IELTS Success: Writing Effective Paragraphs

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English Jade


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Hi, everyone. I'm Jade. What we're talking about today is writing paragraphs. And I'm
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going to give you a structure you can use in the IELTS writing paper, in the discursive essay
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section. And you can also use what I'm teaching you today in the CAE exam, but also more generally
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in discursive essays because people who don't have much experience writing essays or plus
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writing essays in English can often lose control of the essay because they're not really writing
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with a structure in mind. And when that happens, you just start talking about something else
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that's not even related to the question. So you don't actually get very good marks when
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you write an essay that's not about the question. Did you know that? Well, anyway, it happens sometimes.
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So this structure is very fixed, and it's repetitive. So you would follow the structure
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in your first paragraph. And then, you'd do three or four similar ones. It's fixed for
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a reason, to keep your essay under control, to keep you answering the question.
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So let's have a look at a typical IELTS kind of question. "These days, many students decide
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to attend university in a foreign country. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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attending university in a foreign country."
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So first, what we need to do is we need to make a little plan. And I know the advantages
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and disadvantages based on my personal experience because I was lucky enough to study in a foreign
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country when I was a student. Yeah. I spent a year in Amsterdam. So what were the pros?
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Make friends from other countries. "Make friends -- other countries." I'm not going to -- actually,
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I'm just going to write a shortened version because it doesn't fit here. Make friends
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from other countries. Learn a language. What else? Challenge yourself. What else? Travel.
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Also, sometimes, expense might be a factor. Now, university is really, really expensive
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in the UK, so it may be an advantage to go study in a different country where it's a
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bit cheaper. So potentially, it could be cost.
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What are the disadvantages, then? You might get homesick. You might miss your parents,
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or you might miss your dog or something. You get homesick. You know, it might actually
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be more expensive for you. If you go to -- if you move to a country where university is
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really expensive. So it could be expensive. Maybe learning a language is a disadvantage
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for some people because your grades might not be as good.
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So we could put in the language barrier.
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So this is the really quick plan for when you're writing a discursive essay like this.
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It really helps, especially if it's about advantages and disadvantages. You've got them
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all down here. So when you're writing the essay, you can just take any one of those.
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It's not important to have, like, highly original ideas. You don't have to think of something
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really amazing. It's just an IELTS essay or similar.
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So here's the basic plan, and here is the simple structure to follow. We're going to
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use a set phrase. Then, we're going to elaborate on that. That means say it a little bit more.
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Then, we're going to do a sentence with "however" where we show a complicating factor or something
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is that, maybe, shows that what we're talking about we're not so clear about. And then,
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as an optional sentence, you can share your experience. And this can be altogether one
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paragraph. You finish that. Then, you do the same thing, but you pick a different point,
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either an advantage or a disadvantage.
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So let's have a look at the set phrases. You can just learn these set phrases to use in
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your essays. "One of the reasons" -- well, obviously, it won't be about studying abroad.
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You just change it to fit your question. "One of the reasons to study abroad..."
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"The main advantage of studying abroad..." "A good reason to study in a foreign country is..." So we
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just take one of the pros because these are all positive statements. "One of the reasons
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to study abroad is so you can make friends with people from other countries." "The main
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advantage of studying abroad is to challenge yourself." "A good reason to study in a foreign
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country is to learn a foreign language."
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Okay? Then, you've got the first part of your introduction written.
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Then, you go on to elaborate, so a little bit more about it. This bit is more general.
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So let's imagine we're writing this point about making friends. "When one studies in
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a foreign country, it is possible to make friends from different countries, which can
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be interesting." Okay. Let's talk about this a little bit because again, it's not the world's
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most highly original sentence, but for the IELTS, it's good. You're making a -- you're
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still talking generally, and you're elaborating on your point. When you write like this, you
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keep your sentence quite short and controlled, and that means you don't lose control of them.
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Why am I saying "one" here? In just normal speech, I would say "when you study in a foreign
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country". But essays are more formal, so that's why I've written "one" there for the general
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"you". "When one studies in a foreign country, it is possible to make friends from different
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countries." Okay. We still haven't said that much. But now, we can do a relative clause
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using "which". You can always use "which" after a comma. And, you know, I'm not saying
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anything amazing here. "Which can be interesting." I'm just using a relative clause in a grammatically
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correct way. I mean, you could be more original. "When one studies in a foreign country, it
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is possible to make friends from different countries, which can be highly fulfilling
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on a personal and deep, inspiring level." But you don't need to write that.
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Moving on. Now, you can show the opposite side of the coin, the complicating factor.
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You can say "however". So what are the disadvantages here? So you can take one of the -- see what
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you write the plan for? You can just take one of these. "However, it may be difficult
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to make friends due to the language barrier." When you're writing this kind of essay, you
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can just say things. You don't have to believe that it's true. It's okay to write something
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that's not necessarily your opinion. Some people find that really hard to do. It's like,
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"I don't really think that." Just -- it's okay in this kind of essay.
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And then, the optional part, you maybe want to make your paragraph slightly longer. Or
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maybe you've already written two or three short paragraphs, so this one, you can vary
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the length and make it a little bit different by sharing your experience. And that's a good
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thing to do in an IELTS exam anyway. So you can use one of these set phrases. "In my opinion",
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"in my experience", "in my view". For me, it would be quite easy to say "in my experience",
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okay? Related to what we've already talked about. "In my experience, it is not difficult
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to make friends when attending university in a foreign country because everybody is
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very open to meeting new people." And there, that brings it to a close. Put that all together,
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and you've got a paragraph.
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Now, what do you need to do? You need to do the same thing three more times, and then
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you should have enough. And then, you get to the conclusion.
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So if you follow this pattern, you'll be okay when you do your IELTS exam
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or CAE or similar discursive essay.
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So what I'd like you to do now is go do the quiz on the website. Do the quiz. Take this
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lesson a little bit further. Plus, I would like you to subscribe here on my EngVid channel.
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I would also like you to subscribe on my personal channel as well where there's more stuff for
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you to improve your English and your communication. And
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-- yes. That's everything; isn't it?
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What am I going to do now? I don't know what we're going to do now.
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I am going to do some tug of war. Okay.
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