IELTS Writing: The 3 Essay Types

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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Hi. Welcome to engVid.
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์•ˆ๋…•. engVid์— ์˜ค์‹  ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ™˜์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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I'm Adam.
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์ €๋Š” ์•„๋‹ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Today's lesson is an IELTS lesson, so as usual, I'll be speaking a little bit faster than
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์˜ค๋Š˜ ์ˆ˜์—…์€ IELTS ์ˆ˜์—…์ด๋ฏ€๋กœ ํ‰์†Œ ๋ณด๋‹ค ์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋” ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ๋งํ•˜๊ณ 
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normal, give you a little bit of listening practice.
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๋“ฃ๊ธฐ ์—ฐ์Šต์„ ์กฐ๊ธˆ ํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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And today we're going to look at specifically the essay types, the types of essays you're
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์˜ค๋Š˜ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์—์„ธ์ด ์œ ํ˜•์„ ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์œผ๋กœ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณผ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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going to have to come across for those of you taking the IELTS test in the writing section
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์ž‘๋ฌธ ์„น์…˜
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task two, the independent essay.
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์ž‘์—… 2์ธ ๋…๋ฆฝ ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์„ ์น˜๋ฅด๋Š” ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์„ ์œ„ํ•ด ์ ‘ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋  ์—์„ธ์ด ์œ ํ˜•์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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I'm going to talk about the types of essays, and a very general idea, a very general discussion
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์ €๋Š” ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ์œ ํ˜•๊ณผ ๋งค์šฐ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด, ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋‹ค์‹œ ์—์„ธ์ด์—
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about how to approach, generally again, the essay.
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์ ‘๊ทผํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋งค์šฐ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ํ† ๋ก ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
00:32
I want to make...
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๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋งŒ๋“ค๊ณ  ์‹ถ์€ ๊ฒƒ์€...
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Talk about templates, but I'll do that a little bit later.
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ํ…œํ”Œ๋ฆฟ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๋‚˜์ค‘์— ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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So first of all, the main thing to remember, you have essentially three types of essays
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๋จผ์ € ๊ธฐ์–ตํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ์ฃผ์š” ์‚ฌํ•ญ์€ IELTS ์ž‘๋ฌธ ์‹œํ—˜์—์„œ ์ ‘ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋  ๋ณธ์งˆ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์„ธ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์œ ํ˜•์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
00:41
that you're going to come across on the IELTS writing test.
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. ์˜๊ฒฌ์„
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You're going to have an essay that asks for an opinion, you're going to have an essay
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๋ฌป๋Š” ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๊ณ  ,
00:48
that does not ask for an opinion, and then you're going to have a hybrid, you're going
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์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๊ณ , ํ•˜์ด๋ธŒ๋ฆฌ๋“œ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ๊ณ , ๋‹ค์Œ์˜
00:52
to have a combination of the two.
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์กฐํ•ฉ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‘˜.
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Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
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So first let's go over the types of questions you might see that ask for an opinion.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ๋จผ์ € ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ ์œ ํ˜•์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์‚ดํŽด ๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Now, it's very important to recognize that not all of you...
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์ž, ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„ ๋ชจ๋‘๊ฐ€...
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Sorry, not all of the questions are going to be specifically mentioning the word: "opinion",
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์ฃ„์†กํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ชจ๋“  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—์„œ "์˜๊ฒฌ",
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or "think", or "believe", but you still have to recognize.
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"์ƒ๊ฐ" ๋˜๋Š” "๋ฏฟ๋‹ค"์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์œผ๋กœ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•˜์ง€๋Š” ์•Š์ง€๋งŒ ์—ฌ์ „ํžˆ ์ธ์ •ํ•˜๋‹ค.
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So: "Do you agree or disagree with whatever has been mentioned before?" or whatever is
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ: "์ด์ „์— ์–ธ๊ธ‰๋œ ๋‚ด์šฉ์— ๋™์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ, ๋™์˜ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์œผ์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?" ๋˜๋Š”
01:16
written there.
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๊ฑฐ๊ธฐ์— ์“ฐ์—ฌ์ง„ ๊ฒƒ.
01:17
"Do you agree or disagree?"
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"๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋™์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ, ๋™์˜ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
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Take a side.
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ํŽธ์„ ๋“œ์„ธ์š”.
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"I agree with this because", reasons.
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ์ด๊ฒƒ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ๋™์˜ํ•œ๋‹ค ", ์ด์œ .
01:21
"I disagree because", reasons.
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ๋™์˜ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š”๋‹ค", ์ด์œ .
01:23
And similarly: "To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์œ ์‚ฌํ•˜๊ฒŒ : "๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์–ด๋Š ์ •๋„ ๋™์˜ํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋™์˜ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
01:27
A quick word about "to what extent", I personally recommend completely, totally, fully agree
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"์–ด๋Š ์ •๋„"์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์งง์€ ๋‹จ์–ด, ๋‚˜๋Š” ๊ฐœ์ธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋™์˜ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์— ์™„์ „ํžˆ, ์™„์ „ํžˆ, ์™„์ „ํžˆ ๋™์˜ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ถ”์ฒœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:34
with whatever you agree with because it's a much easier essay to write.
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์™œ๋ƒํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ํ›จ์”ฌ ์“ฐ๊ธฐ ์‰ฌ์šด ์—์„ธ์ด์ด๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:38
If you say: "I somewhat agree", then you have to look at both sides and tell me what you
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"์•ฝ๊ฐ„ ๋™์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋ฉด ์–‘์ธก์„ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ณ  ๋™์˜ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ๊ณผ ๋™์˜
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agree with, what you disagree with.
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ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋งํ•ด์•ผํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:44
If you say: "I completely agree with this idea", then you only have to focus on that
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"๋‚˜๋Š” ์ด ์ƒ๊ฐ์— ์™„์ „ํžˆ ๋™์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค "๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ ์ƒ๊ฐ์—๋งŒ ์ง‘์ค‘ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
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idea.
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.
01:50
It's much easier.
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ํ›จ์”ฌ ์‰ฝ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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"Do you think" something, so this is a very direct question about your opinion.
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"Do you think"๋Š” ๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋งค์šฐ ์ง์ ‘์ ์ธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:55
"What do you think about this?" or "What do you think are the causes of", "What do you
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"์ด๊ฒƒ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์„ธ์š”?" ๋˜๋Š” " ์›์ธ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?", "
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think are the main issues or problems?"
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์ฃผ์š” ๋ฌธ์ œ ๋˜๋Š” ๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
02:03
Now: "Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks", or: "Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?"
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์ด์ œ: "์žฅ์ ๋ณด๋‹ค ๋‹จ์ ์ด ๋” ๋งŽ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?" ๋˜๋Š” "์žฅ์ ๋ณด๋‹ค ๋‹จ์ ์ด ๋” ๋งŽ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
02:09
As soon as you see, here, the word: "Do", it's a yes/no question, you have to say yes
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ "Do"๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๋ณด์ž๋งˆ์ž ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
02:15
or no, and we're going to talk about yes/no questions.
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. ์ด์ œ ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:18
But this word: "outweigh"...
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ด ๋‹จ์–ด: "์ค‘์š”ํ•˜๋‹ค"...
02:20
"Are there more drawbacks or are there more benefits?"
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"๋” ๋งŽ์€ ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ, ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ฉด ๋” ๋งŽ์€ ์ด์ ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
02:25
This is an opinion question.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์˜๊ฒฌ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:26
You decide if there are more drawbacks or opinions.
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๋” ๋งŽ์€ ๋‹จ์ ์ด๋‚˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ๊ฒฐ์ •ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:29
"Which is better: This situation or this situation?"
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"์–ด๋Š ์ชฝ์ด ๋” ๋‚ซ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ: ์ด ์ƒํ™ฉ์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ฉด ์ด ์ƒํ™ฉ์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
02:33
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
02:34
"Is it more important to do this or to do that?"
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" ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋” ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ์ €๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋” ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
02:38
So, again, these are all yes/no...
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ, ๋‹ค์‹œ, ์ด๊ฒƒ๋“ค์€ ๋ชจ๋‘ ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค...
02:40
This is a choice question because you have the "better", you have the comparative.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด "๋” ๋‚˜์€" ๊ฒƒ์„ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์„ ํƒ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:44
And, again, you have this, plus the yes/no.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‹ค์‹œ, ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์ด๊ฒƒ๊ณผ ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:47
So as soon as it's a yes/no question, it's an opinion question.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ๋˜๋Š” ์ฆ‰์‹œ ์˜๊ฒฌ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:50
Make sure that you answer very specifically yes or no, this side or this side, and say
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์ด ์ชฝ์ธ์ง€ ์ด์ชฝ์ธ์ง€ ๋งค์šฐ ๊ตฌ์ฒด์ ์œผ๋กœ ์˜ˆ ๋˜๋Š” ์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค๋กœ ๋‹ตํ•˜๊ณ 
02:56
why you think so.
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๋Š” ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ๋งํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
02:57
Support your opinion.
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๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ง€์ง€ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
02:59
And yes/no, if a question begins with: "Should some...
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์ด ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•œ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:00
Should somebody do something?", "Should this be done?", "Do...
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03:06
Do people need to do this?" for example.
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด.
03:09
Excuse me.
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์‹ค๋ก€ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:11
Any yes/no question is asking for an opinion.
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๋ชจ๋“  ์˜ˆ/์•„๋‹ˆ์˜ค ์งˆ๋ฌธ์€ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:14
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
03:15
Make sure that you give an opinion, make sure that you support that opinion.
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์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ทธ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ง€์ง€ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
03:19
Okay, now, let's go on to the non-opinion questions.
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์ž, ์ด์ œ ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด ์•„๋‹Œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์œผ๋กœ ๋„˜์–ด๊ฐ€๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:24
"Discuss", so they're going to give you two attitudes, or two views, or two approaches
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"ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๋‹ค", ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ํƒœ๋„, ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๊ด€์ , ๋˜๋Š” ๋ฌด์–ธ๊ฐ€์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹์„ ์ œ๊ณตํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
03:28
to something.
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03:29
They say: "Discuss both views.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์€ "๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๊ฒฌํ•ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
03:32
Discuss both attitudes."
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๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ํƒœ๋„์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค."๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:34
This is not asking for your opinion.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:36
So, one thing, it's a general rule of thumb, don't always apply it because some of you
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ํ•œ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋Š” ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ๊ฒฝํ—˜ ๋ฒ•์น™์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„ ์ค‘ ์ผ๋ถ€๋Š”
03:41
don't like to use the word "I", but if the question has a "you", the answer can, and
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"I"๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ข‹์•„ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ํ•ญ์ƒ ์ ์šฉํ•˜์ง€๋Š” ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— "you"๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉด ๋Œ€๋‹ตํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:50
in most cases should, have an "I".
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๋Œ€๋ถ€๋ถ„์˜ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ "I"๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:53
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”? ๊ฐœ์ธ ๋Œ€๋ช…์‚ฌ๋ฅผ
03:54
You don't have to use the personal pronoun.
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์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
03:56
It's not wrong to.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ์ž˜๋ชป๋œ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:57
A lot of people are afraid, they think academic essays shouldn't use "I".
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๋งŽ์€ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ํ•™์ˆ  ์—์„ธ์ด์— "I"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋ฉด ์•ˆ ๋œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜๋ฉฐ ๋‘๋ ค์›Œํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:01
Totally okay, recommended for a lot of people.
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋งŽ์€ ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ์ถ”์ฒœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:05
If you can't make your views clear without using the "I", then use the "I".
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"I"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ์ž์‹ ์˜ ๊ฒฌํ•ด๋ฅผ ๋ช…ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์—†๋‹ค๋ฉด "I"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
04:10
Here, don't use the "I".
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์—ฌ๊ธฐ์—์„œ "I"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
04:12
They're not asking for your opinion, don't give them your opinion.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋งํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
04:16
This is a descriptive essay: "Discuss both sides", so this is one side, this is the other
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์„ค๋ช…์ ์ธ ์—์„ธ์ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค: "์–‘์ชฝ ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๊ธฐ ", ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ํ•œ์ชฝ์ด๊ณ , ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ
04:21
side, end of story.
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์ชฝ์ด๊ณ , ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐ์˜ ๋์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:23
I'm going to show you how to begin your essay in the introduction for these.
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์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์†Œ๊ฐœ์—์„œ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ ๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:27
"Compare and contrast these two things", that's it.
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"์ด ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋ฅผ ๋น„๊ตํ•˜๊ณ  ๋Œ€์กฐํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค ", ๊ทธ๊ฒŒ ๋‹ค์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ณธ๋ฌธ
04:32
Body paragraph one, this one; body paragraph two, this one.
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๋‹จ๋ฝ 1, ์ด๊ฒƒ; ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2, ์ด๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:35
"What are the advantages and disadvantages?"
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"์žฅ์  ๊ณผ ๋‹จ์ ์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?" ๋ณธ๋ฌธ
04:38
Body paragraph one, advantages; body paragraph two, disadvantages.
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๋‹จ๋ฝ 1, ์ด์ ; ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2, ๋‹จ์ .
04:41
That's it.
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๊ทธ๊ฒŒ ๋‹ค์•ผ.
04:42
Problem/solution: "What are the causes" or "What are the problems", so you have cause
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๋ฌธ์ œ/ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…: "์›์ธ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ" ๋˜๋Š” "๋ฌธ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ", ์›์ธ
04:47
and solution, you have problem and solution.
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๊ณผ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฌธ์ œ์™€ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:48
"What might be some possible causes for this situation?", "What do you think are the problems
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"์ด ์ƒํ™ฉ์˜ ๊ฐ€๋Šฅํ•œ ์›์ธ์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?", "์ด ์ ‘๊ทผ๋ฒ•์˜ ๋ฌธ์ œ์ ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ
04:54
with this approach?"
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04:56
That's it.
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๊ทธ๊ฒŒ ๋‹ค์•ผ. ์‹ค์ œ๋กœ ๋„์›€์ด ๋˜๋Š”
04:57
What solutions might actually work to help it?
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์†”๋ฃจ์…˜์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
04:59
They're not asking: What solution would you recommend?
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๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ๋ฌป์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์–ด๋–ค ์†”๋ฃจ์…˜์„ ์ถ”์ฒœํ•˜์‹œ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
05:03
If they put a "you", you're going to put an "I", an opinion.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์ด "๋‹น์‹ "์„ ๋„ฃ์œผ๋ฉด ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์˜๊ฒฌ์ธ "๋‚˜"๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:06
If they don't put a "you", and they don't ask for an opinion, don't give one.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์ด "๊ท€ํ•˜"๋ฅผ ๋„ฃ์ง€ ์•Š๊ณ  ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป์ง€ ์•Š๋Š”๋‹ค๋ฉด ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
05:10
Now: "Why", "What", "How", these are very direct questions.
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์ด์ œ: "์™œ", "๋ฌด์—‡์„", "์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ", ์ด๊ฒƒ๋“ค์€ ๋งค์šฐ ์ง์ ‘์ ์ธ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:13
"Why are...?", "Why does this thing happen?", "How can the government help fix this problem?"
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"์™œ...?", "์™œ ์ด๋Ÿฐ ์ผ์ด ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?", "์ •๋ถ€๊ฐ€ ์ด ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋„์›€์„ ์ค„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
05:20
etc.
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๋“ฑ
05:21
"What are some solutions to this situation?"
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" ์ด ์ƒํ™ฉ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ์ฑ…์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
05:23
Now, these are more commonly going to be found in the two-part question.
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์ด์ œ ์ด๊ฒƒ๋“ค์€ ๋‘ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์œผ๋กœ ๋œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—์„œ ๋” ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋ฐœ๊ฒฌ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:28
All of these are very straightforward question, this is mostly in the two-part.
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์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋งค์šฐ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด๋ฉฐ ๋Œ€๋ถ€๋ถ„ ๋‘ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์œผ๋กœ ๋‚˜๋‰ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:33
So, some essays will give you two questions and you have to answer both questions within
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ผ๋ถ€ ์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๋ฉฐ ์—์„ธ์ด ๋‚ด์—์„œ ๋‘ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋‹ตํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:39
the essay.
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05:40
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
05:41
Now, you can also have a hybrid, which is basically taking the non-opinion and asking
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์ด์ œ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋น„์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฐ›์•„๋“ค์ด๊ณ 
05:47
for an opinion.
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์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป๋Š” ํ•˜์ด๋ธŒ๋ฆฌ๋“œ๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์งˆ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:48
"Discuss both views and give your opinion."
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"๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๊ฒฌํ•ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๊ณ  ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค."
05:52
Make sure that you do both, but the approach is very different.
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๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋ฅผ ๋ชจ๋‘ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹์ด ๋งค์šฐ ๋‹ค๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:56
"Discuss both without opinion" and "Discuss both with opinion", very different approach
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"์˜๊ฒฌ ์—†์ด ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๊ธฐ"์™€ " ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๊ธฐ"๋Š” ์—์„ธ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹์ด ๋งค์šฐ ๋‹ค๋ฆ…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
06:01
to the essay.
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06:02
Now, this is usually the one that's most difficult for people to do because they don't know how
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์ž, ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ๋ณดํ†ต ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์ด ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ๋ถ„ํ•ดํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ๊ฐ€์žฅ ํ•˜๊ธฐ ์–ด๋ ค์šด ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
06:07
to break up their essays.
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06:09
But if you want to see how I work through both types of essays, go to my writing channel:
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์œ ํ˜•์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ํ†ตํ•ด ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ž‘์—…ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ณด๊ณ  ์‹ถ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋‚ด ๊ธ€์“ฐ๊ธฐ ์ฑ„๋„(
06:15
www.writetotop.com or YouTube "Write To Top", the link is in the description and you can
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www.writetotop.com ๋˜๋Š” YouTube "Write To Top")๋กœ ์ด๋™ํ•˜์„ธ์š”. ๋งํฌ๋Š” ์„ค๋ช…์— ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ
06:20
watch me work through both types of essays, hopefully help you out.
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๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์œ ํ˜•์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ํ†ตํ•ด ์ž‘์—…ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—์„ธ์ด, ๋„์›€์ด ๋˜๊ธธ ๋ฐ”๋ž๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:25
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
06:26
Same thing with "compare".
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"๋น„๊ต"๋„ ๋งˆ์ฐฌ๊ฐ€์ง€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:27
"Compare both sides and say which you agree with.", "What are the advantages and disadvantages,
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"์–‘์ชฝ์„ ๋น„๊ตํ•ด์„œ ์–ด๋Š ์ชฝ์ด ๋™์˜ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋งํ•ด๋ณด์„ธ์š”.", "์žฅ๋‹จ์ ์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ฉฐ,
06:33
and which do you think is more?" for example.
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์–ด๋Š ์ชฝ์ด ๋” ๋งŽ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹œ๋‚˜์š”?" ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด.
06:36
Problems and solutions: "What are some possible problems to this situation, and what do you
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๋ฌธ์ œ ๋ฐ ํ•ด๊ฒฐ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•: "์ด ์ƒํ™ฉ์—์„œ ๋ฐœ์ƒํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ฌธ์ œ๋Š” ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ฉฐ
06:41
think are ways to fix it?"
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ํ•ด๊ฒฐ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์‹ญ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
06:43
So, all of these can be...
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์€...
06:45
Have the opinion part added to it.
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์˜๊ฒฌ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์„ ์ถ”๊ฐ€ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:48
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
06:49
So be very careful.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‹ˆ ๋งค์šฐ ์กฐ์‹ฌํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
06:50
If you're asked for an opinion, give one; if you're not asked for one, don't give one.
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์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป๋Š”๋‹ค๋ฉด ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ์š”๊ตฌํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
06:54
If you're asked for a descriptive essay and an opinion, make sure you do both.
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๊ธฐ์ˆ ์ ์ธ ์—์„ธ์ด ์™€ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์š”์ฒญ๋ฐ›๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋ฅผ ๋ชจ๋‘ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:00
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
07:01
So we're going to look at a little bit...
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์กฐ๊ธˆ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณผ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค...
07:03
How to begin your essays, how to introduce...
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์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•, ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•... ์•„์ด๋””์–ด์˜
07:05
Introduce both sides in a very general set up of your ideas and how to organize.
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๋งค์šฐ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์„ค์ •๊ณผ ๊ตฌ์„ฑ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์—์„œ ์–‘๋ฉด์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
07:11
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
07:12
Okay, so we're going to look at basic things to keep in mind when you're writing these
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์ข‹์•„์š”, ๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์ด ์ด ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์“ธ ๋•Œ ์—ผ๋‘์— ๋‘์–ด์•ผ ํ•  ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์ธ ์‚ฌํ•ญ๋“ค์„ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณผ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:17
essays, but the main thing I want to make very clear to everybody: Don't look for a
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07:22
template for the essay.
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07:24
Every question will require its own approach, its own way of looking at the topic, at the
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๋ชจ๋“  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—๋Š” ๊ณ ์œ ํ•œ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹, ์ฃผ์ œ๋ฅผ ๋ณด๋Š” ๊ณ ์œ ํ•œ ๋ฐฉ์‹,
07:29
question and the issue, debate, whatever it is, and you have to approach each essay on
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์งˆ๋ฌธ ๋ฐ ๋ฌธ์ œ, ํ† ๋ก , ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡ ์ด๋“  ๊ฐ„์— ๊ฐ์ž์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด์— ์ ‘๊ทผํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:33
its own.
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07:34
Don't look for a template that you can try to apply to every question because you can't.
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์—†๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ๋ชจ๋“  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ์ ์šฉํ•˜๋ ค๊ณ  ์‹œ๋„ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ํ…œํ”Œ๋ฆฟ์„ ์ฐพ์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
07:39
Every type of question has its own approach, every type of...
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๋ชจ๋“  ์œ ํ˜•์˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—๋Š” ๊ณ ์œ ํ•œ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ชจ๋“  ์œ ํ˜•์˜...
07:43
Every hybrid, for example, has different ways to do it.
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด ๋ชจ๋“  ํ•˜์ด๋ธŒ๋ฆฌ๋“œ์—๋Š” ๋‹ค์–‘ํ•œ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:47
There's no one right way to write an essay.
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์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๋Š”
07:49
There's only one right way to express your ideas,
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์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ๋‹จ ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฟ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
07:53
that's what you try to figure out how to do. Right?
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. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
07:56
But the more you practice, the better feel you get for these essays, and you're able
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ๋” ๋งŽ์ด ์—ฐ์Šตํ• ์ˆ˜๋ก ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ์—์„ธ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋” ๋‚˜์€ ๋Š๋‚Œ์„ ๊ฐ–๊ฒŒ ๋˜๋ฉฐ ์˜ฌ๋ฐ”๋ฅธ ๋‚ด์šฉ์œผ๋กœ
08:00
to approach any question with the right things.
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๋ชจ๋“  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ์ ‘๊ทผํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
08:03
But having said all of that, a few things to keep in mind.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ๊ทธ ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋งํ•˜๋ฉด์„œ ๋ช…์‹ฌํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์‚ฌํ•ญ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:07
If you're asked for an opinion, make sure you give an opinion in the introduction: "I
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์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป๋Š”๋‹ค๋ฉด ์†Œ๊ฐœ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์— ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
08:11
agree that" or "I agree with", "I believe that", "In my opinion this is the right way".
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08:17
Make sure you do this.
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์ด ์ž‘์—…์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:18
Now, you don't have to use "I", again, I mentioned this before, but if you're not sure how to
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์ด์ œ "I"๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ด์ „์— ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ–ˆ์ง€๋งŒ
08:24
make your opinion very clear to the reader, just tell it to them very directly.
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๋…์ž์—๊ฒŒ ์ž์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ์ „๋‹ฌํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์ž˜ ๋ชจ๋ฅด๊ฒ ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋งค์šฐ ์ง์ ‘์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋งํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:29
"I agree", "I believe", "In my opinion", etc.
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"๋™์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค", "๋ฏฟ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค", " ๋‚ด ์˜๊ฒฌ์œผ๋กœ๋Š”" ๋“ฑ.
08:32
Now, how are you going to build your argument basically in your body paragraphs?
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์ด์ œ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์—์„œ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ์ฃผ์žฅ์„ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๊ตฌ์ถ•ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
08:37
Start with your strong argument first in the body paragraph, try to focus only on the side
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๋จผ์ € ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ์—์„œ ๊ฐ•๋ ฅํ•œ ์ฃผ์žฅ์œผ๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ฃผ์žฅํ•˜๋Š” ์ธก๋ฉด์—๋งŒ ์ง‘์ค‘ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค
08:42
you're arguing for.
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08:44
So if you agree with side A, spend the time and the words in body paragraph one to convince
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ A๋ฉด์— ๋™์˜ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 1์˜ ์‹œ๊ฐ„๊ณผ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ
08:50
the reader that side A is a good side to choose.
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๋…์ž์—๊ฒŒ A๋ฉด์ด ์ข‹์€ ์„ ํƒ์ž„์„ ํ™•์‹ ์‹œํ‚ค์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:54
In side B, in body paragraph two when you're looking at side B, start with a concession.
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B๋ฉด์—์„œ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2์—์„œ B๋ฉด์„ ๋ณผ ๋•Œ ์–‘๋ณด๋กœ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:59
What this means...
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์˜๋ฏธํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ”๋Š”...
09:00
And talk about side B. What are some good points about the other side?
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  B๋ฉด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ฉด์˜ ์ข‹์€ ์ ์€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
09:04
But make sure it's short, and make sure you turn it right back around and continue to
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์งง๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๊ณ , ๋ฐ”๋กœ ๋˜๋Œ๋ ค ๋†“๊ณ  ๊ณ„์†
09:08
arguing...
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๋…ผ์Ÿ์„ ๋ฒŒ์ด์„ธ์š”...
09:09
To argue for your side.
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๋‹น์‹  ํŽธ์„ ์ฃผ์žฅํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด.
09:11
By the end of it, by the time you get to the conclusion it should be very clear what your
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๊ฒฐ๋ก ์— ๋„๋‹ฌํ•  ๋•Œ์ฏค์ด๋ฉด ์ž์‹ ์˜
09:15
opinion is and why you had it.
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์˜๊ฒฌ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ธ์ง€, ์™œ ๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ์ƒ๊ฐ์„ ๊ฐ–๊ฒŒ ๋˜์—ˆ๋Š”์ง€๊ฐ€ ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:18
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
09:19
Now, a lot of ways to play with this, but this is the general approach you're going
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์ด์ œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ๋…ธ๋Š” ๋งŽ์€ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์ด ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ทจํ•  ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ ์ธ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:22
to be taking: If they're not asking you for an opinion, don't give one.
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๊ทธ๋“ค์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป์ง€ ์•Š๋Š”๋‹ค๋ฉด ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ฃผ์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
09:26
Again, you can say: "This essay will look at", "discuss" whatever topic you're looking
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๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ, ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋ณด๊ณ  ์žˆ๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ์ฃผ์ œ๊ฐ€ ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋“  "์ด ์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ์‚ดํŽด๋ณผ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค" , "ํ† ๋ก ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
09:31
at or discussing.
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09:33
"There are several ways to fix pollution, as this essay will demonstrate."
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"์ด ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ฒ˜๋Ÿผ ์˜ค์—ผ์„ ํ•ด๊ฒฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์—๋Š” ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ."
09:39
So basically you're telling the reader: "What is the objective?
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ์ ์œผ๋กœ ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋…์ž์—๊ฒŒ ์ด๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ๋งํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค : "๋ชฉ์ ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? ์—์„ธ์ด์˜
09:42
What is the purpose of the essay?"
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๋ชฉ์ ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?"
09:44
It's to deliver information or to describe something, or to outline a process, etc.
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์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ „๋‹ฌํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ๋ฌด์–ธ๊ฐ€๋ฅผ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜ ํ”„๋กœ์„ธ์Šค๋ฅผ ๊ฐœ๋žต์ ์œผ๋กœ ์„ค๋ช…ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
09:50
Now, you don't have to be very obvious either. Right?
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์ด์ œ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•  ํ•„์š”๋„ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
09:54
You don't have to say: "This essay will discuss".
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"์ด ์—์„ธ์ด๋Š” ๋…ผ์˜ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋ชฉ์ ์ด๋ผ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋…์ž์—๊ฒŒ ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋Š”
09:55
If you know how to write a sentence that makes it very clear to the reader that this is what
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๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ์“ฐ๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ์•Œ๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด
10:00
the objective of the essay is, do that.
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
10:03
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
10:04
"Though there are several reasons for the high-crime rate in the inner cities, the...
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"๋„์‹ฌ์˜ ๋†’์€ ๋ฒ”์ฃ„์œจ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ด์œ ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ...
10:11
This particular situation seems to be the most pertinent", or "the most obvious", or
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์ด ํŠน์ • ์ƒํ™ฉ์ด ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ ์ ˆํ•œ ๊ฒƒ ๊ฐ™์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค." ๋˜๋Š” "๊ฐ€์žฅ ๋ช…๋ฐฑํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜"
10:16
"the most common".
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"๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ผ๋ฐ˜์ "
10:18
As soon as you say that, I understand that this
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ๋งํ•˜์ž๋งˆ์ž ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด
10:20
is what you're going to be talking about. Right?
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๋ ค๋Š” ๋‚ด์šฉ์ด๋ผ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ดํ•ดํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
10:23
"There are several reasons, but this is the most important one."
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"์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ด์œ ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
10:25
It doesn't mean I think so, it's obvious, it's clear.
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๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•œ๋‹ค๋Š” ๋œป์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ, ๋ป”ํ•˜๋‹ค, ๋ป”ํ•˜๋‹ค.
10:28
"Here, I'm going to give you some information or some reasons to support this observation."
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"์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ ์ด ๊ด€์ฐฐ์„ ๋’ท๋ฐ›์นจํ•  ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์ •๋ณด๋‚˜ ์ด์œ ๋ฅผ ์•Œ๋ ค๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
10:34
Not opinion, observation.
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์˜๊ฒฌ์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ ๊ด€์ฐฐ.
10:37
Body paragraph one, reason one; body paragraph two, reason two.
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๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 1, ์ด์œ  1; ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2, ์ด์œ  2. ๋ณธ๋ฌธ
10:41
Body paragraph one, advantage one; body paragraph two, disadvantage one.
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๋‹จ๋ฝ 1, ์žฅ์  1; ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2, ๋‹จ์  1.
10:45
Benefit, drawback, compare, contrast.
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์žฅ์ , ๋‹จ์ , ๋น„๊ต, ๋Œ€์กฐ.
10:47
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
10:48
All of these things are very straightforward.
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์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋งค์šฐ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
10:51
Paragraph one, one thing; paragraph two, the second thing; conclusion, therefore all of
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๋‹จ๋ฝ 1, ํ•œ ๊ฐ€์ง€; ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ, ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ๊ฒƒ; ๊ฒฐ๋ก , ๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ
10:55
these things support the idea that this is the more important aspect, or reason, or whatever
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์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ๋“ค์€ ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๋” ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์ธก๋ฉด์ด๋‚˜ ์ด์œ , ๋˜๋Š”
11:01
you're discussing.
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋ฌด์—‡์ด๋“  ๊ฐ„์— ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ๋’ท๋ฐ›์นจํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:03
Now, these are not templates.
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์ด์ œ ์ด๋“ค์€ ํ…œํ”Œ๋ฆฟ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:05
Don't think of this as a template.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์„ ํ…œํ”Œ๋ฆฟ์œผ๋กœ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค . ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์“ธ
11:06
Don't do this every time you have an essay about...
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๋•Œ๋งˆ๋‹ค ์ด๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š” ...
11:10
That's not an opinion.
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๊ทธ๊ฑด ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:11
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
11:12
Sometimes you'll have to do it in different ways.
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๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:14
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
11:15
Compare, contrast.
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๋น„๊ต, ๋Œ€์กฐ.
11:16
You can compare and contrast one aspect in body paragraph two, you can compare and contrast
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๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2์—์„œ ํ•œ ์ธก๋ฉด์„ ๋น„๊ตํ•˜๊ณ  ๋Œ€์กฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2์—์„œ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ธก๋ฉด์„ ๋น„๊ตํ•˜๊ณ  ๋Œ€์กฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
11:21
another aspect in body paragraph two.
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.
11:24
Paragraph one, paragraph two.
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๋‹จ๋ฝ 1, ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2.
11:26
You can do both and both, you can do one and one.
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๋‘˜ ๋‹ค ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ณ  ๋‘˜ ๋‹ค ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ํ•˜๋‚˜์™€ ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:29
Lots of ways to do it.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜์žˆ๋Š” ๋งŽ์€ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•.
11:30
The main thing is: Don't give an opinion, make sure the reader understands the objective
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๊ฐ€์žฅ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์€ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์ง€ ๋ง๊ณ  ๋…์ž๊ฐ€ ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋ชฉ์ ์„ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜๋„๋ก ํ•œ
11:35
of the essay, and then organize your ideas in a very clear way to support that.
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๋‹ค์Œ ์ด๋ฅผ ๋’ท๋ฐ›์นจํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋งค์šฐ ๋ช…ํ™•ํ•œ ๋ฐฉ์‹์œผ๋กœ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์ •๋ฆฌํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:40
Give your opinion, make sure that the reader understands why you have this opinion, and
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๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜๊ณ  ๋…์ž๊ฐ€ ์™œ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ด ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜๊ณ 
11:45
that they believe...
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๊ทธ๋“ค์ด...
11:47
That you believe this opinion. Okay?
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ด ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฏฟ๋Š”๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์ดํ•ดํ•˜๋„๋ก ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ์ข‹์•„์š”?
11:50
We're going to look a little bit at the hybrid ones because they're a little bit different.
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ํ•˜์ด๋ธŒ๋ฆฌ๋“œ ๋Š” ์•ฝ๊ฐ„ ๋‹ค๋ฅด๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์— ์กฐ๊ธˆ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:53
Lots of ways to approach it.
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์ ‘๊ทผํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€ ๋งŽ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:55
Let's look at some ideas.
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๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:56
Okay, let's look at the last one, the hybrid.
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์ž, ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ํ•˜์ด๋ธŒ๋ฆฌ๋“œ๋ฅผ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
11:59
"Discuss both opinions" or "Discuss both things, and give your own opinion".
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"๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค" ๋˜๋Š” "๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋ฅผ ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜๊ณ  ์ž์‹ ์˜ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค".
12:04
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
12:05
So, now, what you have to do, you have to...
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์ž, ์ด์ œ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ์ผ์€ ...
12:07
In your thesis, in your introduction you have to make it clear to me that there are two
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๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ๋…ผ๋ฌธ์—์„œ, ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์„œ๋ก ์—์„œ ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€
12:12
sides and that you choose one over the other.
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์ธก๋ฉด์ด ์žˆ๊ณ  ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ชฝ์—์„œ ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ์„ ํƒํ•œ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋‚˜์—๊ฒŒ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํžˆ ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:15
So, actually I'm going to...
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์‚ฌ์‹ค ์ €๋Š”...
12:17
"There are pros and cons to wearing uniforms in school."
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" ํ•™๊ต์—์„œ ๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์—๋Š” ์žฅ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
12:22
If the essay is: "Should students wear uniforms in school?"
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์—์„ธ์ด๊ฐ€ ๋‹ค์Œ๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๊ฒฝ์šฐ: "ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์€ ํ•™๊ต์—์„œ ๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…์–ด์•ผ ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?"
12:25
So: "There are pros and cons to wearing a uniform, though I believe that students should
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ: "๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์—๋Š” ์žฅ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์€ ๋งค์ผ ๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…์–ด์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
12:31
wear them every day."
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."
12:32
Okay, just as an example.
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์ข‹์•„, ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด.
12:34
So as soon as you tell me there are pros and cons, remember you put it in the introduction.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ฐฌ๋ฐ˜ ์–‘๋ก ์ด ์žˆ๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜์ž๋งˆ์ž ์†Œ๊ฐœ์— ๋„ฃ์—ˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ๊ธฐ์–ตํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
12:38
As a reader I'm expecting to see the pros and cons in the body.
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๋…์ž๋กœ์„œ ๋‚˜๋Š” ๋ณธ๋ฌธ์˜ ์žฅ๋‹จ์ ์„ ๋ณผ ๊ฒƒ์œผ๋กœ ๊ธฐ๋Œ€ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:42
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
12:43
That's why you put it here.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— ๋‘๋Š” ์ด์œ ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:44
So that is your discuss aspect: "Discuss both", because pros, cons, both sides.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ๊ท€ํ•˜์˜ ๋…ผ์˜ ์ธก๋ฉด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. " ๋‘˜ ๋‹ค ๋…ผ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค". ์™œ๋ƒํ•˜๋ฉด ์ฐฌ๋ฐ˜ ์–‘๋ก ์ด ์žˆ๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:51
Now, as soon as you believe one over the other, then you're giving me your opinion.
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์ด์ œ ์„œ๋กœ๋ฅผ ๋ฏฟ๊ฒŒ ๋˜๋ฉด ๋‚˜์—๊ฒŒ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:56
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
12:57
Very straightforward.
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๋งค์šฐ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
12:58
Now, how are you going to split up your ideas?
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์ด์ œ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๋‚˜๋ˆŒ ๊ฑด๊ฐ€์š”?
13:01
Body paragraph one, discuss both things.
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๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 1์—์„œ ๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€๋ฅผ ๋ชจ๋‘ ๋…ผ์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:04
Discuss the pros, discuss the cons, obviously very briefly.
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์žฅ์ ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๊ณ  ๋‹จ์ ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ํ† ๋ก ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๋ฌผ๋ก  ์•„์ฃผ ๊ฐ„๋žตํ•˜๊ฒŒ์š”.
13:07
These are short essays, you don't need to give me that much information.
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ์งง์€ ์—์„ธ์ด์ด๋ฏ€๋กœ ๋งŽ์€ ์ •๋ณด๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:11
Give me one pro, give me one con, but right away start to lean to the one you're choosing.
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๋‚˜์—๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋‚˜์˜ ์žฅ์ ์„ ์ฃผ๊ณ  ํ•˜๋‚˜์˜ ๋‹จ์ ์„ ์ฃผ์ง€๋งŒ, ์ฆ‰์‹œ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์„ ํƒํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์— ๊ธฐ๋Œ€๊ธฐ ์‹œ์ž‘ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
13:18
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
13:19
If you're believing that there are more pros than cons, that students should wear uniforms,
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๋‹จ์ ๋ณด๋‹ค ์žฅ์ ์ด ๋” ๋งŽ๊ณ  ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…์–ด์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋ฏฟ๋Š”๋‹ค๋ฉด
13:23
make sure that the last sentence or the last couple of sentences give me, as the reader,
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๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด๋‚˜ ๋งˆ์ง€๋ง‰ ๋‘ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์ด ๋…์ž์ธ ๋‚˜์—๊ฒŒ
13:27
a hint that that's what you're choosing.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์ด ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์„ ํƒํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๋Š” ํžŒํŠธ๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
13:29
And then in body paragraph two fully support that choice and make maybe one or two mentions
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๋‹ค์Œ ๋ณธ๋ฌธ ๋‹จ๋ฝ 2์—์„œ ํ•ด๋‹น ์„ ํƒ์„ ์™„์ „ํžˆ ์ง€์›ํ•˜๊ณ  ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ชฝ์—์„œ ํ•œ๋‘ ๋ฒˆ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
13:36
to the other side.
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13:38
Don't spend too much time going back to the other side, just make a very short mention
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์ƒ๋Œ€๋ฐฉ์—๊ฒŒ ๋Œ์•„๊ฐ€๋Š” ๋ฐ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ๋งŽ์€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ํ• ์• ํ•˜์ง€ ๋ง๊ณ  ์ƒ๋Œ€๋ฐฉ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์•„์ฃผ ์งง๊ฒŒ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค
13:44
about the other side.
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13:46
So: "Students who are forced to wear uniforms don't have to make decisions every morning,
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ: "๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…๋„๋ก ๊ฐ•์š”๋ฐ›๋Š” ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์€ ๋งค์ผ ์•„์นจ ๊ฒฐ์ •์„ ๋‚ด๋ฆด ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:52
although some people say that making decisions is good for a child's development.
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์–ด๋–ค ์‚ฌ๋žŒ๋“ค์€ ๊ฒฐ์ •์„ ๋‚ด๋ฆฌ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„์ด์˜ ๋ฐœ๋‹ฌ์— ์ข‹๋‹ค๊ณ  ๋งํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
13:58
But not having to make the choices helps them spend more time concentrating on school."
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์„ ํƒ์„ ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์•„๋„ ํ•™๊ต์— ์ง‘์ค‘ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ๋” ๋งŽ์€ ์‹œ๊ฐ„์„ ํ• ์• ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ๋„์›€์ด ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. "
14:02
So, I mention the other side, and then quickly I come back to the side I'm choosing and I
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์ €๋Š” ์ƒ๋Œ€๋ฐฉ์„ ์–ธ๊ธ‰ํ•œ ๋‹ค์Œ ์žฌ๋นจ๋ฆฌ ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์„ ํƒํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š” ์ชฝ์œผ๋กœ ๋Œ์•„์™€
14:07
continue to support my choice.
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์ œ ์„ ํƒ์„ ๊ณ„์† ์ง€์ง€ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:10
And then in the conclusion, again: "There are benefits and drawbacks, but I believe that..."
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๊ฒฐ๋ก ์—์„œ ๋‹ค์‹œ: " ์žฅ์ ๊ณผ ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๋‚˜๋Š” ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ฏฟ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค..."
14:16
Actually don't say: "I believe".
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์‚ฌ์‹ค "๋‚˜๋Š” ๋ฏฟ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
14:17
"There are benefits and drawbacks, but it's clear that wearing uniforms help the students
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"์žฅ์ ๊ณผ ๋‹จ์ ์ด ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๊ต๋ณต์„ ์ž…๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์—๊ฒŒ ๋” ๋„์›€์ด ๋˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋ถ„๋ช…ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
14:21
more."
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14:22
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
14:23
Again, very different ways to do this, very...
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๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ, ์ด๋ฅผ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•˜๋Š” ๋งค์šฐ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•, ๋งค์šฐ...
14:27
A lot of different approaches to these types of questions, but keep in mind there's no template.
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์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ์œ ํ˜•์˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋‹ค์–‘ํ•œ ์ ‘๊ทผ ๋ฐฉ์‹์ด ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ํ…œํ”Œ๋ฆฟ์ด ์—†๋‹ค๋Š” ์ ์„ ๋ช…์‹ฌํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
14:33
Figure out exactly what you need to do and make sure that you do it.
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๋‹น์‹ ์ด ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ์ผ์„ ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ํŒŒ์•… ํ•˜๊ณ  ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
14:35
If you need to give an opinion, give it; if you need to not give one, don't give one;
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์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•ด์•ผ ํ•œ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ์ค„ ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†๋‹ค๋ฉด ์ฃผ์ง€ ๋งˆ์„ธ์š”.
14:39
if you need to discuss and give one, do both. Okay?
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ํ† ๋ก ํ•˜๊ณ  ํ•˜๋‚˜๋ฅผ ์ œ๊ณตํ•ด์•ผ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ๋‘˜ ๋‹ค ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ์ข‹์•„์š”?
14:43
Especially be careful with the two-part questions.
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ํŠนํžˆ ๋‘ ๋ถ€๋ถ„์œผ๋กœ ๋œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ์ฃผ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
14:47
Sometimes it'll be two questions that don't ask for an opinion, sometimes it'll be one
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๋•Œ๋กœ๋Š” ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ๋ฌป์ง€ ์•Š๋Š” ๋‘ ๊ฐœ์˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ผ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ๊ณ  ,
14:51
question for description, one question for an opinion.
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์„ค๋ช…์„ ์œ„ํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ ํ•˜๋‚˜์™€ ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์œ„ํ•œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ ํ•˜๋‚˜์ผ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
14:55
Is it non-opinion or is it a hybrid?
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๋น„์˜๊ฒฌ์ธ๊ฐ€ ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ฉด ์žก์ข…์ธ๊ฐ€?
14:56
Be very careful about that.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋งค์šฐ ์กฐ์‹ฌํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
14:58
There is a quiz on www.engvid.com where I make sure you guys understood all this stuff.
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www.engvid.com์—๋Š” ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์ด ์ด ๋ชจ๋“  ๋‚ด์šฉ์„ ์ดํ•ดํ–ˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๋Š” ํ€ด์ฆˆ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:05
Like the video if you liked it, please.
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์˜์ƒ์ด ๋งˆ์Œ์— ๋“œ์…จ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์ข‹์•„์š” ๋ถ€ํƒ๋“œ๋ฆฝ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:07
And if you have any questions, please go to www.engvid.com, there's a forum there, you
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ์œผ์‹œ๋ฉด www.engvid.com์œผ๋กœ ๊ฐ€์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค . ํฌ๋Ÿผ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:11
can ask any questions you like.
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์›ํ•˜๋Š” ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:13
And subscribe to my channel.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‚ด ์ฑ„๋„์„ ๊ตฌ๋…ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
15:14
And hopefully I'll come back soon with more good lessons to help you with your IELTS.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์˜ IELTS์— ๋„์›€์ด ๋  ๋” ์ข‹์€ ๋ ˆ์Šจ์œผ๋กœ ๊ณง ๋Œ์•„์˜ฌ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ธฐ๋ฅผ ๋ฐ”๋ž๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
15:19
See you then. Bye-bye.
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๊ทธ๋•Œ ๋งŒ๋‚˜. ์•ˆ๋…•.

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์ด ์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ํ•™์Šต์— ์œ ์šฉํ•œ YouTube ๋™์˜์ƒ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „ ์„ธ๊ณ„ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜๋“ค์ด ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ ๋™์˜์ƒ ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ” ํด๋ฆญํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ณณ์—์„œ ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์žฌ์ƒ์— ๋งž์ถฐ ์ž๋ง‰์ด ์Šคํฌ๋กค๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด๋‚˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ๋ฌธ์˜ ์–‘์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฌธ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.

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