“΄ 것을 읽기 μœ„ν•΄ μ‹œκ°„μ„ λ‚΄κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ ?
02:13
Okay, so for example, if you're writing an essay at school or at university for your
29
133329
6590
μ’‹μ•„μš”, 예λ₯Ό λ“€μ–΄ ν•™κ΅λ‚˜ λŒ€ν•™κ΅μ—μ„œ μ„ μƒλ‹˜μ„ μœ„ν•΄ 에세이λ₯Ό μ“΄λ‹€λ©΄
02:19
teacher, your teacher will spend time reading your essay to see if you've understood the
30
139919
5830
μ„ μƒλ‹˜μ€ μ—¬λŸ¬λΆ„μ΄ 주제λ₯Ό μ΄ν•΄ν–ˆλŠ”μ§€ μ•„λ‹Œμ§€ ν™•μΈν•˜κΈ° μœ„ν•΄ 에세이λ₯Ό μ½λŠ” 데 μ‹œκ°„μ„ ν• μ• ν•  κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€
02:25
topic or not.
31
145749
2520
.
02:28
If you're writing an email or a letter to a friend, your friend will probably want to
32
148269
6190
당신이 μΉœκ΅¬μ—κ²Œ μ΄λ©”μΌμ΄λ‚˜ νŽΈμ§€λ₯Ό μ“°κ³  μžˆλ‹€λ©΄ , λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ μΉœκ΅¬λŠ” μ•„λ§ˆλ„
02:34
hear some news about your life and maybe hear some funny stories.
33
154459
5371
λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ 삢에 λŒ€ν•œ μ†Œμ‹κ³Ό μž¬λ―ΈμžˆλŠ” 이야기λ₯Ό λ“£κ³  μ‹Άμ–΄ν•  κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
02:39
If you're writing in an exam, the examiner will be looking for some specific things which
34
159830
6219
μ‹œν—˜μ— μ‘μ‹œν•˜λŠ” 경우 μ‹œν—˜κ΄€μ€ 점수λ₯Ό κ²°μ •ν•˜κΈ°
02:46
you do or don't do in your writing in order to decide your score.
35
166049
7121
μœ„ν•΄ μž‘λ¬Έμ—μ„œ μˆ˜ν–‰ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ μˆ˜ν–‰ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠλŠ” λͺ‡ 가지 νŠΉμ • 사항을 찾을 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
02:53
Understanding your reader, or your readers, and understanding what they want from your
36
173170
5310
λ…μž λ˜λŠ” λ…μžλ₯Ό 이해 ν•˜κ³  그듀이 λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ κΈ€μ—μ„œ μ›ν•˜λŠ” 것을 μ΄ν•΄ν•˜λŠ” 것이
02:58
writing is essential.
37
178480
2810
ν•„μˆ˜μ μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. κΈ€μ“°κΈ° κ³Όμ •μ˜
03:01
You need to think about this from the beginning to the end of the writing process.
38
181290
6029
μ²˜μŒλΆ€ν„° λκΉŒμ§€ 이것에 λŒ€ν•΄ 생각해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
03:07
So are you ready to start writing yet?
39
187319
2931
아직 글을 μ“Έ μ€€λΉ„κ°€ λ˜μ…¨λ‚˜μš”?
03:10
Not quite.
40
190250
1640
μ’€ λΉ μ§€λŠ”.
03:11
Next, you need to plan your writing.
41
191890
4669
λ‹€μŒμœΌλ‘œ κΈ€μ“°κΈ°λ₯Ό κ³„νšν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:16
If you don't plan your writing, there's a good chance you will miss out some important
42
196559
5430
글을 κ³„νšν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμœΌλ©΄ λͺ‡ 가지 μ€‘μš”ν•œ
03:21
ideas, you won't include them in your writing, or you might include some unnecessary ideas
43
201989
6810
아이디어λ₯Ό λ†“μΉ˜κ±°λ‚˜ 글에 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜μ§€ μ•Šκ±°λ‚˜
03:28
that will confuse your reader and make your purpose unclear.
44
208799
4360
λ…μžλ₯Ό ν˜Όλž€μŠ€λŸ½κ²Œ ν•˜κ³  λͺ©μ μ„ λΆˆλΆ„λͺ…ν•˜κ²Œ λ§Œλ“œλŠ” λΆˆν•„μš”ν•œ 아이디어λ₯Ό 포함할 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:33
Have you ever written something and got stuck in the middle?
45
213159
4660
글을 μ“°λ‹€κ°€ 쀑간에 λ§‰ν˜€λ³Έ 적 μžˆμœΌμ‹ κ°€μš” ?
03:37
You start a paragraph, or you start a sentence, and in the middle you stop and you think,
46
217819
4780
문단을 μ‹œμž‘ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‹œμž‘ ν•˜κ³  쀑간에 λ©ˆμΆ”κ³  μƒκ°ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
03:42
"What am I doing?
47
222599
2430
"λ‚΄κ°€ 뭘 ν•˜κ³  μžˆλŠ” 거지?
03:45
Where am I going?
48
225029
1031
μ–΄λ””λ‘œ κ°€λŠ” 거지?
03:46
What do I say next?
49
226060
1689
λ‹€μŒμ— 무슨 말을 ν• κΉŒ?
03:47
Uh, help!"
50
227749
1291
μ–΄, λ„μ™€μ€˜!"
03:49
Why does this happen?
51
229040
2770
μ™œ 이런 일이 λ°œμƒν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ? μΆ©λΆ„ν•œ
03:51
Often it happens because you haven't planned enough.
52
231810
3809
κ³„νšμ„ μ„Έμš°μ§€ μ•Šμ•˜κΈ° λ•Œλ¬Έμ— μ’…μ’… λ°œμƒν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
03:55
Imagine that you're in a new city and you're trying to find your way somewhere.
53
235619
4960
당신이 μƒˆλ‘œμš΄ λ„μ‹œμ— 있고 μ–΄λ”˜κ°€μ—μ„œ 길을 찾으렀고 ν•œλ‹€κ³  μƒμƒν•΄λ³΄μ„Έμš”.
04:00
You don't have a map, you don't have a smartphone, there's nobody you can ask.
54
240579
5120
지도도 μ—†κ³ , μŠ€λ§ˆνŠΈν°λ„ μ—†κ³ , λ¬Όμ–΄λ³Ό μ‚¬λžŒλ„ μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:05
Of course, you'll get lost.
55
245699
2070
λ¬Όλ‘  길을 μžƒμ„ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:07
You'll go down streets without knowing where they go.
56
247769
3640
당신은 그듀이 μ–΄λ””λ‘œ κ°€λŠ”μ§€ λͺ¨λ₯Έ 채 거리λ₯Ό λ‚΄λ €κ°ˆ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
04:11
You'll go around in circles.
57
251409
2101
원을 그리며 λŒμ•„λ‹€λ‹ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:13
If you do find the place you were looking for, it will just be because you were lucky.
58
253510
5990
μ°Ύκ³  있던 μž₯μ†Œλ₯Ό μ°Ύμ•˜λ‹€λ©΄ 그것은 단지 운이 μ’‹μ•˜κΈ° λ•Œλ¬ΈμΌ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:19
Writing without planning is very similar.
59
259500
2750
κ³„νš 없이 μ“°λŠ” 것은 맀우 λΉ„μŠ·ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ–΄λ””λ‘œ κ°€λŠ”μ§€ λͺ¨λ₯Έ
04:22
You'll start sentences or paragraphs without knowing where they're going.
60
262250
4470
채 λ¬Έμž₯μ΄λ‚˜ 단락을 μ‹œμž‘ν•˜κ²Œ λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
04:26
You'll waste lots of time writing things, deleting them, rewriting them, deleting them,
61
266720
4531
μž‘μ„±ν•˜κ³ , μ‚­μ œν•˜κ³ , λ‹€μ‹œ μž‘μ„±ν•˜κ³ , μ‚­μ œν•˜κ³ ,
04:31
writing them again.
62
271251
2829
λ‹€μ‹œ μž‘μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 데 λ§Žμ€ μ‹œκ°„μ„ λ‚­λΉ„ν•˜κ²Œ λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:34
If you do achieve your goal, it will only be because you were lucky.
63
274080
4570
λͺ©ν‘œλ₯Ό λ‹¬μ„±ν–ˆλ‹€λ©΄ 운이 μ’‹μ•˜κΈ° λ•Œλ¬ΈμΌ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:38
Remember, you're writing for someone else, and you're writing for a reason.
64
278650
5870
λ‹€λ₯Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ„ μœ„ν•΄ 글을 μ“°κ³  있고 μ΄μœ κ°€ μžˆμ–΄μ„œ 글을 μ“°κ³  μžˆλ‹€λŠ” 점을 κΈ°μ–΅ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
04:44
That means you have a goal, even if it's a simple goal.
65
284520
4130
그것은 λ‹¨μˆœν•œ λͺ©ν‘œλΌλ„ λͺ©ν‘œκ°€ μžˆλ‹€λŠ” 것을 μ˜λ―Έν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ . κ·Έ λͺ©ν‘œμ—
04:48
You need to have a plan of how you're going to reach that goal.
66
288650
5289
μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ 도달할 것인지에 λŒ€ν•œ κ³„νšμ΄ μžˆμ–΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
04:53
That means you need to think about these questions: what are you going to include?
67
293939
6771
즉, λ‹€μŒ μ§ˆλ¬Έμ— λŒ€ν•΄ 생각해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. 무엇을 포함할 것인가?
05:00
What are you going to leave out?
68
300710
1730
무엇을 버릴 것인가?
05:02
And, how are you going to organize your ideas?
69
302440
4630
그리고 아이디어λ₯Ό μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ 정리할 κ±΄κ°€μš”?
05:07
If you're writing something simple, you might just think for a minute or two about what
70
307070
4719
κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ 글을 μ“°κ³  μžˆλ‹€λ©΄ 무엇을 말해야 할지 1~2λΆ„ 정도 μƒκ°ν•˜λ©΄ λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€
05:11
to say.
71
311789
1321
. κΈ΄ 에세이와 같이
05:13
If you're writing something longer and more complex like a long essay, you might need
72
313110
5600
더 κΈΈκ³  λ³΅μž‘ν•œ 글을 μ“°κ³  μžˆλ‹€λ©΄
05:18
to make a written plan.
73
318710
2940
κ³„νšμ„ μ„Έμ›Œμ•Ό ν•  μˆ˜λ„ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:21
So what points should you include and what points should you leave out?
74
321650
4130
κ·Έλ ‡λ‹€λ©΄ μ–΄λ–€ 점을 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜κ³  μ–΄λ–€ 점을 λΉΌμ•Ό ν• κΉŒμš”?
05:25
Well, that's a general question.
75
325780
2300
음, 일반적인 μ§ˆλ¬Έμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:28
If you're not sure, think about your goal and your reader's needs.
76
328080
4179
ν™•μ‹€ν•˜μ§€ μ•Šμ€ 경우 λͺ©ν‘œ 와 λ…μžμ˜ μš”κ΅¬ 사항에 λŒ€ν•΄ 생각해 λ³΄μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
05:32
Ask yourself, "Does my reader need to know this?
77
332259
4870
"λ‚΄ λ…μžκ°€ 이것을 μ•Œμ•„μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
05:37
Will my reader want to know this?
78
337129
3070
λ‚΄ λ…μžκ°€ 이것을 μ•Œκ³  μ‹Άμ–΄ν• κΉŒμš”?
05:40
Does including this point, or including this idea, help me to reach my goal?"
79
340199
6571
이 점을 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ 이 아이디어λ₯Ό ν¬ν•¨ν•˜λŠ” 것이 λ‚΄ λͺ©ν‘œλ₯Ό λ‹¬μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 데 도움이 λ©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?"
05:46
Thinking about these questions will help you to decide what to include in your writing
80
346770
4590
μ΄λŸ¬ν•œ μ§ˆλ¬Έμ— λŒ€ν•΄ 생각해 보면 글에 포함할 λ‚΄μš©
05:51
and what to leave out.
81
351360
2859
κ³Ό μ œμ™Έν•  λ‚΄μš©μ„ κ²°μ •ν•˜λŠ” 데 도움이 λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:54
What about the third question: how are you going to organize your ideas?
82
354219
5010
μ„Έ 번째 μ§ˆλ¬Έμ€ μ–΄λ–»μŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ? 아이디어λ₯Ό μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ 정리할 κ±΄κ°€μš”?
05:59
Let's look.
83
359229
1160
ν•œλ²ˆ 보자.
06:00
You need to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs.
84
360389
4191
아이디어λ₯Ό λͺ…ν™•ν•œ λ‹¨λ½μœΌλ‘œ 정리해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
06:04
Organizing your ideas into paragraphs is important for many reasons.
85
364580
6130
아이디어λ₯Ό λ‹¨λ½μœΌλ‘œ μ •λ¦¬ν•˜λŠ” 것은 μ—¬λŸ¬ 가지 이유둜 μ€‘μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:10
It helps your reader understand what your main points are.
86
370710
3530
그것은 λ…μžκ°€ λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ μš”μ μ΄ 무엇인지 μ΄ν•΄ν•˜λŠ” 데 도움이 λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
06:14
It helps your reader see where you're going and why, and it helps you to stay focused
87
374240
5389
그것은 λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ λ…μžκ°€ 당신이 κ°€κ³  μžˆλŠ” κ³³ κ³Ό 이유λ₯Ό μ•Œ 수 μžˆλ„λ‘ 돕고 당신이 κ³„νšμ— 계속 집쀑
06:19
on your plan and reaching your goal.
88
379629
3841
ν•˜κ³  λͺ©ν‘œλ₯Ό λ‹¬μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 데 도움이 λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:23
So what does it mean in practice to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs?
89
383470
5240
κ·Έλ ‡λ‹€λ©΄ 아이디어λ₯Ό λͺ…ν™•ν•œ λ‹¨λ½μœΌλ‘œ μ •λ¦¬ν•œλ‹€λŠ” 것은 μ‹€μ œλ‘œ 무엇을 μ˜λ―Έν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ ?
06:28
Firstly, each paragraph should have one main idea.
90
388710
4769
첫째, 각 λ‹¨λ½μ—λŠ” ν•˜λ‚˜μ˜ μ£Όμš” 아이디어가 μžˆμ–΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
06:33
If you're writing an essay and you have a list of points to include, put one point in
91
393479
6011
에세이λ₯Ό μž‘μ„± 쀑이고 포함할 포인트 λͺ©λ‘μ΄ μžˆλŠ” 경우 각 단락에 포인트λ₯Ό ν•˜λ‚˜μ”© μž…λ ₯ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€
06:39
each paragraph.
92
399490
2739
.
06:42
Even if you're writing something shorter or simpler, you still need to organize your ideas
93
402229
4651
더 μ§§κ±°λ‚˜ κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ 글을 쓰더라도 아이디어λ₯Ό
06:46
into paragraphs.
94
406880
1970
λ‹¨λ½μœΌλ‘œ 정리해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:48
Don't try to do too much.
95
408850
1670
λ„ˆλ¬΄ 많이 ν•˜λ €κ³  ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€. 각 단락이 ν•œ 가지 일만 ν•˜λ €κ³  ν•˜λ©΄
06:50
Your writing will be much clearer and much easier to read if each paragraph is only trying
96
410520
5369
글이 훨씬 더 λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ³  읽기 μ‰¬μ›Œμ§‘λ‹ˆλ‹€
06:55
to do one thing.
97
415889
1641
.
06:57
An extra point: there's no minimum or maximum length for a paragraph.
98
417530
5530
μΆ”κ°€ 사항: λ‹¨λ½μ—λŠ” μ΅œμ†Œ λ˜λŠ” μ΅œλŒ€ 길이가 μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:03
Sometimes when I teach students writing, they try to make paragraphs longer because they
99
423060
4669
λ•Œλ•Œλ‘œ ν•™μƒλ“€μ—κ²Œ μž‘λ¬Έμ„ κ°€λ₯΄μΉ  λ•Œ 학생듀은
07:07
say, "Oh, this paragraph is too short.
100
427729
1921
"μ•„, 이 문단은 λ„ˆλ¬΄ μ§§μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:09
It needs more words, it needs more sentences."
101
429650
2889
더 λ§Žμ€ 단어가 ν•„μš”ν•˜κ³  더 λ§Žμ€ λ¬Έμž₯이 ν•„μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. "라고 λ§ν•˜λ©΄μ„œ 문단을 더 길게 λ§Œλ“€λ €κ³  ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:12
No, a paragraph should be as long as it needs to be to make your point.
102
432539
4591
μ•„λ‹ˆμš”, 단락은 μš”μ μ„ μ „λ‹¬ν•˜λŠ” 데 ν•„μš”ν•œ 만큼 κΈΈμ–΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
07:17
There's no minimum length.
103
437130
2379
μ΅œμ†Œ κΈΈμ΄λŠ” μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:19
Next, you need to decide how many paragraphs you're going to have and what you're going
104
439509
5081
λ‹€μŒμœΌλ‘œ, μ–Όλ§ˆλ‚˜ λ§Žμ€ 문단을 κ°€μ§ˆ 것인지 그리고
07:24
to put in each one.
105
444590
2049
각 문단에 무엇을 넣을 것인지λ₯Ό κ²°μ •ν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:26
Remember, this is still part of planning.
106
446639
2721
이것은 μ—¬μ „νžˆ β€‹β€‹κ³„νšμ˜ μΌλΆ€μž„μ„ κΈ°μ–΅ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
07:29
We haven't even written a single word yet.
107
449360
3070
μš°λ¦¬λŠ” 아직 ν•œ 단어도 쓰지 μ•Šμ•˜μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:32
Again, you could do this planning in your head, or you could make some short notes,
108
452430
5139
λ‹€μ‹œ λ§ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ, 이 κ³„νšμ„ λ¨Έλ¦Ώμ†μ—μ„œ ν•  μˆ˜λ„ 있고 , 짧은 λ©”λͺ¨λ₯Ό ν•  μˆ˜λ„ 있고,
07:37
or you could make a more detailed written plan.
109
457569
2820
더 μžμ„Έν•œ μ„œλ©΄ κ³„νšμ„ μ„ΈμšΈ μˆ˜λ„ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
07:40
It depends how much time you have, what you're trying to write, and how important it is.
110
460389
6610
μ–Όλ§ˆλ‚˜ λ§Žμ€ μ‹œκ°„μ΄ μžˆλŠ”μ§€, 무엇을 μ“°λ €κ³  ν•˜λŠ”μ§€, 그리고 그것이 μ–Όλ§ˆλ‚˜ μ€‘μš”ν•œμ§€μ— 달렀 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:46
But the important point is when you start writing, you won't have to think about questions
111
466999
5811
ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ μ€‘μš”ν•œ 점은 κΈ€μ“°κΈ°λ₯Ό μ‹œμž‘ν•  λ•Œ
07:52
like, "What do I put in this paragraph?
112
472810
3230
"이 단락에 무엇을 λ„£μ„κΉŒ?
07:56
How many more paragraphs do I need?
113
476040
3200
μ–Όλ§ˆλ‚˜ 더 λ§Žμ€ 단락이 ν•„μš”ν•œμ§€?
07:59
How am I going to finish this sentence?
114
479240
2419
이 λ¬Έμž₯을 μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ λλ‚ΌκΉŒ? "와 같은 μ§ˆλ¬Έμ— λŒ€ν•΄ 생각할 ν•„μš”κ°€ μ—†λ‹€λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:01
You will have thought about all of these things already.
115
481659
2651
이 λͺ¨λ“  것에 λŒ€ν•΄ 이미 μƒκ°ν–ˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
08:04
This will make it much easier to write whatever you're trying to write.
116
484310
5569
μ΄λ ‡κ²Œ ν•˜λ©΄ μž‘μ„±ν•˜λ €λŠ” λ‚΄μš©μ„ 훨씬 μ‰½κ²Œ μž‘μ„±ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:09
Okay, so now you're ready to start writing.
117
489879
3910
이제 μž‘μ„±μ„ μ‹œμž‘ν•  μ€€λΉ„κ°€ λ˜μ—ˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:13
What next?
118
493789
1810
λ‹€μŒμ€ λ¬΄μ—‡μž…λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
08:15
Part four: cut empty words and sentences.
119
495599
5651
4λΆ€: λΉ„μ–΄ μžˆλŠ” 단어와 λ¬Έμž₯을 μž˜λΌλƒ…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:21
There's a simple rule you can use to make your English writing better and clearer: write
120
501250
5860
μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ˜μ–΄ μž‘λ¬Έμ„ 더 μ’‹κ³  λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ²Œ ν•˜κΈ° μœ„ν•΄ μ‚¬μš©ν•  수 μžˆλŠ” κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ κ·œμΉ™:
08:27
as little as possible.
121
507110
3029
κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ ν•œ 적게 μ“°μ„Έμš”.
08:30
Let's look at some examples.
122
510139
2301
λͺ‡ 가지 예λ₯Ό μ‚΄νŽ΄λ³΄κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:32
First, don't use two words if you can use one word.
123
512440
4740
첫째, ν•œ 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•  수 있으면 두 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš” .
08:37
Don't use three words if you can use two words.
124
517180
3070
κ°€λŠ₯ν•˜λ©΄ μ„Έ 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš”. 두 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
08:40
For example, don't say "very tired," say, "exhausted."
125
520250
5680
예λ₯Ό λ“€μ–΄, "맀우 ν”Όκ³€ν•˜λ‹€"라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ 말고 "기진 λ§₯μ§„ν•˜λ‹€"라고 λ§ν•˜μ„Έμš”. "
08:45
"Very" is generally a weak word, and it should be avoided.
126
525930
3500
맀우"λŠ” 일반적으둜 μ•½ν•œ λ‹¨μ–΄μ΄λ―€λ‘œ ν”Όν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:49
It doesn't add much to your meaning.
127
529430
2599
μ˜λ―Έμ— λ³„λ‘œ 도움이 λ˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:52
The same is true for words like "really" or "absolutely."
128
532029
3451
"really" λ˜λŠ” "absolutely"와 같은 λ‹¨μ–΄μ˜ 경우 trueμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
08:55
Use these words as little as possible.
129
535480
2060
μ΄λŸ¬ν•œ λ‹¨μ–΄λŠ” κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ ν•œ 적게 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
08:57
They're very rarely necessary.
130
537540
3700
ν•„μš”ν•œ κ²½μš°λŠ” 거의
09:01
Don't say "as a result" if you can say "consequently."
131
541240
2649
μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. "consequ"라고 말할 수 있으면 "결과적으둜"라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€. "κ·ΈλŸΌμ—λ„ λΆˆκ΅¬ν•˜κ³ "라고 말할
09:03
Don't say "on the other hand" if you can say "nevertheless."
132
543889
4431
수 있으면 "λ°˜λ©΄μ—"라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
09:08
Use fewer words.
133
548320
2170
단어 수λ₯Ό μ€„μ΄μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
09:10
Don't say, "This will get better in the future," say, "This will improve in the future."
134
550490
6390
"μ•žμœΌλ‘œ λ‚˜μ•„μ§ˆκ±°μ•Ό"라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ 말고 "μ•žμœΌλ‘œ μ’‹μ•„μ§ˆκ±°μ•Ό"라고 λ§ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
09:16
Don't say, "She gave me a lot of help," say, "She helped me a lot," or even, "She helped
135
556880
6990
"κ·Έλ…€λŠ” λ‚˜μ—κ²Œ λ§Žμ€ 도움을 쀬어"라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ 말고, "κ·Έλ…€λŠ” λ‚˜λ₯Ό 많이 도와쀬어"라고 λ§ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ 심지어 "κ·Έλ…€λŠ” λ‚˜λ₯Ό 크게 도와쀬어"라고
09:23
me greatly," or just cut "greatly" and say, "She helped me," if you can.
136
563870
6560
λ§ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ κ·Έλƒ₯ "λŒ€λ‹¨νžˆ" μž˜λΌμ„œ "κ·Έλ…€λŠ” λ‚˜λ₯Ό 도와쀬어"라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš”. ν•  수 μžˆλ‹€λ©΄.
09:30
Use fewer words.
137
570430
3159
더 적은 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
09:33
Don't say, "Maybe this will solve the problem," say, "This will solve the problem."
138
573589
5411
"μ•„λ§ˆλ„ 이것이 문제λ₯Ό ν•΄κ²°ν•  κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€. "이것이 문제λ₯Ό ν•΄κ²°ν•  κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
09:39
Words like "maybe" or "perhaps" are generally not necessary.
139
579000
4070
"μ•„λ§ˆλ„" λ˜λŠ” "μ•„λ§ˆλ„"와 같은 λ‹¨μ–΄λŠ” 일반적으둜 ν•„μš”ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
09:43
If you're not sure about something, do you really need to include it?
140
583070
5300
ν™•μ‹€ν•˜μ§€ μ•Šμ€ ν•­λͺ©μ΄ 있으면 포함해야 ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
09:48
If you do want to include something that you're not sure about, use verbs like "might" or
141
588370
5310
ν™•μ‹€ν•˜μ§€ μ•Šμ€ 것을 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜κ³  μ‹Άλ‹€λ©΄ "might" λ˜λŠ” "could"와 같은 동사λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ„Έμš”
09:53
"could."
142
593680
1000
.
09:54
Say, "This might solve the problem."
143
594680
2200
"μ΄λ ‡κ²Œ ν•˜λ©΄ λ¬Έμ œκ°€ 해결될 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
09:56
Don't say, "We need to find someone who can teach our son," say, "We need to find a teacher
144
596880
7590
" 우리 아듀을 κ°€λ₯΄μΉ  수 μžˆλŠ” μ‚¬λžŒμ„ μ°Ύμ•„μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ 말고 "
10:04
for our son."
145
604470
1450
우리 아듀을 μœ„ν•œ μ„ μƒλ‹˜μ„ μ°Ύμ•„μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
10:05
Cut unnecessary words and use as few words as possible.
146
605920
5370
λΆˆν•„μš”ν•œ 단어λ₯Ό μž˜λΌλ‚΄κ³  κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ ν•œ 적은 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€ .
10:11
You can also look at sentences.
147
611290
2260
λ¬Έμž₯도 λ³Ό 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
10:13
In essays, many people tend to include sentences like, "There are many advantages and disadvantages
148
613550
7300
μ—μ„Έμ΄μ—μ„œ λ§Žμ€ μ‚¬λžŒλ“€μ€ "μ΄κ²ƒμ—λŠ” λ§Žμ€ μž₯점과 단점이 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€
10:20
to this.
149
620850
1780
.
10:22
Of course, there are two sides to this issue.
150
622630
2230
λ¬Όλ‘  이 λ¬Έμ œμ—λŠ” 두 가지 츑면이 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
10:24
In this essay, I will discuss all the ideas relevant to this point."
151
624860
5770
이 μ—μ„Έμ΄μ—μ„œλŠ” 이 점과 κ΄€λ ¨λœ λͺ¨λ“  아이디어λ₯Ό λ…Όμ˜ν•  κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ . "와 같은 λ¬Έμž₯을 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜λŠ” κ²½ν–₯이 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
10:30
What do these sentences tell you?
152
630630
2959
이 λ¬Έμž₯듀은 λ‹Ήμ‹ μ—κ²Œ 무엇을 λ§ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
10:33
Do they give you any useful or relevant information?
153
633589
4091
μœ μš©ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ κ΄€λ ¨ μžˆλŠ” 정보λ₯Ό μ œκ³΅ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
10:37
No, and so they should be cut.
154
637680
3200
μ•„λ‹ˆμš”, κ·Έλž˜μ„œ μž˜λΌμ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
10:40
Why is this important?
155
640880
2360
이것이 μ™œ μ€‘μš”ν•œκ°€μš”?
10:43
Well, using fewer words and fewer sentences will make your writing clearer and easier
156
643240
5310
음, 더 적은 단어와 더 적은 λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λ©΄ 글이 더 λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ³  읽기 μ‰¬μ›Œμ§‘λ‹ˆλ‹€
10:48
to read.
157
648550
1180
.
10:49
It will also help you to focus on what you want to say.
158
649730
4660
그것은 λ˜ν•œ 당신이 λ§ν•˜κ³  싢은 것에 μ§‘μ€‘ν•˜λŠ” 데 도움이 될 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
10:54
Try to look at each sentence you write and think, "What does this add to my ideas?
159
654390
6009
당신이 μ“°λŠ” 각 λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‚΄νŽ΄λ³΄κ³  "이것이 λ‚΄ 아이디어에 무엇을 μΆ”κ°€ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
11:00
What does this give my reader?
160
660399
2591
이것은 λ‚΄ λ…μžμ—κ²Œ 무엇을 μ œκ³΅ν•©λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
11:02
How does this help me reach my goal in writing this?"
161
662990
4269
이것이 λ‚΄κ°€ 이 글을 μ“°λŠ” 데 λ‚΄ λͺ©ν‘œλ₯Ό λ‹¬μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 데 μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ 도움이 λ©λ‹ˆκΉŒ ?"라고 μƒκ°ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
11:07
If you can't answer these questions, consider cutting it, or try to make it shorter.
162
667259
7221
μ΄λŸ¬ν•œ μ§ˆλ¬Έμ— λ‹΅ν•  수 μ—†μœΌλ©΄ 자λ₯΄κ±°λ‚˜ 짧게 λ§Œλ“œμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
11:14
It's not easy to write in this way.
163
674480
2390
이런 μ‹μœΌλ‘œ μ“°κΈ°κ°€ 쉽지 μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
11:16
You won't be able to watch this video and go away and write like this.
164
676870
4529
당신은 이 μ˜μƒμ„ 보고 λ– λ‚˜μ„œ μ΄λ ‡κ²Œ μ“Έ 수 없을 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
11:21
Even in this script, there are probably several places where I could use my own advice!
165
681399
5281
이 μŠ€ν¬λ¦½νŠΈμ—μ„œλ„ λ‚΄ 쑰언을 μ‚¬μš©ν•  수 μžˆλŠ” 곳이 μ—¬λŸ¬ ꡰ데 μžˆμ„ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€!
11:26
However, you can try thinking about it the next time you write something in English.
166
686680
5060
ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ λ‹€μŒμ— μ˜μ–΄λ‘œ 무언가λ₯Ό μ“Έ λ•Œ 그것에 λŒ€ν•΄ 생각해 λ³Ό 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
11:31
Over time you can learn the habit of cutting empty words and sentences from your writing.
167
691740
5870
μ‹œκ°„μ΄ 지남에 따라 κΈ€μ—μ„œ 빈 단어와 λ¬Έμž₯을 μž˜λΌλ‚΄λŠ” μŠ΅κ΄€μ„ 배울 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ΄λ ‡κ²Œ ν•˜λŠ” 방법을 배울 수 μžˆλ‹€λ©΄
11:37
Your writing will be much better and much clearer if you can learn to do this.
168
697610
6200
글이 훨씬 더 μ’‹κ³  λͺ…ν™•ν•΄μ§ˆ κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
11:43
Next, let's look at some more advice to make your writing clearer and easier to read.
169
703810
6589
λ‹€μŒμœΌλ‘œ 글을 더 λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ³  읽기 μ‰½κ²Œ λ§Œλ“œλŠ” λͺ‡ 가지 쑰언을 더 μ‚΄νŽ΄λ³΄κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
11:50
Use short simple sentences where possible.
170
710399
4511
κ°€λŠ₯ν•˜λ©΄ 짧고 κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
11:54
Shorter sentences are easier to read and understand.
171
714910
3840
λ¬Έμž₯이 μ§§μ„μˆ˜λ‘ 읽고 μ΄ν•΄ν•˜κΈ° μ‰½μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
11:58
That's not my opinion, that's a fact.
172
718750
2089
제 생각이 μ•„λ‹ˆλΌ μ‚¬μ‹€μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:00
There's a lot of research behind it.
173
720839
2601
κ·Έ λ’€μ—λŠ” λ§Žμ€ 연ꡬ가 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:03
Longer sentences are harder to read and harder to understand, generally.
174
723440
5310
κΈ΄ λ¬Έμž₯은 일반적으둜 읽기도 μ–΄λ ΅κ³  μ΄ν•΄ν•˜κΈ°λ„ μ–΄λ ΅μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:08
If you're a non-native speaker of English, writing longer sentences is especially dangerous.
175
728750
5980
μ˜μ–΄κ°€ λͺ¨κ΅­μ–΄κ°€ μ•„λ‹Œ 경우 κΈ΄ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ“°λŠ” 것은 특히 μœ„ν—˜ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:14
There's a higher chance you'll make some grammatical or language errors which will make your sentence
176
734730
4750
λ¬Έμž₯을
12:19
difficult to read, or even worse, hard to understand.
177
739480
5320
읽기 μ–΄λ ΅κ²Œ ν•˜κ±°λ‚˜ 더 λ‚˜μ˜κ²ŒλŠ” μ΄ν•΄ν•˜κΈ° μ–΄λ ΅κ²Œ λ§Œλ“œλŠ” 문법 λ˜λŠ” μ–Έμ–΄ 였λ₯˜λ₯Ό λ²”ν•  κ°€λŠ₯성이 더 λ†’μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:24
How long is too long?
178
744800
1740
λ„ˆλ¬΄ κΈ΄ μ‹œκ°„μ€ μ–Όλ§ˆμž…λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
12:26
Well, 10 words is a good target length, 10 to 20 words is okay.
179
746540
6779
음, 10단어가 쒋은 λŒ€μƒ 길이이고 10 ~20단어가 μ’‹μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:33
Longer than 20 words--this is dangerous.
180
753319
2651
20단어보닀 κΈΈλ©΄ μœ„ν—˜ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:35
There's a high chance your sentence will become unclear and difficult to read.
181
755970
4630
λ¬Έμž₯이 λΆˆλΆ„λͺ…해지고 읽기 μ–΄λ €μ›Œμ§ˆ κ°€λŠ₯성이 λ†’μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:40
So how can you do this?
182
760600
1560
μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
12:42
Well first, remember what we talked about before.
183
762160
3919
λ¨Όμ €, μš°λ¦¬κ°€ 이전에 μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν–ˆλ˜ 것을 κΈ°μ–΅ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€ .
12:46
Using fewer words will make your sentences shorter and tighter.
184
766079
3690
더 적은 수의 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λ©΄ λ¬Έμž₯이 더 짧고 λ‹¨λ‹¨ν•΄μ§‘λ‹ˆλ‹€.
12:49
Here are some other rules you can use to keep your sentences shorter and clearer.
185
769769
6611
λ‹€μŒμ€ λ¬Έμž₯을 더 짧고 λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ²Œ μœ μ§€ν•˜κΈ° μœ„ν•΄ μ‚¬μš©ν•  수 μžˆλŠ” λͺ‡ 가지 λ‹€λ₯Έ κ·œμΉ™μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
12:56
First, don't use the passive voice unless you have a good reason.
186
776380
5050
첫째, νƒ€λ‹Ήν•œ μ΄μœ κ°€ μ—†λŠ” ν•œ μˆ˜λ™νƒœλ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš” .
13:01
Using the passive always makes a sentence longer and more complex.
187
781430
3830
μˆ˜λ™νƒœλ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λ©΄ 항상 λ¬Έμž₯이 더 κΈΈκ³  λ³΅μž‘ν•΄μ§‘λ‹ˆλ‹€.
13:05
Now, sometimes it's fine to use the passive, but not if you don't have a good reason.
188
785260
5980
이제 λ•Œλ•Œλ‘œ μˆ˜λ™νƒœλ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λŠ” 것이 μ’‹μ§€λ§Œ νƒ€λ‹Ήν•œ μ΄μœ κ°€ μ—†λŠ” κ²½μš°μ—λŠ” μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
13:11
If you want to use the passive, make sure you know why you're using it, and make sure
189
791240
4600
μˆ˜λ™νƒœλ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜κ³  μ‹Άλ‹€λ©΄ μ™œ μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λŠ”μ§€,
13:15
it's really necessary.
190
795840
1000
정말 ν•„μš”ν•œμ§€ 확인해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
13:16
Secondly, start your sentence with the subject whenever possible.
191
796840
5869
λ‘˜μ§Έ, κ°€λŠ₯ν•  λ•Œλ§ˆλ‹€ 주제둜 λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‹œμž‘ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€ .
13:22
Thirdly, don't use relative clauses, with who, which, that, where, etc., unless it's
192
802709
7581
μ…‹μ§Έ, 정말 ν•„μš”ν•œ κ²½μš°κ°€ μ•„λ‹ˆλ©΄ κ΄€κ³„μ ˆμ„ μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ λ§ˆμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€
13:30
really necessary.
193
810290
2410
.
13:32
When you use a conjunction, like "and" or "but," or "or," and so on, think, "Do these
194
812700
6690
"and" λ˜λŠ” " but" λ˜λŠ” "or" λ“±κ³Ό 같은 접속사λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•  λ•Œ "이
13:39
two ideas really need to go together?"
195
819390
3270
두 가지 아이디어가 정말 ν•¨κ»˜ 갈 ν•„μš”κ°€ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?"라고 μƒκ°ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
13:42
If they don't, consider breaking your sentence into two shorter pieces.
196
822660
6210
그렇지 μ•Šμ€ 경우 λ¬Έμž₯을 두 개의 짧은 쑰각으둜 λ‚˜λˆ„λŠ” 것을 κ³ λ €ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
13:48
To be clear, long sentences are not automatically bad.
197
828870
3899
λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ²Œ λ§ν•˜λ©΄ κΈ΄ λ¬Έμž₯이 μžλ™μœΌλ‘œ λ‚˜μœ 것은 μ•„λ‹™λ‹ˆλ‹€.
13:52
Good writers can produce long sentences which are clear, and focused, and elegant.
198
832769
6050
ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ μž‘κ°€λŠ” λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ³  집쀑적이며 μš°μ•„ν•œ κΈ΄ λ¬Έμž₯을 μž‘μ„±ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
13:58
If you're writing about a particularly complex topic, you might need to use longer, more
199
838819
5401
특히 λ³΅μž‘ν•œ μ£Όμ œμ— λŒ€ν•΄ 글을 μ“°κ³  μžˆλ‹€λ©΄
14:04
complex sentences to express more complex ideas.
200
844220
4510
더 λ³΅μž‘ν•œ 아이디어λ₯Ό ν‘œν˜„ν•˜κΈ° μœ„ν•΄ 더 κΈΈκ³  λ³΅μž‘ν•œ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‚¬μš©ν•΄μ•Ό ν•  μˆ˜λ„ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
14:08
The point is you should only use a longer, more complex sentence if it's really necessary.
201
848730
5640
μš”μ μ€ 정말 ν•„μš”ν•œ κ²½μš°μ—λ§Œ 더 κΈΈκ³  λ³΅μž‘ν•œ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‚¬μš©ν•΄μ•Ό ν•œλ‹€λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
14:14
If you can express the same point in a shorter, simpler sentence, you should.
202
854370
6570
같은 μš”μ μ„ 더 짧고 κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ λ¬Έμž₯으둜 ν‘œν˜„ν•  수 μžˆλ‹€λ©΄ κ·Έλ ‡κ²Œ ν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
14:20
Let's review what we've talked about today.
203
860940
2589
였늘 μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•œ λ‚΄μš©μ„ λ³΅μŠ΅ν•΄ λ΄…μ‹œλ‹€.
14:23
First, you need to understand who you're writing for and what they want from your writing.
204
863529
6870
λ¨Όμ €, 당신이 λˆ„κ΅¬λ₯Ό μœ„ν•΄ 글을 μ“°κ³  있고 그듀이 λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ κΈ€μ—μ„œ 무엇을 μ›ν•˜λŠ”μ§€ 이해해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
14:30
Secondly, before you start writing, you need to have a plan.
205
870399
3961
λ‘˜μ§Έ, 글을 μ“°κΈ° 전에 κ³„νšμ„ μ„Έμ›Œμ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
14:34
You need to know what you're going to include, what you're going to leave out, and how you're
206
874360
4149
무엇을 포함할지, 무엇을 μƒλž΅ν• μ§€,
14:38
going to organize your ideas.
207
878509
2091
아이디어λ₯Ό μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ 정리할지 μ•Œμ•„μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
14:40
Thirdly, your ideas should always be organized into clear paragraphs with one main idea per
208
880600
6270
μ…‹μ§Έ, μ•„μ΄λ””μ–΄λŠ” 항상 단락당 ν•˜λ‚˜μ˜ μ£Όμš” 아이디어가 μžˆλŠ” λͺ…ν™•ν•œ λ‹¨λ½μœΌλ‘œ κ΅¬μ„±λ˜μ–΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€
14:46
paragraph.
209
886870
1260
.
14:48
Fourth, cut unnecessary words and sentences.
210
888130
4269
λ„·μ§Έ, λΆˆν•„μš”ν•œ 단어와 λ¬Έμž₯을 잘라라.
14:52
And fifth, use shorter, simpler sentences where you can.
211
892399
5281
λ‹€μ„―μ§Έ, κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ 짧고 κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ„Έμš” .
14:57
Follow these points, and I guarantee your writing will get better.
212
897680
3160
λ‹€μŒ 사항을 μ€€μˆ˜ν•˜λ©΄ κ·€ν•˜μ˜ 글이 더 λ‚˜μ•„μ§ˆ 것이라고 μž₯λ‹΄ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:00
I'm not just saying that.
213
900840
2000
λ‚˜λŠ” 단지 κ·Έλ ‡κ²Œ λ§ν•˜λŠ” 것이 μ•„λ‹™λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:02
I use these points when I write something or edit something, and I see the difference.
214
902840
5030
무언가λ₯Ό μ“°κ±°λ‚˜ νŽΈμ§‘ν•  λ•Œ 이 포인트λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λŠ”λ° 차이점이 λ³΄μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:07
Even now, I'm still learning this.
215
907870
2110
μ§€κΈˆλ„ λ‚˜λŠ” 이것을 배우고 μžˆλ‹€.
15:09
You're never finished.
216
909980
1900
당신은 κ²°μ½” λλ‚˜μ§€ μ•Šμ•˜μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:11
Follow these points, and you will see a difference.
217
911880
2990
이 점을 λ”°λ₯΄λ©΄ 차이λ₯Ό λ³Ό 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:14
Okay.
218
914870
1230
μ’‹μ•„μš”.
15:16
That's the end of the lesson.
219
916100
1000
그게 μˆ˜μ—…μ˜ λμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:17
Thank you very much for watching.
220
917100
1580
μ‹œμ²­ν•΄μ£Όμ…”μ„œ λŒ€λ‹¨νžˆ κ°μ‚¬ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:18
If you want to see more of our free lessons, check out our website, oxfordonlineenglish.com.
221
918680
4630
더 λ§Žμ€ 무료 κ°•μ˜λ₯Ό 보고 μ‹ΆμœΌμ‹œλ©΄ 저희 μ›Ήμ‚¬μ΄νŠΈ oxfordonlineenglish.com을 ν™•μΈν•˜μ„Έμš”.
15:23
That's all.
222
923310
1000
그게 λ‹€μ•Ό.
15:24
Thanks again!
223
924310
1000
λ‹€μ‹œ ν•œλ²ˆ κ°μ‚¬ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€!
15:25
I'll see you next time.
224
925310
1529
λ‹€μŒμ— λ΅™κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
15:26
Bye-bye!
225
926839
571
μ•ˆλ…•!
이 μ›Ήμ‚¬μ΄νŠΈ 정보

이 μ‚¬μ΄νŠΈλŠ” μ˜μ–΄ ν•™μŠ΅μ— μœ μš©ν•œ YouTube λ™μ˜μƒμ„ μ†Œκ°œν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ „ 세계 졜고의 μ„ μƒλ‹˜λ“€μ΄ κ°€λ₯΄μΉ˜λŠ” μ˜μ–΄ μˆ˜μ—…μ„ 보게 될 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. 각 λ™μ˜μƒ νŽ˜μ΄μ§€μ— ν‘œμ‹œλ˜λŠ” μ˜μ–΄ μžλ§‰μ„ 더블 ν΄λ¦­ν•˜λ©΄ κ·Έκ³³μ—μ„œ λ™μ˜μƒμ΄ μž¬μƒλ©λ‹ˆλ‹€. λΉ„λ””μ˜€ μž¬μƒμ— 맞좰 μžλ§‰μ΄ μŠ€ν¬λ‘€λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ˜κ²¬μ΄λ‚˜ μš”μ²­μ΄ μžˆλŠ” 경우 이 문의 양식을 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ—¬ λ¬Έμ˜ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.

https://forms.gle/WvT1wiN1qDtmnspy7