How to write a perfect IELTS essay conclusion

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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Hi, everyone. I'm Jade. What we're talking about today is writing a conclusion
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์•ˆ๋…•ํ•˜์„ธ์š” ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„. ์ €๋Š” ์ œ์ด๋“œ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋Š˜ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€
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for an IELTS exam or a CAE exam, so I'm going to give you two ways to write conclusions so
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IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์ด๋‚˜ CAE ์‹œํ—˜์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด๋ฏ€๋กœ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์•Œ๋ ค๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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that when you get to the end, you don't just sort of put a full stop that doesn't really
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say anything extra, that doesn't feel like a conclusion. Because when you write a conclusion,
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์ถ”๊ฐ€๋กœ ์•„๋ฌด ๋ง๋„ ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ๋А๊ปด์ง€์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๋งˆ์นจํ‘œ . ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์“ธ ๋•Œ
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a good conclusion has a different tone, there's something that feels finished about it. And
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์ข‹์€ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์€ ์–ด์กฐ๊ฐ€ ๋‹ค๋ฅด๊ณ , ๋ญ”๊ฐ€ ์™„์„ฑ๋œ ๋А๋‚Œ์ด ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ 
00:30
more generally, your conclusion should be your last chance to impress, to show that
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๋” ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ, ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์€
00:35
examiner all that English that you know and how fluent you are when you're writing in
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ์˜์–ด์™€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์˜์–ด๋กœ ๊ธ€์„ ์“ธ ๋•Œ ์–ผ๋งˆ๋‚˜ ์œ ์ฐฝํ•œ์ง€๋ฅผ ์‹ฌ์‚ฌ๊ด€์—๊ฒŒ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ๊ฐ๋ช…์„ ์ค„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ๊ธฐํšŒ์—ฌ์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:40
English, and you should leave the reader with an additional thought in the end, ideally,
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, ์ด์ƒ์ ์œผ๋กœ๋Š”
00:45
when you're writing a conclusion. So let's look at a typical IELTS kind of question.
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๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ๋•Œ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ IELTS ์œ ํ˜•์˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:52
"Some people think that parents should teach their children to be good members of society.
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"์–ด๋–ค ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์€ ๋ถ€๋ชจ๊ฐ€ ์ž๋…€๊ฐ€ ์ข‹์€ ์‚ฌํšŒ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์ณ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
00:58
However, others believe school is the best place to learn this."
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์€ ํ•™๊ต๊ฐ€ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ฐฐ์šฐ๊ธฐ์— ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ข‹์€ ์žฅ์†Œ๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
01:03
And then the IELTS question would say: "Share your experience, and give reasons for your answers."
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ IELTS ์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ "๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๊ฒฝํ—˜์„ ๊ณต์œ ํ•˜๊ณ  ๋‹ต๋ณ€์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค."๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:09
So let's imagine that you've already written your essay.
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ด๋ฏธ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ผ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ์ƒํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
01:13
So, how do you begin your conclusion? The... The
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๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? ๊ทธ...
01:16
first way I'm going to tell you, I'm going to call it the "As I have discussed" conclusion,
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์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ "๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•œ ๋Œ€๋กœ" ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋ถ€๋ฅด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:21
and there are three parts to writing this conclusion. And I'm giving you the structure
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์ด ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ๋Š” ์„ธ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‚˜๋Š” ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์ด ๋‹จ์ง€ ๊ฑฐ๊ธฐ์— ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์กฐ๊ฐ๋“ค์„ ์ง‘์–ด๋„ฃ์Œ์œผ๋กœ์จ
01:27
so that you can see how you can put a conclusion together just by putting different pieces
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์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ๋‚ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋„๋ก ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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in there. And now, this is... This is great for an IELTS essay. It's not a super imaginative
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. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์ง€๊ธˆ, ์ด๊ฒƒ์€... ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์— ์•„์ฃผ ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋Œ€ํ•™์—์„œ
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kind of conclusion that would be great at university, but for IELTS, it's...
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ํ›Œ๋ฅญํ•œ ์ƒ์ƒ๋ ฅ์ด ํ’๋ถ€ํ•œ ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์€ ์•„๋‹ˆ์ง€๋งŒ IELTS์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ์—๋Š”...
01:44
It's good for IELTS.
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IELTS์— ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:46
So, here are the three parts for this conclusion:
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์„ธ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:49
"As I have discussed"; then:
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"๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•œ ๋Œ€๋กœ"; ๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ: "
01:52
"However" sentence with "I" or, you know, using your subjectivity, basically;
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๋‚˜"๊ฐ€ ํฌํ•จ๋œ "๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜" ๋ฌธ์žฅ ๋˜๋Š” ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ฃผ๊ด€์„ฑ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:57
and then making a moral or social observation in the first conditional.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์กฐ๊ฑด์—์„œ ๋„๋•์  ๋˜๋Š” ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๊ด€์ฐฐ์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:04
So let's have a look. So, "As I have discussed", what
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๊ทธ๋Ÿผ ํ•œ๋ฒˆ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ "๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•œ ๋Œ€๋กœ",
02:08
we're doing is we're just taking that phrase, basically, and this shows the tone... This
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ๊ทธ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์ทจํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์–ด์กฐ๋ฅผ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค... ์ด๊ฒƒ์€
02:15
establishes the tone of conclusion: "As I have discussed". You're basically saying:
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๊ฒฐ๋ก ์˜ ์–ด์กฐ๋ฅผ ์„ค์ •ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค: "๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•œ ๋Œ€๋กœ". ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ
02:20
"Well, I already told you all of this, but now I'm summarizing."
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"๊ธ€์Ž„, ๋‚˜๋Š” ์ด๋ฏธ ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋งํ–ˆ์ง€๋งŒ ์ด์ œ ์š”์•ฝํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:24
"As I have discussed, there are advantages and disadvantages to the question."
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"๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—๋Š” ์žฅ์ ๊ณผ ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
02:31
I've shown both sides of the argument. You could just learn that, you could learn that whole phrase
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๋‚˜๋Š” ๋…ผ์Ÿ์˜ ์–‘๋ฉด์„ ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ์—ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ์ „์ฒด ๊ตฌ์ ˆ์„ ๋ฐฐ์šธ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
02:37
to begin a conclusion. What do you follow it with?
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. ๋ญ˜๋กœ ๋”ฐ๋ผํ•ด?
02:41
You follow it with a "However" sentence.
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ "๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜"๋ฌธ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋”ฐ๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:46
So, there may be advantages and disadvantages, but there's a catch.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์žฅ์ ๊ณผ ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:52
"However, I think parents should be responsible for teaching children to be good members of society."
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์•„์ด๋“ค์ด ์ข‹์€ ์‚ฌํšŒ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋ถ€๋ชจ๊ฐ€ ์ฑ…์ž„์ ธ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•œ๋‹คโ€๊ณ  ๋งํ–ˆ๋‹ค.
03:00
So this is you saying: "Yeah, I see both sides.
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค: "๊ทธ๋ž˜, ๋‚˜๋Š” ์–‘๋ฉด์„ ๋ณธ๋‹ค.
03:04
This is good about it, that's good about the other side.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ข‹๊ณ , ์ €๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ชฝ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด์„œ๋„ ์ข‹๋‹ค.
03:08
But, you know, for me and in my opinion",
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ, ์•Œ๋‹ค์‹œํ”ผ, ๋‚˜์™€ ๋‚ด ์˜๊ฒฌ์œผ๋กœ๋Š”",
03:12
because now we're using your subjectivity
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์™œ๋ƒํ•˜๋ฉด ์ด์ œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์ด๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ๋งํ•จ์œผ๋กœ์จ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์ฃผ๊ด€์„ฑ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:15
by saying: "I think", you can... You can finally make your position clear,
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: "์ œ ์ƒ๊ฐ์—๋Š”", ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค... ๋“œ๋””์–ด ์ž…์žฅ์„ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํžˆ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:23
make your position known. Maybe in the rest of the essay, this is discursive... This is a discursive essay.
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์ž…์žฅ์„ ์•Œ๋ฆด ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์•„๋งˆ๋„ ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋‚˜๋จธ์ง€ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์—์„œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹ด๋ก ์ ์ธ ์—์„ธ์ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค... ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹ด๋ก ์ ์ธ ์—์„ธ์ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:29
You've been showing both sides of the argument. But if you write your essay in a way where
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋…ผ์Ÿ์˜ ์–‘๋ฉด์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ ์™”์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ์ด์ „ ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋‚˜๋จธ์ง€ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์—์„œ
03:35
you don't use: "I think", "I believe" in the rest of the essay before, it can be quite
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค", "๋‚˜๋Š” ๋ฏฟ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰์—
03:42
powerful just to use "I think" once at the end in your conclusion.
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋ฅผ ํ•œ ๋ฒˆ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๋งŒ์œผ๋กœ๋„ ๋งค์šฐ ๊ฐ•๋ ฅํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๊ฒฐ๋ก .
03:48
So, again: "However, I think parents should be responsible for teaching children to be
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๋‹ค์‹œ "ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์•„์ด๋“ค์ด
03:53
good members of society."
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์‚ฌํšŒ์˜ ์ข‹์€ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋ถ€๋ชจ๊ฐ€ ์ฑ…์ž„์ ธ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•œ๋‹ค."
03:56
That bit's done. What do we do next?
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๊ทธ ๋น„ํŠธ๊ฐ€ ์™„๋ฃŒ๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์Œ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ํ• ๊นŒ์š”?
03:59
Well, sometimes people like to end essays by giving a grand statement about morals and the world,
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์Œ, ๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์€ ๋„๋•๊ณผ ์„ธ๊ณ„์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์›…์žฅํ•œ ์ง„์ˆ ์„ ์ œ๊ณตํ•จ์œผ๋กœ์จ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ๋๋‚ด๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜๋ฏ€๋กœ
04:08
so you can also do this in your IELTS exam. And this is what I'm talking about when I say:
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IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์—์„œ๋„ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋งํ•  ๋•Œ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:14
"Make a moral or social observation" to do with the question, of course, not just the general one.
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"๋„๋•์  ๋˜๋Š” ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๊ด€์ฐฐ์„ ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค." ๋ฌผ๋ก  ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ๋ฟ๋งŒ ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ ์งˆ๋ฌธ๊ณผ ๊ด€๋ จ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:20
So here's an example:
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— ์˜ˆ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:21
"If children are taught to be good members of society,
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"์•„์ด๋“ค์ด ์‚ฌํšŒ์˜ ์ข‹์€ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๋ฐฐ์šด๋‹ค๋ฉด
04:26
the world will be a better place."
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์„ธ์ƒ์€ ๋” ๋‚˜์€ ๊ณณ์ด ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
04:29
So, it's in the first conditional, because we've got "if", then
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ์— ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. "if"๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์—
04:37
we've got the past simple, followed by a clause with "will".
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๋‹จ์ˆœ ๊ณผ๊ฑฐํ˜•์ด ์žˆ๊ณ  "will"์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ์ ˆ์ด ๋”ฐ๋ผ์˜ต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—์„ธ์ด์™€ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์—์„œ
04:44
You can use that conditional structure in your essay, in your conclusion.
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์กฐ๊ฑด๋ถ€ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
04:47
I think that's good because you're showing
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04:49
the examiner you know how to write conditionals. So, because these essays are marked on your
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์‹œํ—˜๊ด€์—๊ฒŒ ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Œ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์ข‹์€ ์ผ์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ, ์ด ์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์Šคํƒ€์ผ์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์—
04:56
style, but also your grammar when you're writing English, displaying a range of structures,
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, ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์“ธ ๋•Œ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ•์—๋„ ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜์–ด ์žˆ๊ณ , ๋‹ค์–‘ํ•œ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๋ฅผ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์—, ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ์—์„œ
05:01
it's good to write this moral... Moral or social observation in the conditional. So,
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๋„๋•... ๋„๋•์  ๋˜๋Š” ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๊ด€์ฐฐ์„ ์“ฐ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์ข‹์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:07
that was the first way you can write a conclusion. When we come back, I'm going to show you the
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์ด์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋Œ์•„์˜ค๋ฉด IELTS ๋˜๋Š” CAE ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„
05:13
second way you can write a conclusion for IELTS or CAE.
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์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
05:18
Let's have a look at the second way to write a conclusion for your IELTS or a similar discursive
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IELTS ๋˜๋Š” ์ด์™€ ์œ ์‚ฌํ•œ ๋‹ด๋ก ์ 
05:24
essay. So, in this conclusion, we have a different structure to follow.
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์—์„ธ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์—์„œ๋Š” ๋”ฐ๋ผ์•ผ ํ•  ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๊ตฌ์กฐ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:31
First of all, you can make a subjective opinion statement. What do I mean by "subjective"?
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์šฐ์„  ์ฃผ๊ด€์ ์ธ ์˜๊ฒฌ ์ง„์ˆ ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . "์ฃผ๊ด€์ "์ด๋ž€ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
05:36
That basically means using "I". As I mentioned, you should not really use:
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ "I"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ
05:42
"I think", "I think", "I think"
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ์ƒ๊ฐํ•œ๋‹ค", "๋‚˜๋Š” ์ƒ๊ฐํ•œ๋‹ค", "๋‚˜๋Š” ์ƒ๊ฐํ•œ๋‹ค"๋ฅผ
05:44
all the way through your essay, but it's okay to use it just in the conclusion for impact.
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์—์„ธ์ด ์ „์ฒด์— ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•ด์„œ๋Š” ์•ˆ ๋˜์ง€๋งŒ, ์ž„ํŒฉํŠธ๋ฅผ ์œ„ํ•ด ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์—๋งŒ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:50
Then you include the sentence or statement with:
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ
05:56
"The most important reason is", blah, blah, blah.
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"๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ด์œ  ๋Š”", blah, blah, blah์™€ ํ•จ๊ป˜ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด๋‚˜ ์ง„์ˆ ์„ ํฌํ•จํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:00
And then, again, you make a moral or social observation. And this time, if you
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ ๋‹ค์‹œ ๋„๋•์  ๋˜๋Š” ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๊ด€์ฐฐ์„ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์ด๋ฒˆ์—๋Š”
06:04
want, you can use a second conditional, and I'll show you. So, let's have a look.
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์›ํ•œ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ณด์—ฌ๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ž, ํ•œ๋ฒˆ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
06:09
A subjective opinion statement:
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์ฃผ๊ด€์  ์˜๊ฒฌ ์ง„์ˆ :
06:12
"I think parents should teach their children to be good members of society."
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ๋ถ€๋ชจ๊ฐ€ ์ž๋…€์—๊ฒŒ ์ข‹์€ ์‚ฌํšŒ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์ณ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
06:17
So we're just taking...
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ๊ทธ๋ƒฅ...
06:21
We're taking...
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์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š”... ์•Œ
06:24
You know, there are two sides to this question. There's:
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๋‹ค์‹œํ”ผ, ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—๋Š” ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ธก๋ฉด์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:26
"Parents should teach their children to be good members of society",
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"๋ถ€๋ชจ๋Š” ์ž๋…€๊ฐ€ ์‚ฌํšŒ์˜ ์ข‹์€ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์ณ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค"๊ฐ€
06:31
and there's: "School should teach children to be good members of society",
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์žˆ๊ณ  "ํ•™๊ต๋Š” ์ž๋…€๊ฐ€ ์‚ฌํšŒ์˜ ์ข‹์€ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์ณ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค"๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฏ€๋กœ
06:35
so now you just show us what you think.
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์ด์ œ ๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ์ƒ๊ฐ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
06:39
"I think parents should teach their children to be good members of society."
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"๋ถ€๋ชจ๋Š” ์ž๋…€๊ฐ€ ์ข‹์€ ์‚ฌํšŒ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋„๋ก ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์ณ์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
06:44
That bit's done.
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๊ทธ ๋น„ํŠธ๊ฐ€ ์™„๋ฃŒ๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:46
Now we need to do the statement with the most important reason. So you've already
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์ด์ œ ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์ง„์ˆ ์„ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์ด๋ฏธ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด
06:51
given your reasons for this in the main body of your essay. Now you just elaborate and
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๋ณธ๋ฌธ์—์„œ ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์ œ์‹œํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ์ด์ œ
06:58
tell us a little bit more about which reason you think is the most persuasive reason or
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์–ด๋–ค ์ด์œ ๊ฐ€ ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์„ค๋“๋ ฅ ์žˆ๋Š” ์ด์œ  ๋˜๋Š”
07:02
the most important reason. For example:
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๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ด์œ ๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ์ž์„ธํžˆ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๊ณ  ์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋” ๋ง์”€ํ•ด ์ฃผ์„ธ์š”. ์˜ˆ:
07:05
"The most important reason is because parents can share their life experience
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"๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ด์œ ๋Š” ๋ถ€๋ชจ๊ฐ€ ์ž๋…€์™€ ์ธ์ƒ ๊ฒฝํ—˜์„ ๊ณต์œ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:13
with their children."
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."
07:14
There, I'm implying that maybe school teachers can't do this.
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๊ฑฐ๊ธฐ์—์„œ ๋‚˜๋Š” ํ•™๊ต ๊ต์‚ฌ๊ฐ€ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์—†์„ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Œ์„ ์•”์‹œํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:19
This bit's done.
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์ด ๋ถ€๋ถ„์ด ์™„๋ฃŒ๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:21
And then, again, a moral or social observation.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‹ค์‹œ, ๋„๋•์  ๋˜๋Š” ์‚ฌํšŒ์  ๊ด€์ฐฐ.
07:25
We're using the second conditional this time, and we use the second conditional to talk about imagined situations,
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์ด๋ฒˆ์—๋Š” ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ์€ ๊ฐ€์ƒ์˜ ์ƒํ™ฉ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฏ€๋กœ
07:31
so that means hypothetical situations. And it's different because we are using "would",
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๊ฐ€์ƒ์˜ ์ƒํ™ฉ์„ ์˜๋ฏธํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ "would"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ณ , ๋™์‚ฌ์˜
07:42
and we're using the bare infinitive of the verb, and in the first clause
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๋‹จ์ˆœ ๋ถ€์ •์‚ฌ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ณ  , ์ฒซ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์ ˆ์—์„œ
07:50
we're using past simple.
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๊ณผ๊ฑฐ ๋‹จ์ˆœ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ๋‹ค๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:53
So let's... Let's read that last one:
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ... ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ฝ์–ด๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
07:56
"If schools were to teach this"
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"๋งŒ์•ฝ ํ•™๊ต๊ฐ€ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์นœ๋‹ค๋ฉด" -
08:00
-teach children how to be good members of society-
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์•„์ด๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ์ข‹์€ ์‚ฌํšŒ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ์›์ด ๋˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์นœ๋‹ค๋ฉด -
08:04
"the role of the family would be destroyed."
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"๊ฐ€์กฑ์˜ ์—ญํ• ์€ ํŒŒ๊ดด๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
08:07
So that's quite moral, quite a strong opinion to leave your essay with, and it does establish that:
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋งค์šฐ ๋„๋•์ ์ด๊ณ  ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ๋‚จ๊ธฐ๊ธฐ์— ๋งค์šฐ ๊ฐ•๋ ฅํ•œ ์˜๊ฒฌ ์ด๋ฉฐ
08:15
"I'm finished now. My very important essay is complete."
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"์ด์ œ ๋๋‚ฌ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‚ด ๋งค์šฐ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์™„์„ฑ๋˜์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
08:20
So, there are two ways of writing your conclusions for IELTS, CAE, or a similar discursive essay.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ IELTS, CAE ๋˜๋Š” ์œ ์‚ฌํ•œ ๋…ผ์ˆ  ์—์„ธ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์„ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š”
08:30
There are many more imaginative ways to write essays; this is not a fixed rule.
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๋” ๋งŽ์€ ์ƒ์ƒ๋ ฅ์ด ํ’๋ถ€ํ•œ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ณ ์ •๋œ ๊ทœ์น™์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:36
What can you take from this? You can take some phrases,
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์ด๊ฒƒ์—์„œ ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์–ป์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ฌธ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ณ  ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์˜ ๊ตฌ์กฐ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด
08:38
you can start to think about the structure
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์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๊ธฐ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฐ”๋ผ๊ฑด๋Œ€
08:40
of your conclusion that you're writing, and hopefully when you get there in your exam,
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์‹œํ—˜์— ๋„๋‹ฌํ•˜๋ฉด
08:47
you won't get stuck in your conclusion, and you won't just rewrite the answer.
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๊ฒฐ๋ก ์— ๊ฐ‡ํžˆ์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ๊ทธ๋ƒฅ ๋‹ค์‹œ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋Œ€๋‹ต. ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ์กฐ๊ฑด๋ฌธ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด
08:51
You'll have something a little bit different to say, also something that displays a little bit
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์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ง์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ๊ณ  ์•ฝ๊ฐ„
08:55
of clever grammar, like a second conditional in your essay.
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์˜๋ฆฌํ•œ ๋ฌธ๋ฒ•์„ โ€‹โ€‹๋ณด์—ฌ์ค„ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
09:00
So, yup, if you did like this lesson, please subscribe here on my engVid channel.
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๋„ค, ์ด ๊ฐ•์˜๊ฐ€ ๋งˆ์Œ์— ๋“œ์…จ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์—ฌ๊ธฐ ์ œ engVid ์ฑ„๋„์—์„œ ๊ตฌ๋…ํ•ด ์ฃผ์„ธ์š”.
09:06
Also you can do a quiz on this, so you can take this lesson a little bit further,
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๋˜ํ•œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ํ€ด์ฆˆ๋ฅผ ํ’€ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฏ€๋กœ ์ด ๋ ˆ์Šจ์„ ์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋” ์ง„ํ–‰ํ•˜๊ณ 
09:10
do a little bit of extra work on it.
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์•ฝ๊ฐ„์˜ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ ์ž‘์—…์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:12
Plus you can subscribe on my personal channel, because I've got two channels.
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๋˜ํ•œ ์ฑ„๋„์ด ๋‘ ๊ฐœ์ด๋ฏ€๋กœ ๊ฐœ์ธ ์ฑ„๋„์„ ๊ตฌ๋…ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:16
So, yep, I really do wish you luck on those exams, but I'm going now.
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๊ทธ๋ž˜, ๋„ค, ๊ทธ ์‹œํ—˜์—์„œ ํ–‰์šด์„ ๋นŒ์–ด์š”. ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ €๋Š” ์ง€๊ธˆ ๊ฐ€๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:25
[Banging noise]
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[๋‘๋“œ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์†Œ๋ฆฌ]
09:26
[Laughter]
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[์›ƒ์Œ]
09:27
Neigh.
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๋„ต.
์ด ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ ์ •๋ณด

์ด ์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ํ•™์Šต์— ์œ ์šฉํ•œ YouTube ๋™์˜์ƒ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „ ์„ธ๊ณ„ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜๋“ค์ด ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ ๋™์˜์ƒ ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ” ํด๋ฆญํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ณณ์—์„œ ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์žฌ์ƒ์— ๋งž์ถฐ ์ž๋ง‰์ด ์Šคํฌ๋กค๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด๋‚˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ๋ฌธ์˜ ์–‘์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฌธ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.

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