Write Better Emails in English โ€” Top 5 Tips

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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Hey,
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it's Annemarie with Speak Confident English and this is exactly where you want
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์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š”,
Speak Confident English์˜ Annemarie์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๊ณณ์€ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์ด ์˜์–ด
00:04
to be every week to get the confidence you want for your life and work in
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๋กœ ์‚ถ๊ณผ ์ผ์„ ์œ„ํ•ด ์›ํ•˜๋Š” ์ž์‹ ๊ฐ์„ ์–ป๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๋งค์ฃผ ๊ฐ€๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ๊ณณ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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English. Now, of course,
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. ๋ฌผ๋ก ,
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most of what we do is all about confidence when speaking in English,
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ํ•˜๋Š” ๋Œ€๋ถ€๋ถ„์˜ ์ผ์€ ์˜์–ด๋กœ ๋งํ•  ๋•Œ ์ž์‹ ๊ฐ์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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but I also know that every day you're probably writing some emails in English,
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ €๋Š” ๋˜ํ•œ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์ด ๋งค์ผ ์˜์–ด๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๋„ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:20
especially if you use English at work.
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ํŠนํžˆ ์ง์žฅ์—์„œ ์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•œ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋”์šฑ ๊ทธ๋ ‡์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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And I also know that you want your writing to be easy to understand,
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๋˜ํ•œ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜๊ธฐ ์‰ฝ๊ณ 
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clear and correct.
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๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๋ฉฐ ์ •ํ™•ํ•˜๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์›ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ธ€๋„ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:29
You also want those emails to be easy to write.
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๋˜ํ•œ ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์‰ฝ๊ฒŒ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์›ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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So today we're a hundred percent focused on how to write better emails in
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์˜ค๋Š˜ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ๋กœ ๋” ๋‚˜์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•
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English and some common mistakes to avoid.
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๊ณผ ํ”ผํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์‹ค์ˆ˜์— 100% ์ง‘์ค‘ํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜์–ด
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Let's dive in right away with the first of five tips to write better emails in
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๋กœ ๋” ๋‚˜์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ 5๊ฐ€์ง€ ํŒ ์ค‘ ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ํŒ์„ ๋ฐ”๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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English.
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The first one is always include a greeting and make sure that it's correct,
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ๋Š”
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whether you're writing to a potential new client for the very first time or a
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์ž ์žฌ์ ์ธ ์ƒˆ ๊ณ ๊ฐ์—๊ฒŒ ์ฒ˜์Œ์œผ๋กœ ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๋“ 
01:11
colleague that you see every day.
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๋งค์ผ ๋งŒ๋‚˜๋Š” ๋™๋ฃŒ์—๊ฒŒ๋“  ํ•ญ์ƒ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ํฌํ•จํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ธ์‚ฌ๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด
01:14
It is always polite and friendly to start with a greeting.
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ํ•ญ์ƒ ์˜ˆ์˜ ๋ฐ”๋ฅด๊ณ  ์นœ์ ˆํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
01:19
Now I know that sometimes those email conversations get really long.
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์ด์ œ ์ €๋Š” ๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ ๊ทธ๋Ÿฌํ•œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ๋Œ€ํ™”๊ฐ€ ์ •๋ง ๊ธธ์–ด์ง„๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์••๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์Œ ํšŒ์˜ ๋‚ ์งœ์™€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด
01:24
You might send an email to your colleague to identify a date and a time for your
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๋™๋ฃŒ์—๊ฒŒ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๋‚ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
01:29
next meeting. So you would start that first email with Hey Susan,
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. ๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ Hey Susan
01:34
or hi Susan. And then over the next day,
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๋˜๋Š” Hi Susan์œผ๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‹ค์Œ ๋‚ 
01:38
maybe there are 20 emails back and forth as you try to decide on a date and a
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๋‚ ์งœ์™€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ์ •ํ•˜๋ ค๊ณ  ํ•  ๋•Œ 20ํ†ต์˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ์˜ค๊ฐ€๊ฒŒ ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
01:44
time. And when that happens,
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. ๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ์ผ์ด ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•˜๋ฉด
01:47
it's perfectly appropriate later in that series of emails to stop using a
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๋‚˜์ค‘์— ์ผ๋ จ์˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง ์‚ฌ์šฉ์„ ์ค‘๋‹จํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ ์ ˆํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
01:53
greeting. But the very first one should always have one.
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. ๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ๋งจ ์ฒ˜์Œ์—๋Š” ํ•ญ์ƒ ํ•˜๋‚˜๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:57
Now before I talk about how to have the correct greeting,
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์ด์ œ ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๊ธฐ ์ „์—
02:01
I've got an insider tip for you.
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๋‚ด๋ถ€์ž ํŒ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:04
I just talked about those long email conversations where you go back and forth.
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๋‚˜๋Š” ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์•ž๋’ค๋กœ ์ด๋™ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ธด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ๋Œ€ํ™”์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋ฐฉ๊ธˆ ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:10
In English, we call that an email chain or a chain of emails.
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์˜์–ด๋กœ๋Š” ์ด๋ฅผ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ฒด์ธ ๋˜๋Š” ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ฒด์ธ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:15
So again,
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๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ
02:16
in the first email you should always have a greeting because it's professional,
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—๋Š” ์ „๋ฌธ
02:20
polite, and friendly. But as you go through that email chain,
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์ ์ด๊ณ  ์ •์ค‘ํ•˜๋ฉฐ ์นœ๊ทผํ•œ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์ด ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ฒด์ธ์„ ํ†ต๊ณผํ•˜๋ฉด์„œ
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it's perfectly appropriate to stop using that greeting,
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especially with people you know well.
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ํŠนํžˆ ์ž˜ ์•„๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ๋Š” ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง ์‚ฌ์šฉ์„ ์ค‘๋‹จํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ ์ ˆํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:31
Now the second thing about greetings is to make sure that they are correct.
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์ด์ œ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์€ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์ด ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:35
And what that means is knowing who you're writing to.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ์˜๋ฏธํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ”๋Š” ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋ˆ„๊ตฌ์—๊ฒŒ ํŽธ์ง€๋ฅผ ์“ฐ๋Š”์ง€ ์•„๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์นœ์• ํ•˜๋Š” ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜,
02:40
You would be surprised by how many emails I get every week that begin with,
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๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๋Š” ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋งค์ฃผ ์–ผ๋งˆ๋‚˜ ๋งŽ์ด ๋ฐ›๋Š”์ง€ ์•Œ๋ฉด ๋†€๋ž„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
02:46
dear sir. I'm definitely not a sir,
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. ๋‚˜๋Š” ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ๊ฒฝ์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ฉฐ,
02:50
and what that tells me is the writer has no idea who I am.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋‚˜์—๊ฒŒ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ์ž‘๊ฐ€๊ฐ€ ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋ˆ„๊ตฐ์ง€ ์ „ํ˜€ ๋ชจ๋ฅธ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:56
I've got a question for you.
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:58
If you get an email and the greeting is completely wrong,
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ฐ›์•˜๋Š”๋ฐ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์ด ์™„์ „ํžˆ ์ž˜๋ชป๋œ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ
03:03
how likely are you to read that email or read it carefully?
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ํ•ด๋‹น ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ฝ๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ์ฃผ์˜ ๊นŠ๊ฒŒ ์ฝ์„ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅ์„ฑ์€ ์–ผ๋งˆ๋‚˜ ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
03:10
You're probably a little less likely to read it or less interested because that
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๊ทธ
03:15
person has no idea who you are.
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋ˆ„๊ตฌ์ธ์ง€ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ฝ์„ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅ์„ฑ์ด ์กฐ๊ธˆ ์ ๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๊ด€์‹ฌ์ด ๋œํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:18
The greeting you use in your email is the first impression your reader has and
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์€ ๋…์ž๊ฐ€ ๋ฐ›๋Š” ์ฒซ์ธ์ƒ์ด๋ฉฐ
03:24
you want that impression to be professional, polite, and friendly. Now,
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๊ทธ ์ธ์ƒ์ด ์ „๋ฌธ์ ์ด๊ณ  ์ •์ค‘ํ•˜๋ฉฐ ์นœ๊ทผํ•˜๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์›ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด์ œ
03:29
if you're not sure about which greetings to use or what words to use,
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์–ด๋–ค ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ด์•ผ ํ• ์ง€, ์–ด๋–ค ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ด์•ผ ํ• ์ง€ ์ž˜ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ๋‹ค๋ฉด
03:33
I've got a full lesson on that topic.
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ํ•ด๋‹น ์ฃผ์ œ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ „์ฒด ๊ฐ•์˜๋ฅผ ์ค€๋น„ํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:36
I'll share a link in the video and in the notes below the video as well.
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๋™์˜์ƒ๊ณผ ๋™์˜์ƒ ์•„๋ž˜์˜ ๋ฉ”๋ชจ์—๋„ ๋งํฌ๋ฅผ ๊ณต์œ ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:42
Tip number two is to have the correct level of formality.
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๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ํŒ์€ ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ ์ˆ˜์ค€์˜ ํ˜•์‹์„ ๊ฐ–์ถ”๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:46
Here's what I mean.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ์˜๋ฏธํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ”์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:47
If you have a colleague that you send an email to three times a week or every
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์ผ์ฃผ์ผ์— ์„ธ ๋ฒˆ ๋˜๋Š” ๋งค์ผ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๋‚ด๋Š” ๋™๋ฃŒ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด
03:52
day,
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03:53
you don't want to begin that email with dear Ms. Fowler.
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์นœ์• ํ•˜๋Š” Ms. Fowler๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์ง€ ์•Š์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:59
It's way too formal for someone that you email regularly and when our emails are
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์ •๊ธฐ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๋‚ด๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์—๊ฒŒ๋Š” ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ํ˜•์‹์ ์ด๋ฉฐ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด
04:05
too formal, they show a lot of distance.
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๋„ˆ๋ฌด ํ˜•์‹์ ์ด๋ฉด ๋งŽ์€ ๊ฑฐ๋ฆฌ๋ฅผ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:08
They're cold and unfriendly.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ์ฐจ๊ฐ‘๊ณ  ๋น„์šฐํ˜ธ์ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:11
So we want to be careful about being too formal.
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๊ฒฉ์‹์„ ์ฐจ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์กฐ์‹ฌํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:16
But you also don't want to be too informal too fast.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋˜ํ•œ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ ์ด๊ณ  ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋น ๋ฅด๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์›ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด
04:22
For example, if you're writing an email to a brand new client,
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, ์ƒˆ๋กœ์šด ๊ณ ๊ฐ์—๊ฒŒ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ
04:26
you probably wouldn't start that email with, Hey, what's up Susan?
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ "์ด๋ด, ์ˆ˜์ž” ์ž˜ ์ง€๋‚ด?"๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์ง€๋Š” ์•Š์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:30
That kind of language is only appropriate for someone you know well someone that
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ์–ธ์–ด๋Š” ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์•„์ฃผ ๊ฐ€๊น๊ฒŒ ๋Š๋ผ๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์„ ์ž˜ ์•„๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์—๊ฒŒ๋งŒ ์ ํ•ฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
04:35
you feel very close to.
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04:37
So it's all about finding that right balance of formality.
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ํ˜•์‹์˜ ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ ๊ท ํ˜•์„ ์ฐพ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ „๋ถ€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:42
Now I know you might be feeling worried right now about how to avoid being too
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๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๊ฒฉ์‹์„ ์ฐจ๋ฆฌ์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ์ฐจ๊ฐ‘๊ฒŒ ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•
04:46
formal and cold and how to avoid being too informal too soon.
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๊ณผ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋น„๊ณต์‹์ ์ด์ง€ ์•Š๋„๋ก ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ง€๊ธˆ ๋‹น์žฅ ๊ฑฑ์ •ํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ณ„์‹ค ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:52
And don't worry, I've got you covered.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๊ฑฑ์ •ํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”. ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋„์™€๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:54
I actually have several lessons that focus on language you should use in emails
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์‹ค์ œ๋กœ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ด์•ผ ํ•˜๋Š” ์–ธ์–ด
04:59
and language that allows you to be polite and friendly in English.
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์™€ ์˜์–ด๋กœ ๊ณต์†ํ•˜๊ณ  ์นœ๊ทผํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋Œ€ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์–ธ์–ด์— ์ดˆ์ ์„ ๋งž์ถ˜ ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ ˆ์Šจ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:03
I'm going to share links to those so that you can watch those as soon as you're
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์ด ๋งํฌ๋ฅผ ๊ณต์œ ํ•˜์—ฌ
05:07
finished with this one and get the right language for your emails.
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์ด ์ž‘์—…์„ ๋งˆ์น˜๋Š” ์ฆ‰์‹œ ๋ณด๊ณ  ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ์ ํ•ฉํ•œ ์–ธ์–ด๋ฅผ ์–ป์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋„๋ก ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:12
Tip number three is especially important if you're writing emails for work and
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์„ธ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ํŒ์€ ์—…๋ฌด์šฉ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ณ 
05:17
you want to look like a professional, make sure that your grammar,
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์ „๋ฌธ๊ฐ€์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ๋ณด์ด๊ณ  ์‹ถ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋ฌธ๋ฒ•,
05:22
punctuation, and spelling are correct.
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๊ตฌ๋‘์  ๋ฐ ์ฒ ์ž๊ฐ€ ์ •ํ™•ํ•œ์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ํŠนํžˆ ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:25
This is a challenge for everyone, including native speakers.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์›์–ด๋ฏผ์„ ํฌํ•จํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ชจ๋‘์—๊ฒŒ ๋„์ „์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
05:29
We definitely start typing too fast on the keyboard.
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ํ‚ค๋ณด๋“œ์—์„œ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ์ž…๋ ฅํ•˜๊ธฐ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:33
We don't pay attention, we don't read our emails,
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์ฃผ์˜๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ์šธ์ด์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ฝ์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:36
and sometimes that means there might be a lot of mistakes and those mistakes
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๋•Œ๋กœ๋Š” ๋งŽ์€ ์‹ค์ˆ˜๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ์‹ค์ˆ˜๋Š”
05:41
look unprofessional. The more you can reduce those errors,
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ํ”„๋กœํŽ˜์…”๋„ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ฒŒ ๋ณด์ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ์˜ค๋ฅ˜๋ฅผ ์ค„์ผ์ˆ˜๋ก
05:46
the better your emails are.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ๋” ์ข‹์•„์ง‘๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:49
And I know that this is an area that's really challenging. Number number one,
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์ €๋Š” ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์ •๋ง ๋„์ „์ ์ธ ๋ถ„์•ผ๋ผ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์••๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ฒซ์งธ,
05:53
English spelling is a nightmare. And number two,
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์˜์–ด ์ฒ ์ž๋Š” ์•…๋ชฝ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‘˜์งธ,
05:56
I know our grammar is difficult,
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ•์ด ์–ด๋ ต๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฑด ์•Œ์ง€๋งŒ ๋ฌด๋ฃŒ๋กœ ์ œ๊ณต๋˜๋Š”
05:58
but I have a super easy solution for you and it's free.
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๋งค์šฐ ์‰ฌ์šด ์†”๋ฃจ์…˜์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‚ด ์ปดํ“จํ„ฐ
06:02
There's an app that I love to use on my computer called Grammarly. In fact,
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์—์„œ ์ฆ๊ฒจ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” Grammarly๋ผ๋Š” ์•ฑ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์‚ฌ์‹ค
06:07
my whole team uses it.
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ ํŒ€ ์ „์ฒด๊ฐ€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:09
Grammarly is the perfect place for you to copy and paste your email to check
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Grammarly๋Š” ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณต์‚ฌํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ถ™์—ฌ๋„ฃ์–ด
06:15
your grammar, spelling, and punctuation.
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๋ฌธ๋ฒ•, ์ฒ ์ž ๋ฐ ๊ตฌ๋‘์ ์„ ํ™•์ธํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์™„๋ฒฝํ•œ ์žฅ์†Œ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:17
So if you're feeling nervous about your grammar or spelling in an email,
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ•์ด๋‚˜ ์ฒ ์ž๊ฐ€ ๋ถˆ์•ˆํ•˜๋‹ค๋ฉด
06:22
I'll leave a link to the Grammarly application just below this video.
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์ด ๋น„๋””์˜ค ๋ฐ”๋กœ ์•„๋ž˜์— Grammarly ์• ํ”Œ๋ฆฌ์ผ€์ด์…˜ ๋งํฌ๋ฅผ ๋‚จ๊ฒจ๋‘๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:27
It's totally free to use and it will absolutely help you feel more confident
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์™„์ „ํžˆ ๋ฌด๋ฃŒ๋กœ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๋‚ผ ๋•Œ ๋” ์ž์‹ ๊ฐ์„ ๊ฐ–๋„๋ก ์ ˆ๋Œ€์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋„์›€์ด ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
06:31
when you're sending your emails. Now, before I move on to tip four,
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. ์ด์ œ ํŒ 4๋กœ ๋„˜์–ด๊ฐ€๊ธฐ ์ „์—
06:35
let me give you an example of what an unprofessional email with lots of spelling
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๋งž์ถค๋ฒ• ๋ฐ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ• ์˜ค๋ฅ˜๊ฐ€ ๋งŽ์€ ๋น„์ „๋ฌธ์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ์–ด๋–ค ๊ฒƒ์ธ์ง€ ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
06:41
and grammar errors might look like.
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06:43
Take a look at this email and see if you can identify some of the problems.
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์ด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋ณด๊ณ  ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์‹๋ณ„ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
06:48
You should immediately notice that words like I'm or English aren't capitalized
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I'm ๋˜๋Š” English์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋Š” ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜์ง€ ์•Š์œผ๋ฉฐ
06:54
and in a professional email they absolutely should be.
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์ „๋ฌธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ๋Š” ๋ฐ˜๋“œ์‹œ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž๋กœ ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:58
You'll also notice that there's no space between the first two sentences and
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๋˜ํ•œ ์ฒ˜์Œ ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ ์‚ฌ์ด์— ๊ณต๋ฐฑ์ด ์—†์–ด
07:04
that makes it very difficult to read. Again,
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์ฝ๊ธฐ๊ฐ€ ๋งค์šฐ ์–ด๋ ต๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์•Œ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ,
07:07
you want a space after the period and the first word of a sentence should
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๋งˆ์นจํ‘œ ๋’ค์— ๊ณต๋ฐฑ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•˜๋ฉฐ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์˜ ์ฒซ ๋‹จ์–ด๋Š”
07:12
definitely be capitalized.
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ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ๋Œ€๋ฌธ์ž์—ฌ์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜์–ด๋กœ
07:14
Tip number four for writing better emails in English is to always have a very
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๋” ์ž˜ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•œ ๋„ค ๋ฒˆ์งธ ํŒ์€ ํ•ญ์ƒ ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ์ œ๋ชฉ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:19
clear subject line.
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07:21
I want you to think about your email inbox for a moment and all the different
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ๋ฐ›์€ ํŽธ์ง€ํ•จ๊ณผ
07:26
emails you have. Which ones are you more likely to read?
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๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๋‹ค์–‘ํ•œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ž ์‹œ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด ๋ณด์‹œ๊ธฐ ๋ฐ”๋ž๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์–ด๋–ค ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋” ๋งŽ์ด ์ฝ์„ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
07:31
You're probably more likely to read the ones with a clear subject because you
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07:35
know exactly what the email is about.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ธ์ง€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ์ œ๋ชฉ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ฝ์„ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅ์„ฑ์ด ๋” ๋†’์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:38
The other reason clear subject lines are important is emails contain important
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๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ์ œ๋ชฉ์ด ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๋˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ด์œ ๋Š” ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์ •๋ณด๊ฐ€ ํฌํ•จ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:45
details.
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07:46
Have you ever read an email and then three days later you were trying to
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ฝ์€ ํ›„ 3์ผ ํ›„์—
07:52
remember where you read that information and you're searching through five or
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ํ•ด๋‹น ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ฝ์€ ์œ„์น˜๋ฅผ ๊ธฐ์–ตํ•˜๊ณ  ํ•ด๋‹น ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด 5,
07:57
six or 27 different emails to find that information?
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6 ๋˜๋Š” 27๊ฐœ์˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๊ฒ€์ƒ‰ํ•œ ์ ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
08:03
Well,
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08:03
it's much easier when the subject line is clear and it's connected to the
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์ œ๋ชฉ์ด ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ณ 
08:09
information in the email,
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ์ •๋ณด์™€ ์—ฐ๊ฒฐ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉด ํ›จ์”ฌ ๋” ์‰ฝ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์—
08:12
so always make sure your subject lines are very clear.
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ํ•ญ์ƒ ์ œ๋ชฉ์ด ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:16
Earlier we talked about those long email chains that happen when the
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์•ž์„œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ๋Œ€ํ™”๊ฐ€ ์˜ค๊ฐˆ ๋•Œ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•˜๋Š” ๊ธด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ฒด์ธ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
08:20
conversation goes back and forth.
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.
08:23
Sometimes during a long email chain,
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๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ ๊ธด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ฒด์ธ ์ค‘์—
08:26
the subject of the conversation changes and that's a great time for you to edit
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๋Œ€ํ™”์˜ ์ œ๋ชฉ์ด ๋ณ€๊ฒฝ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:33
or change the subject of the email and that will automatically make it easier
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์˜ ์ œ๋ชฉ์„ ํŽธ์ง‘ํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋ณ€๊ฒฝํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์ข‹์€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์ด๋ฉฐ
08:38
for people to find the email information they need when they're looking for it
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ์ฐพ๊ณ  ์žˆ์„ ๋•Œ ํ•„์š”ํ•œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ž๋™์œผ๋กœ ๋” ์‰ฝ๊ฒŒ ์ฐพ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:42
later. Now, if you're not sure what I mean,
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๋‚˜์ค‘์—. ์ด์ œ ์ œ ๋ง์ด ๋ฌด์Šจ ๋œป์ธ์ง€ ์ž˜ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ์œผ๋ฉด
08:45
let me give you a clear example with these two subject lines.
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์ด ๋‘ ์ œ๋ชฉ์œผ๋กœ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:48
Number one is question about English.
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:51
Number two is question about dates. For fluency school.
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๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ๋Š” ๋‚ ์งœ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์œ ์ฐฝํ•œ ํ•™๊ต๋ฅผ ์œ„ํ•ด.
08:57
Which one of those is more specific?
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๊ทธ ์ค‘ ์–ด๋Š ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋” ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
09:01
Definitely the second one.
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ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:03
I know exactly what this person wants or what information they're looking for,
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๋‚˜๋Š” ์ด ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์ด ์›ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ๋˜๋Š” ์ฐพ๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ์ •๋ณด๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ์•Œ๊ณ 
09:08
and the first email,
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์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ
09:09
I have no idea what their question might be.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ์ „ํ˜€ ๋ชจ๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:13
It could be about English people, English culture,
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์˜๊ตญ์ธ, ์˜๊ตญ ๋ฌธํ™”,
09:16
English language about grammar, spelling. I have no idea.
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๋ฌธ๋ฒ•์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ์˜์–ด, ์ฒ ์ž์— ๊ด€ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‚˜๋Š” ๋ชจ๋ฅธ๋‹ค.
09:21
It's very unclear.
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๋งค์šฐ ๋ถˆ๋ถ„๋ช…ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:23
The more specific your subject line is, the better it is for your reader.
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์ œ๋ชฉ์ด ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ผ์ˆ˜๋ก ๋…์ž์—๊ฒŒ ๋” ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:29
Tip number five for writing better emails in English is to keep your emails
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๋” ๋‚˜์€ ์˜์–ด ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ž‘์„ฑ์„ ์œ„ํ•œ ๋‹ค์„ฏ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ํŒ์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„
09:34
short and only focus on the most important details.
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์งง๊ฒŒ ์œ ์ง€ํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์—๋งŒ ์ง‘์ค‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:38
This is one of the biggest challenges my students have and it's one of the
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์ œ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ๊ฒช๋Š” ๊ฐ€์žฅ ํฐ ๋„์ „ ์ค‘ ํ•˜๋‚˜ ์ด๋ฉฐ
09:42
questions I hear the most.
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์ œ๊ฐ€ ๊ฐ€์žฅ ๋งŽ์ด ๋“ฃ๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ ์ค‘ ํ•˜๋‚˜์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:44
My students always want to know how they can be more concise in an email.
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์ œ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋” ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ•ญ์ƒ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์‹ถ์–ดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:50
To be concise means to give a lot of information in a very clear way without
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๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•˜๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋งŽ์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉ ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ ๋งŽ์€ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
09:57
using too many words.
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09:59
That means we have to be very careful about what we say in the email,
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์ฆ‰, ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๋‚ด์šฉ,
10:04
how many details we provide and what words we use.
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์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๋Š” ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์ •๋ณด์˜ ์–‘, ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋งค์šฐ ์ฃผ์˜ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:08
The opposite is when the email is too long with big paragraphs that are
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๊ทธ ๋ฐ˜๋Œ€๋Š” ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์ด ์ฝ๊ธฐ ์–ด๋ ค์šด ํฐ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์œผ๋กœ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๊ธด ๊ฒฝ์šฐ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
10:13
difficult to read. Let me give you an example. In this sample email,
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. ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด ์ƒ˜ํ”Œ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ๋Š”
10:18
I'm showing you the beginning of someone summarizing a meeting that took place.
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๋ฐœ์ƒํ•œ ํšŒ์˜๋ฅผ ์š”์•ฝํ•˜๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์˜ ์‹œ์ž‘ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:24
As you can immediately see,
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์ฆ‰์‹œ ์•Œ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋“ฏ์ด
10:26
there's one big long paragraph and it's hard to know what the important details
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ํฌ๊ณ  ๊ธด ๋‹จ๋ฝ์ด ํ•˜๋‚˜ ์žˆ๊ณ 
10:31
or information might be in that paragraph.
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ํ•ด๋‹น ๋‹จ๋ฝ์— ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์ •๋ณด๋‚˜ ์ •๋ณด๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ์•Œ๊ธฐ ์–ด๋ ต์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:35
I have to be very careful reading it and do it slowly.
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๋‚˜๋Š” ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋งค์šฐ ์กฐ์‹ฌ์Šค๋Ÿฝ๊ฒŒ ์ฝ๊ณ  ์ฒœ์ฒœํžˆํ•ด์•ผํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:38
You'll also see that it's very wordy.
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋˜ํ•œ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋งค์šฐ ์žฅํ™ฉํ•˜๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์•Œ๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:41
What that means is there are too many words and we actually repeat some words
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์˜๋ฏธํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ”๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๊ฐ€ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋งŽ๊ณ  ์‹ค์ œ๋กœ ์ผ๋ถ€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋ฐ˜๋ณตํ•ด์„œ ๋ฐ˜๋ณตํ•œ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
10:47
again and again. For example, you can see the words meeting discussed,
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. ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด
10:52
adjust multiple times in the email.
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์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ ํšŒ์˜๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ ๋ฒˆ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:54
It would be much simpler and better if we only used those words once.
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๊ทธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ํ•œ ๋ฒˆ๋งŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด ํ›จ์”ฌ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•˜๊ณ  ์ข‹์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:01
So let me show you how we can simplify that.
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋‹จ์ˆœํ™”ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:03
There's one easy thing that we can do.
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์‰ฌ์šด ์ผ์ด ํ•˜๋‚˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:06
Use bullet points and instead of writing long sentences and full paragraphs,
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๊ธ€๋จธ๋ฆฌ ๊ธฐํ˜ธ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ธด ๋ฌธ์žฅ๊ณผ ์ „์ฒด ๋‹จ๋ฝ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋Œ€์‹ 
11:13
identify the most important details and use a bulleted list or a numbered list
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๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์„ธ๋ถ€ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์‹๋ณ„ํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ธ€๋จธ๋ฆฌ ๊ธฐํ˜ธ ๋ชฉ๋ก ๋˜๋Š” ๋ฒˆํ˜ธ ๋ชฉ๋ก์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ
11:20
to show that information and the bulleted list makes it much easier for the
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ํ•ด๋‹น ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ํ‘œ์‹œํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ธ€๋จธ๋ฆฌ ๊ธฐํ˜ธ ๋ชฉ๋ก์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด
11:25
reader to focus on the important information.
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๋…์ž๊ฐ€ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ •๋ณด์— ํ›จ์”ฌ ์‰ฝ๊ฒŒ ์ง‘์ค‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:28
And those are your five tips for writing better emails in English and avoiding
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์˜์–ด๋กœ ๋” ๋‚˜์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ณ 
11:32
some common mistakes. Just to recap, those five tips are:
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์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์‹ค์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ํ”ผํ•˜๋Š” ๋‹ค์„ฏ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์š”๋ น์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์š”์•ฝํ•˜์ž๋ฉด, ์ด ๋‹ค์„ฏ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ํŒ์€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:37
always have a greeting and make sure it's correct.
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ํ•ญ์ƒ ์ธ์‚ฌ๋ง์„ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์„ธ์š”. ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์—์„œ
11:40
Have the right balance of formality in your email. Make sure your grammar,
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๊ฒฉ์‹์˜ ์ ์ ˆํ•œ ๊ท ํ˜•์„ ์œ ์ง€ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค . ๋ฌธ๋ฒ•,
11:45
punctuation, and spelling are correct.
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๊ตฌ๋‘์  ๋ฐ ์ฒ ์ž๊ฐ€ ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
11:48
Always use a subject line that is clear and specific.
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ํ•ญ์ƒ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์ธ ์ œ๋ชฉ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
11:51
And number five, keep your email concise.
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๋‹ค์„ฏ์งธ, ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ๊ฐ„๊ฒฐํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์œ ์ง€ํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
11:56
Now before we finish, I have a challenge question for you.
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์ด์ œ ๋๋‚ด๊ธฐ ์ „์— ๋„์ „์ ์ธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „๋ฌธ์ ์ธ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ ์ž‘์„ฑ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋ฐ›์€
11:59
I want to know what is the best piece of advice you've ever received for writing
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์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์กฐ์–ธ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
12:04
professional emails.
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.
12:06
You might have some advice that is exactly what someone else needs today.
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์˜ค๋Š˜๋‚  ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ์—๊ฒŒ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•„์š”ํ•œ ์กฐ์–ธ์ด ์žˆ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:11
It's very possible that someone in the Confident English community is stressing
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Confident English ์ปค๋ฎค๋‹ˆํ‹ฐ์˜ ๋ˆ„๊ตฐ๊ฐ€๊ฐ€
12:16
out about what to write in an email today and you might have the perfect piece
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์˜ค๋Š˜ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์จ์•ผ ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ŠคํŠธ๋ ˆ์Šค๋ฅผ ๋ฐ›๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ณ  ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์™„๋ฒฝํ•œ
12:21
of advice. So I would love to hear what that is.
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์กฐ์–ธ์ด ์žˆ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๋‚˜๋Š” ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€ ๋“ฃ๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋งˆ์น˜๊ธฐ ์ „์— ์ด ๋น„๋””์˜ค
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You can share your advice with me just below this video or in the comments of
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๋ฐ”๋กœ ์•„๋ž˜๋‚˜ ์˜จ๋ผ์ธ ๋ ˆ์Šจ์˜ ๋Œ“๊ธ€์—์„œ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์˜ ์กฐ์–ธ์„ ์ €์™€ ๊ณต์œ ํ•˜์‹ค ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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the online lesson before I finish. If you found this lesson useful to you,
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. ์ด ๊ฐ•์˜๊ฐ€ ์œ ์šฉํ•˜๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์…จ๋‹ค๋ฉด
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I would love to know and you can tell me in three simple ways. Number one,
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์•Œ๊ณ  ์‹ถ๊ณ  ์„ธ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•œ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์œผ๋กœ ๋ง์”€ํ•ด ์ฃผ์‹ค ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ฒซ์งธ,
12:37
give this lesson a thumbs up on YouTube and subscribe to the Speak Confident
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YouTube์—์„œ ์ด ๊ฐ•์˜๋ฅผ ์—„์ง€์ฒ™ํ•˜๊ณ  Speak Confident
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English channel so you never miss. One of my lessons. Number two,
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English ์ฑ„๋„์„ ๊ตฌ๋…ํ•˜์—ฌ ์ ˆ๋Œ€ ๋†“์น˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”. ๋‚ด ์ˆ˜์—… ์ค‘ ํ•˜๋‚˜์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‘˜์งธ,
12:45
you can share this with friends and colleagues on Facebook or LinkedIn.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์„ Facebook ๋˜๋Š” LinkedIn์—์„œ ์นœ๊ตฌ ๋ฐ ๋™๋ฃŒ์™€ ๊ณต์œ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:49
And number three,
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์„ธ ๋ฒˆ์งธ,
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if you have a friend or a colleague who wants to write better emails in English,
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์˜์–ด๋กœ ๋” ๋‚˜์€ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ์นœ๊ตฌ๋‚˜ ๋™๋ฃŒ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด
12:55
email them this lesson directly with that, have a fantastic week.
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๋ฐ”๋กœ ์ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ์ด๋ฉ”์ผ๋กœ ๋ณด๋‚ด์„ธ์š” . ์ฆ๊ฑฐ์šด ํ•œ ์ฃผ ๋ณด๋‚ด์„ธ์š”.
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Thank you so much for joining me and I'll see you next time for your Confident
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์ €์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ํ•ด์ฃผ์…”์„œ ๊ฐ์‚ฌํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์Œ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์— Confident
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English lesson.
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English ๋ ˆ์Šจ์œผ๋กœ ๋ต™๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
์ด ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ ์ •๋ณด

์ด ์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ํ•™์Šต์— ์œ ์šฉํ•œ YouTube ๋™์˜์ƒ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „ ์„ธ๊ณ„ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜๋“ค์ด ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ ๋™์˜์ƒ ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ” ํด๋ฆญํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ณณ์—์„œ ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์žฌ์ƒ์— ๋งž์ถฐ ์ž๋ง‰์ด ์Šคํฌ๋กค๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด๋‚˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ๋ฌธ์˜ ์–‘์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฌธ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.

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