8 Tips to Improve Your Writing in English

167,794 views ・ 2018-07-20

Speak English With Vanessa


μ•„λž˜ μ˜λ¬Έμžλ§‰μ„ λ”λΈ”ν΄λ¦­ν•˜μ‹œλ©΄ μ˜μƒμ΄ μž¬μƒλ©λ‹ˆλ‹€. λ²ˆμ—­λœ μžλ§‰μ€ 기계 λ²ˆμ—­λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.

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Hi, I'm Vanessa from SpeakEnglishWithVanessa.com.
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μ•ˆλ…•ν•˜μ„Έμš”, μ €λŠ” SpeakEnglishWithVanessa.com의 Vanessaμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Are you ready to improve your writing skills?
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μž‘λ¬Έ μ‹€λ ₯을 ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚¬ μ€€λΉ„κ°€ λ˜μ…¨μŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
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Let's talk about it.
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그것에 λŒ€ν•΄ μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•©μ‹œλ‹€.
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Are you ready to write like a pro?
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ν”„λ‘œμ²˜λŸΌ 글을 μ“Έ μ€€λΉ„κ°€ λ˜μ…¨λ‚˜μš”?
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Today, let's talk about my top eight tips to help you improve your writing skills.
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μ˜€λŠ˜μ€ μž‘λ¬Έ μ‹€λ ₯을 ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚€λŠ” 데 도움이 λ˜λŠ” 8가지 νŒμ— λŒ€ν•΄ 이야기해 λ³΄κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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If you ever need to write business emails, write academic essays, write essays for English
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λΉ„μ¦ˆλ‹ˆμŠ€ 이메일을 μž‘μ„±ν•˜κ³ , ν•™μˆ  에세이λ₯Ό μž‘μ„±ν•˜κ³ ,
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exams like the IELTS exam you need to practice perfecting your writing skills.
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IELTS μ‹œν—˜κ³Ό 같은 μ˜μ–΄ μ‹œν—˜μ„ μœ„ν•œ 에세이λ₯Ό μž‘μ„±ν•΄μ•Ό ν•œλ‹€λ©΄ μž‘λ¬Έ μ‹€λ ₯을 μ™„λ²½ν•˜κ²Œ μ—°μŠ΅ν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Throughout these eight tips you're going to see that in general writing emails is more
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이 8가지 νŒμ„ 톡해 일반적으둜 이메일 μž‘μ„±μ΄
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relaxed and more informal than writing essays.
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에세이 μž‘μ„±λ³΄λ‹€ 더 νŽΈμ•ˆν•˜κ³  λΉ„κ³΅μ‹μ μ΄λΌλŠ” 것을 μ•Œκ²Œ 될 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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When I write to my tax accountant, when I write him an email, I say, "Hi George."
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μ„Έλ¬΄μ‚¬μ—κ²Œ νŽΈμ§€λ₯Ό μ“Έ λ•Œ, κ·Έμ—κ²Œ 이메일을 μ“Έ λ•Œ μ €λŠ” "μ•ˆλ…• 쑰지"라고 λ§ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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And I keep it clear and simple.
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그리고 λ‚˜λŠ” 그것을 λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ³  λ‹¨μˆœν•˜κ²Œ μœ μ§€ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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He doesn't have much time, I don't have much time, so this is the best way to write emails.
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κ·ΈλŠ” μ‹œκ°„μ΄ λ§Žμ§€ μ•Šκ³  λ‚˜λ„ μ‹œκ°„μ΄ λ§Žμ§€ μ•ŠκΈ° λ•Œλ¬Έμ— 이것이 이메일을 μž‘μ„±ν•˜λŠ” κ°€μž₯ 쒋은 λ°©λ²•μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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But for essays it's a little bit different.
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ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ μ—μ„Έμ΄μ˜ κ²½μš°λŠ” 쑰금 λ‹€λ¦…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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If you're taking the IELTS exam or another English exam, you can't write just a few sentences.
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IELTS μ‹œν—˜μ΄λ‚˜ λ‹€λ₯Έ μ˜μ–΄ μ‹œν—˜μ„ 치λ₯΄κ³  μžˆλ‹€λ©΄ λͺ‡ λ¬Έμž₯만 μ“Έ μˆ˜λŠ” μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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You can just use bullet points.
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κΈ€ 머리 기호 만 μ‚¬μš©ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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You need to write four paragraphs, maybe more.
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λ„€ 단락, μ–΄μ©Œλ©΄ κ·Έ 이상을 μž‘μ„±ν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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But the same general principle applies.
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κ·ΈλŸ¬λ‚˜ λ™μΌν•œ 일반 원칙이 μ μš©λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Every word is valuable and powerful.
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λͺ¨λ“  λ‹¨μ–΄λŠ” κ°€μΉ˜ 있고 κ°•λ ₯ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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So you can use these eight tips to make sure that your language, your writing, impresses
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λ”°λΌμ„œ 이 8가지 νŒμ„ μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ—¬ κ·€ν•˜μ˜ μ–Έμ–΄, κ·€ν•˜μ˜ 글이
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other people, is clear, and is easy to understand.
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λ‹€λ₯Έ μ‚¬λžŒμ—κ²Œ κΉŠμ€ 인상을 μ£Όκ³  λͺ…ν™•ν•˜λ©° μ΄ν•΄ν•˜κΈ° 쉽도둝 ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Let's talk about them.
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그듀에 λŒ€ν•΄ μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•©μ‹œλ‹€.
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My first four tips fall under the category of don't use repetitive or undescriptive phrases.
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처음 λ„€ 가지 νŒμ€ λ°˜λ³΅μ μ΄κ±°λ‚˜ μ„€λͺ…이 μ—†λŠ” 문ꡬλ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠλŠ” 범주에 μ†ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Every word needs to be powerful, so if you are repetitive or if you are not describing
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λͺ¨λ“  λ‹¨μ–΄λŠ” κ°•λ ₯ν•΄μ•Ό ν•˜λ―€λ‘œ λ°˜λ³΅μ μ΄κ±°λ‚˜
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something with each word, you don't need it.
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각 λ‹¨μ–΄λ‘œ 무언가λ₯Ό μ„€λͺ…ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠλŠ” κ²½μš°μ—λŠ” ν•„μš”ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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You need each word to pack a punch.
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νŽ€μΉ˜λ₯Ό 포μž₯ν•˜λ €λ©΄ 각 단어가 ν•„μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Pack a punch is a great idiom that means powerful, you need each word to be powerful.
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Pack a punchλŠ” κ°•λ ₯함을 μ˜λ―Έν•˜λŠ” ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ κ΄€μš©κ΅¬μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. κ°•λ ₯ν•˜λ €λ©΄ 각 단어가 ν•„μš”ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Let's start with the first tip.
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첫 번째 νŒλΆ€ν„° μ‹œμž‘ν•˜κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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First tip is to avoid using the word I. In emails it's gonna be necessary, you're gonna
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첫 번째 νŒμ€ IλΌλŠ” 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠλŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ΄λ©”μΌμ—μ„œ ν•„μš”ν•  κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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have to say, "I'm writing you to follow up about something."
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" μ–΄λ–€ 것에 λŒ€ν•œ 후속 쑰치λ₯Ό μœ„ν•΄ νŽΈμ§€λ₯Ό μ”λ‹ˆλ‹€."
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Emails, no problem, but in essays, no way.
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이메일은 λ¬Έμ œκ°€ μ—†μ§€λ§Œ μ—μ„Έμ΄μ—μ„œλŠ” λ¬Έμ œκ°€ μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Especially essays that are not about your personal opinion.
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특히 개인적인 의견이 μ•„λ‹Œ 에세이.
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Let's take a look at a quick example.
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κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ 예λ₯Ό μ‚΄νŽ΄λ³΄κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Let's imagine that you're writing an essay based on the topic what are the advantages
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and disadvantages of social media?
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μ†Œμ…œ λ―Έλ””μ–΄μ˜ μž₯단점은 λ¬΄μ—‡μž…λ‹ˆκΉŒ? λΌλŠ” 주제둜 에세이λ₯Ό μ“°κ³  μžˆλ‹€κ³  상상해 λ΄…μ‹œλ‹€.
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You might think that you're talking about your opinion and you should start with, "I
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당신은 λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ μ˜κ²¬μ— λŒ€ν•΄ μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•˜κ³  μžˆλ‹€κ³  생각할 μˆ˜λ„ 있고 "λ‚˜λŠ”
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think that social media ..." But in reality, cut out I think.
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μ†Œμ…œ λ―Έλ””μ–΄κ°€ ..."둜 μ‹œμž‘ν•΄μ•Όν•œλ‹€κ³  μƒκ°ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ μ‹€μ œλ‘œλŠ” μž˜λΌλ‚Έ 것 κ°™μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Start with social media, and then you can go on to create a beautiful sentence, "Social
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μ†Œμ…œ λ―Έλ””μ–΄λ‘œ μ‹œμž‘ν•œ λ‹€μŒ "μ†Œμ…œ
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media often creates the illusion of relationships while leaving users feeling empty inside."
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λ―Έλ””μ–΄λŠ” μ’…μ’… μ‚¬μš©μžκ°€ 내면을 κ³΅ν—ˆν•˜κ²Œ λŠλΌλ©΄μ„œ 관계에 λŒ€ν•œ ν™˜μƒμ„ λ§Œλ“­λ‹ˆλ‹€."λΌλŠ” μ•„λ¦„λ‹€μš΄ λ¬Έμž₯을 λ§Œλ“€ 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Great, this is descriptive, it packs a punch, and does not use the word I.
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μ’‹μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ„€λͺ…이 잘 λ˜μ–΄ 있고 νŽ€μΉ˜λ₯Ό 날리며 IλΌλŠ” 단어λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Number two is contractions.
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두 λ²ˆμ§ΈλŠ” μΆ•μ•½ν˜•μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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When you're writing an email it's perfectly fine to say, "The director isn't available
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이메일을 μž‘μ„±ν•  λ•Œ "κ°λ…λ‹˜μ€
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at 4PM."
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μ˜€ν›„ 4μ‹œμ— λΆ€μž¬μ€‘μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•˜λŠ” 것이 μ’‹μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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But when you're writing an essay, an academic essay, an IELTS essay, an exam essay, no way.
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ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ 에세이, ν•™μ—… 에세이, IELTS 에세이, μ‹œν—˜ 에세이λ₯Ό μ“Έ λ•ŒλŠ” μ ˆλŒ€ μ•ˆ λ©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Try to write out the full words.
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μ™„μ „ν•œ 단어λ₯Ό μ¨λ³΄μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
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For example, the graph does not show which product sold first.
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예λ₯Ό λ“€μ–΄ κ·Έλž˜ν”„μ—λŠ” λ¨Όμ € 판맀된 μ œν’ˆμ΄ ν‘œμ‹œλ˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Great, you didn't say, "The graph doesn't show."
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μ’‹μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. "κ·Έλž˜ν”„κ°€ ν‘œμ‹œλ˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν•˜μ§€ μ•Šμ•˜μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
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Instead you said, "The graph does not show."
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λŒ€μ‹  "κ·Έλž˜ν”„κ°€ ν‘œμ‹œλ˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 λ§ν–ˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Excellent.
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ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ.
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Simple tip, avoid contractions in essays.
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κ°„λ‹¨ν•œ 팁, μ—μ„Έμ΄μ—μ„œ μˆ˜μΆ•μ„ ν”Όν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
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Number three tip is kind of big.
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μ„Έ 번째 νŒμ€ λ‹€μ†Œ ν½λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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It is avoid boring beginnings.
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μ§€λ£¨ν•œ μ‹œμž‘μ„ ν”Όν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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For example, there is, there are, first, second, third.
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예λ₯Ό λ“€μ–΄, 첫째, λ‘˜μ§Έ, μ…‹μ§Έκ°€ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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These words don't pack a punch, like I said.
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이 말은 λ‚΄κ°€ λ§ν–ˆλ“―μ΄ νŽ€μΉ˜λ₯Ό 포μž₯ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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They're not powerful.
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그듀은 κ°•λ ₯ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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So instead of writing, "There are many reasons why coffee is popular."
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κ·Έλž˜μ„œ "컀피가 인기 μžˆλŠ” λ°λŠ” λ‹€ μ΄μœ κ°€ μžˆλ‹€"라고 μ“°λŠ” λŒ€μ‹  .
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You could say, "Coffee is well loved for three reasons."
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"컀피가 μ‚¬λž‘λ°›λŠ” μ΄μœ λŠ” μ„Έ κ°€μ§€μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€."라고 말할 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Excellent.
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ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ.
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Each word is powerful.
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λͺ¨λ“  λ‹¨μ–΄λŠ” κ°•λ ₯ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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So what should you use instead of first, second, third?
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그럼 첫 번째, 두 번째, μ„Έ 번째 λŒ€μ‹  무엇을 μ‚¬μš©ν•΄μ•Ό ν• κΉŒμš” ? μ²˜μŒμ—λŠ” μš°μ„ , μ²˜μŒλΆ€ν„°μ™€ 같이 μ’€
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How about some more interesting, expressive, and advanced expressions like first of all,
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더 ν₯λ―Έλ‘­κ³  ν‘œν˜„λ ₯이 ν’λΆ€ν•˜λ©° κ³ κΈ‰ ν‘œν˜„μ€ μ–΄λ–»μŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
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first off, to start with.
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Great, you're showing that your vocabulary is beyond just those basic words.
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μ’‹μ•„, 당신은 λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ μ–΄νœ˜κ°€ 기본적인 단어 μ΄μƒμ΄λΌλŠ” 것을 보여주고 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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And a little bonus tip.
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그리고 μ•½κ°„μ˜ λ³΄λ„ˆμŠ€ 팁.
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If you're writing an essay and you have limited time to write the essay, I recommend when
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에세이λ₯Ό μž‘μ„± 쀑이고 에세이λ₯Ό μ“Έ μ‹œκ°„μ΄ μ œν•œλ˜μ–΄ μžˆλ‹€λ©΄
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you're practicing, memorize five great linking expressions and use these every time that
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μ—°μŠ΅ν•  λ•Œ λ‹€μ„― 가지 ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ μ—°κ²° ν‘œν˜„μ„ μ™Έμš°κ³ 
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you write an essay or as many times as possible, so that you can include them and know that
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에세이λ₯Ό μ“Έ λ•Œλ§ˆλ‹€ λ˜λŠ” κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ ν•œ 많이 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜λŠ” 것이 μ’‹μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. 그것듀을 ν¬ν•¨ν•˜κ³ 
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you're using great vocabulary.
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ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ μ–΄νœ˜λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜κ³  μžˆμŒμ„ μ•Œ 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Here are my top five favorite linking expressions.
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λ‹€μŒμ€ μ œκ°€ κ°€μž₯ μ’‹μ•„ν•˜λŠ” 5가지 μ—°κ²° ν‘œν˜„μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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As for, another point to consider is, having said that, therefore, to conclude.
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κ³ λ €ν•΄μ•Ό ν•  또 λ‹€λ₯Έ 점은 결둠을 λ‚΄λ¦¬λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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My fourth tip for avoiding repetitive and undescriptive words is to avoid the passive
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반볡적이고 μ„€λͺ…이 μ—†λŠ” 단어λ₯Ό ν”Όν•˜λŠ” λ„€ 번째 νŒμ€
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voice in essay writing.
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에세이 μž‘μ„±μ—μ„œ μˆ˜λ™νƒœλ₯Ό ν”Όν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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The passive voice has a great place, there are times when you should use it.
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μˆ˜λ™νƒœλŠ” 쒋은 μœ„μΉ˜μ— 있으며 μ‚¬μš©ν•΄μ•Ό ν•  λ•Œκ°€ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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You can watch my video up here to make sure that when you use it it's the right time.
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μ—¬κΈ°μ—μ„œ λ‚΄ λΉ„λ””μ˜€λ₯Ό 보고 μ‚¬μš©ν•  λ•Œ μ μ ˆν•œ μ‹œκ°„μΈμ§€ 확인할 수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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But when you're writing an essay, this is not the time.
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ν•˜μ§€λ§Œ 당신이 에세이λ₯Ό μ“Έ λ•Œ, μ§€κΈˆμ€ λ•Œκ°€ μ•„λ‹™λ‹ˆλ‹€.
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Let's take a look at a sample sentence.
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μ˜ˆλ¬Έμ„ ν•œλ²ˆ λ³ΌκΉŒμš”?
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The reason why the TV show stopped was because it was boring.
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TV μ‡Όκ°€ μ€‘λ‹¨λœ μ΄μœ λŠ” μ§€λ£¨ν–ˆκΈ° λ•Œλ¬Έμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:56
No, this is not powerful.
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μ•„λ‹ˆμš”, 이것은 κ°•λ ₯ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
04:59
This does not pack a punch.
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이것은 νŽ€μΉ˜λ₯Ό 포μž₯ν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:00
You're using the passive voice.
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당신은 μˆ˜λ™νƒœλ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜κ³  μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:03
The reason why the TV show was stopped, it sounds academic but it is not powerful.
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방솑이 μ€‘λ‹¨λœ μ΄μœ λŠ” ν•™μˆ μ μœΌλ‘œ λ“€λ¦¬μ§€λ§Œ κ°•λ ₯ν•˜μ§€λŠ” μ•Šλ‹€.
05:10
How can we change the sentence to be active voice?
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λ¬Έμž₯을 λŠ₯λ™νƒœλ‘œ λ°”κΎΈλ €λ©΄ μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ ν•΄μ•Ό ν• κΉŒμš” ?
05:13
Viewers stopped watching the TV show due to the predictable story.
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μ‹œμ²­μžλ“€μ€ 예츑 κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ 이야기 β€‹β€‹λ•Œλ¬Έμ— TV μ‡Ό μ‹œμ²­μ„ μ€‘λ‹¨ν–ˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
05:19
Much better.
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훨씬 λ‚«λ‹€.
05:21
Much better.
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훨씬 λ‚«λ‹€.
05:22
Here we have the subject doing the action.
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μ—¬κΈ°μ„œ μš°λ¦¬λŠ” 행동을 ν•˜λŠ” 주제λ₯Ό 가지고 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:25
Viewers stopped.
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μ‹œμ²­μžκ°€ λ©ˆμ·„μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:26
This is powerful.
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이것은 κ°•λ ₯ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:28
This packs a punch.
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이것은 νŽ€μΉ˜λ₯Ό 포μž₯ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:29
Viewers stopped watching due to a predictable storyline.
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예츑 κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ μŠ€ν† λ¦¬λ‘œ 인해 μ‹œμ²­μžκ°€ μ‹œμ²­μ„ μ€‘λ‹¨ν–ˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
05:33
That's another great expression, due to.
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그것은 또 λ‹€λ₯Έ ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ ν‘œν˜„μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:35
My fifth, sixth and seventh tip are things that you should do.
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λ‹€μ„― 번째, μ—¬μ„― 번째, 일곱 번째 νŒμ€ μ—¬λŸ¬λΆ„μ΄ ν•΄μ•Ό ν•  μΌμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:40
The fifth tip is to stay on topic.
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λ‹€μ„― 번째 νŒμ€ 주제λ₯Ό μœ μ§€ν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
05:44
You'd be surprised how many times my students have started to write about something and
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λ‚΄ 학생듀이 무언가에 λŒ€ν•΄ μ“°κΈ° μ‹œμž‘ν•œ
05:49
then they've switched to something else in the middle of the paragraph, and then gone
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λ‹€μŒ 단락 μ€‘κ°„μ—μ„œ λ‹€λ₯Έ κ²ƒμœΌλ‘œ μ „ν™˜ν•œ λ‹€μŒ λ‹€μ‹œ
05:52
back, and my mind is just going to explode as I read it.
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λŒμ•„κ°€μ„œ μ½λŠ” λ™μ•ˆ λ‚΄ 마음이 ν­λ°œν•˜λŠ” κ²½μš°κ°€ μ–Όλ§ˆλ‚˜ 많이 μžˆλŠ”μ§€ 놀라싀 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
05:56
So, make sure that you stay on topic.
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λ”°λΌμ„œ μ£Όμ œμ— μ§‘μ€‘ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
05:58
And this is true for emails as well.
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그리고 이것은 μ΄λ©”μΌμ—μ„œλ„ λ§ˆμ°¬κ°€μ§€μž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:00
Are you writing about Friday's shipment?
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κΈˆμš”μΌ 배솑에 λŒ€ν•΄ μ“°κ³  μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
06:03
Stick to that topic.
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κ·Έ μ£Όμ œμ— μΆ©μ‹€ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
06:04
If you have multiple topics, just use bullet points.
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μ£Όμ œκ°€ μ—¬λŸ¬ 개인 경우 글머리 기호만 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ„Έμš” .
06:07
I'd like to email you about ... Great, use those bullet points to be clear and precise
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λ‚˜λŠ” λ‹Ήμ‹ μ—κ²Œ 이메일을 보내고 μ‹ΆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ’‹μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€. μ€‘μš” ν•­λͺ©μ„ λͺ…ν™•ν•˜κ³  μ •ν™•
06:13
and short.
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ν•˜κ³  짧게 μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
06:14
Of course in an essay you're not gonna use bullet points, but if you have a topic for
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λ¬Όλ‘  μ—μ„Έμ΄μ—μ„œ κΈ€ 머리 기호λ₯Ό μ‚¬μš©ν•˜μ§€λŠ” μ•Šκ² μ§€λ§Œ ν•΄λ‹Ή 단락에 λŒ€ν•œ μ£Όμ œκ°€ 있으면
06:18
that paragraph, stick to it.
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그것에 μΆ©μ‹€ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€. 컀피가 μ‚¬λž‘λ°›λŠ”
06:20
Let's imagine that you're talking about some of the reasons why coffee is well loved, and
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λͺ‡ 가지 μ΄μœ μ— λŒ€ν•΄ μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•˜κ³  μžˆλ‹€κ³  상상해 λ΄…μ‹œλ‹€ .
06:24
your first reason is that people enjoy getting that boost of energy from coffee.
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첫 번째 μ΄μœ λŠ” μ‚¬λžŒλ“€μ΄ μ»€ν”Όμ—μ„œ μ—λ„ˆμ§€λ₯Ό μ–»λŠ” 것을 μ¦κΈ΄λ‹€λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
06:29
Great, stick to that topic.
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μ’‹μ•„μš”, κ·Έ μ£Όμ œμ— μΆ©μ‹€ν•˜μ„Έμš”. μ‚¬λžŒλ“€μ΄ μ–»λŠ”
06:31
Stick to the boost of energy, that good feeling that people get.
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쒋은 λŠλ‚ŒμΈ μ—λ„ˆμ§€ λΆ€μŠ€νŠΈμ— μΆ©μ‹€ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€ .
06:35
Don't talk about addiction, don't talk about taste, stick to that topic.
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쀑독에 λŒ€ν•΄ μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•˜μ§€ 말고 μ·¨ν–₯에 λŒ€ν•΄ μ΄μ•ΌκΈ°ν•˜μ§€ 말고 κ·Έ μ£Όμ œμ— μΆ©μ‹€ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
06:40
My sixth tip to do is to summarize at the end.
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μ—¬μ„― 번째 νŒμ€ λ§ˆμ§€λ§‰μ— μš”μ•½ν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
06:44
If it's an email that's only a paragraph, write a one sentence summary.
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λ‹¨λ½λ§Œ μžˆλŠ” 이메일인 경우 ν•œ λ¬Έμž₯ μš”μ•½μ„ μž‘μ„±ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€. 15일 μ˜€μ „ 9μ‹œμ—
06:48
I look forward to talking to you again at 9AM on the 15th.
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λ‹€μ‹œ 톡화할 수 있기λ₯Ό κΈ°λŒ€ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
06:53
Beautiful.
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μ•„λ¦„λ‹€μš΄.
06:54
If it's an essay that's a couple of paragraphs, write a three to five sentence summary.
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두 λ¬Έλ‹¨μœΌλ‘œ κ΅¬μ„±λœ 에세이라면 3~5λ¬Έμž₯ μš”μ•½μ„ μž‘μ„±ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
06:59
Excellent.
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ν›Œλ₯­ν•œ.
07:00
Don't forget this tip, it's so valuable.
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이 νŒμ„ μžŠμ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš”. 맀우 κ·€μ€‘ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:02
My seventh tip, do not forget, is to check your writing.
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제 일곱 번째 팁, μžŠμ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš”, λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ 글을 ν™•μΈν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:09
If you're writing an email there is a big difference between we are choosing to cancel
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이메일을 μž‘μ„±ν•˜λŠ” 경우 계약 μ·¨μ†Œλ₯Ό μ„ νƒν•˜λŠ” 것과
07:15
our contract and we are not choosing to contract.
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계약을 μ„ νƒν•˜μ§€ μ•ŠλŠ” 것 μ‚¬μ΄μ—λŠ” 큰 차이가 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:20
Take a few seconds to read over your email before you send it.
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이메일을 보내기 전에 λͺ‡ 초 λ™μ•ˆ 이메일을 μ½μ–΄λ³΄μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€ .
07:24
And for an essay, if you have one minute left, if you have 30 seconds left before you need
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그리고 μ—μ„Έμ΄μ˜ 경우 1λΆ„ λ‚¨μ•˜λ‹€λ©΄ 제좜 ν•΄μ•Ό ν•  λ•ŒκΉŒμ§€ 30초 λ‚¨μ•˜λ‹€λ©΄ λ‹€μ‹œ
07:29
to turn it in, read over it.
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μ½μ–΄λ³΄μ„Έμš”.
07:32
Read over it as many times as you can.
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κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ ν•œ 많이 μ½μœΌμ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
07:34
Check your writing.
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λ‹Ήμ‹ μ˜ 글을 ν™•μΈν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:36
My eighth tip and final tip is a bonus, it is to write every day.
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μ—¬λŸ 번째 팁이자 λ§ˆμ§€λ§‰ νŒμ€ λ³΄λ„ˆμŠ€λ‘œ, 맀일 μ“°λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:43
Just like with speaking, if you wanna improve your speaking you need to speak little by
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λ§ν•˜κΈ°μ™€ λ§ˆμ°¬κ°€μ§€λ‘œ λ§ν•˜κΈ°λ₯Ό ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚€κ³  μ‹Άλ‹€λ©΄ 맀일 μ‘°κΈˆμ”© 말해야 ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€
07:47
little every day.
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.
07:48
If you wanna improve your writing, you can't improve your writing just by studying for
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μž‘λ¬Έ μ‹€λ ₯을 ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚€κ³  μ‹Άλ‹€λ©΄
07:52
three hours one day before your exam.
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μ‹œν—˜ ν•˜λ£¨ μ „ μ„Έ μ‹œκ°„ κ³΅λΆ€ν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒλ§ŒμœΌλ‘œλŠ” μž‘λ¬Έ μ‹€λ ₯을 ν–₯μƒμ‹œν‚¬ 수 μ—†μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
07:55
You need to practice little by little every day.
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맀일 μ‘°κΈˆμ”© μ—°μŠ΅ν•΄μ•Ό ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
07:57
So how can you do this?
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μ–΄λ–»κ²Œ ν•  수 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆκΉŒ?
07:58
One of the easiest ways is to just simply keep a journal.
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κ°€μž₯ μ‰¬μš΄ 방법 쀑 ν•˜λ‚˜λŠ” λ‹¨μˆœνžˆ 일기λ₯Ό μ“°λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:02
Every day when you get ready to go to bed, sit down and write a couple sentences about
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맀일 μž μžλ¦¬μ— λ“€ μ€€λΉ„κ°€ 되면 μ•‰μ•„μ„œ ν•˜λ£¨μ— λŒ€ν•œ λͺ‡ λ¬Έμž₯을 μ μ–΄λ³΄μ„Έμš”
08:07
your day.
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.
08:08
Or if you wrote an email to your boss that day, think about what you said and try to
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λ˜λŠ” κ·Έλ‚  μƒμ‚¬μ—κ²Œ 이메일을 썼닀면 , 당신이 λ§ν•œ 것을 μƒκ°ν•˜κ³ 
08:13
write it in English.
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μ˜μ–΄λ‘œ 쓰도둝 λ…Έλ ₯ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
08:14
Try to write with that same formal tone.
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같은 ν˜•μ‹μ μΈ μ–΄μ‘°λ‘œ 쓰도둝 λ…Έλ ₯ν•˜μ„Έμš”.
08:16
Or if you're taking an exam soon, write that essay.
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λ˜λŠ” 곧 μ‹œν—˜μ„ 치λ₯΄λŠ” 경우 ν•΄λ‹Ή 에세이λ₯Ό μž‘μ„±ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€ .
08:20
Practice that essay as much as possible.
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κ·Έ 에세이λ₯Ό κ°€λŠ₯ν•œ ν•œ 많이 μ—°μŠ΅ν•˜μ‹­μ‹œμ˜€.
08:23
When you practice day by day, your skills will increase, you'll be motivated to continue
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맀일맀일 μ—°μŠ΅μ„ ν•˜λ‹€ 보면 μ‹€λ ₯이 늘고 λ°œμ „ν•˜λŠ” λͺ¨μŠ΅μ„ λ³Ό 수 있기 λ•Œλ¬Έμ— 계속 μ˜μš•μ΄ 생기고
08:29
because you'll see your progress, and in the end you really will improve.
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κ²°κ΅­μ—λŠ” 정말 λ°œμ „ν•˜κ²Œ 될 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:34
And now I have a question for you.
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이제 질문이 μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:35
In the comments, let me know, have you ever needed to write formally in English?
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λŒ“κΈ€μ— μ•Œλ €μ£Όμ„Έμš”. κ³΅μ‹μ μœΌλ‘œ μ˜μ–΄λ‘œ 글을 써야 ν–ˆλ˜ 적이 μžˆλ‚˜μš”?
08:41
Maybe a business email, maybe an exam, maybe an academic essay.
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λΉ„μ¦ˆλ‹ˆμŠ€ 이메일일 μˆ˜λ„ 있고, μ‹œν—˜μΌ μˆ˜λ„ 있고, ν•™μˆ  에세이일 μˆ˜λ„ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:45
Let me know.
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μ•Œλ €μ€˜μš”.
08:47
Maybe you need to do it in the future at some point.
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λ―Έλž˜μ— μ–Έμ  κ°€λŠ” ν•΄μ•Ό ν•  μˆ˜λ„ μžˆμŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€ .
08:50
Thanks so much for learning with me, and I'll see you again next Friday for a new lesson
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저와 ν•¨κ»˜ λ°°μ›Œ μ£Όμ…”μ„œ κ°μ‚¬ν•©λ‹ˆλ‹€. λ‹€μŒ μ£Ό κΈˆμš”μΌμ—
08:54
here on my YouTube channel.
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제 YouTube μ±„λ„μ—μ„œ μƒˆλ‘œμš΄ μˆ˜μ—…μœΌλ‘œ λ‹€μ‹œ λ΅™κ² μŠ΅λ‹ˆλ‹€.
08:55
I'll see you later, bye.
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λ‚˜μ€‘μ— 보자, μ•ˆλ…•.
08:58
The next step is to download my free ebook, Five Steps To Becoming A Confident English
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λ‹€μŒ λ‹¨κ³„λŠ” μ €μ˜ 무료 μ „μžμ±…μΈ μžμ‹ κ° μžˆλŠ” μ˜μ–΄ κ΅¬μ‚¬μžκ°€ 되기 μœ„ν•œ λ‹€μ„― 단계λ₯Ό λ‹€μš΄λ‘œλ“œν•˜λŠ” κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€
09:04
Speaker.
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09:05
You'll learn what you need to do to speak confidently and fluently.
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μžμ‹ κ° 있고 μœ μ°½ν•˜κ²Œ λ§ν•˜κΈ° μœ„ν•΄ 무엇을 ν•΄μ•Ό ν•˜λŠ”μ§€ 배우게 될 κ²ƒμž…λ‹ˆλ‹€. 더 λ§Žμ€ 무료 λ ˆμŠ¨μ„ λ°›μœΌλ €λ©΄
09:09
Don't forget to subscribe to my YouTube channel for more free lessons.
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제 유튜브 채널을 κ΅¬λ…ν•˜λŠ” 것을 μžŠμ§€ λ§ˆμ„Έμš” .
09:12
Thanks so much, bye.
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정말 κ³ λ§ˆμ›Œ, μ•ˆλ…•.
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