Vocabulary for IELTS & TOEFL Essay Success

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์•„๋ž˜ ์˜๋ฌธ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ”ํด๋ฆญํ•˜์‹œ๋ฉด ์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋œ ์ž๋ง‰์€ ๊ธฐ๊ณ„ ๋ฒˆ์—ญ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.

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I'm Rebecca from www.engvid.com.
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์•ˆ๋…•.
์ €๋Š” www.engvid.com์˜ Rebecca์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. TOEFL, IELTS ๋˜๋Š” TOEIC ์—์„ธ์ด
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Do you want to get a higher score on your TOEFL, or IELTS, or TOEIC essay?
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์—์„œ ๋” ๋†’์€ ์ ์ˆ˜๋ฅผ ๋ฐ›๊ณ  ์‹ถ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
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In the next five minutes I'm going to show you how to do this in a really easy way.
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๋‹ค์Œ 5๋ถ„ ๋™์•ˆ ์ •๋ง ์‰ฌ์šด ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์œผ๋กœ ์ด ์ž‘์—…์„ ์ˆ˜ํ–‰ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ ๋“œ๋ฆฌ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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You just have to follow two easy steps.
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๋‘ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๊ฐ„๋‹จํ•œ ๋‹จ๊ณ„๋ฅผ ๋”ฐ๋ฅด๊ธฐ๋งŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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Take your essay question and find the key words there, and then replace them with synonyms.
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์—์„ธ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋ฐ›๊ณ  ๊ฑฐ๊ธฐ์—์„œ ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ์€ ๋‹ค์Œ ๋™์˜์–ด๋กœ ๋ฐ”๊พธ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
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Now, that might seem very easy and obvious, but you'd really, really be surprised to know
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์ž, ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋งค์šฐ ์‰ฝ๊ณ  ๋ช…๋ฐฑํ•ด ๋ณด์ผ์ง€ ๋ชจ๋ฅด์ง€๋งŒ
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that lots of students don't do that.
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๋งŽ์€ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š๋Š”๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์„ ์•Œ๋ฉด ์ •๋ง ์ •๋ง ๋†€๋ž„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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What they do instead is that throughout their essay they keep using the same words that
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๋Œ€์‹  ๊ทธ๋“ค์ด ํ•˜๋Š” ์ผ์€ ์—์„ธ์ด ์ „๋ฐ˜์— ๊ฑธ์ณ
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are used in the essay question.
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์—์„ธ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์— ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋œ ๋™์ผํ•œ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๊ณ„์† ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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And if you do that, what you're showing is that you don't have a very good vocabulary,
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋ณด์—ฌ์ฃผ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์•„์ฃผ ์ข‹์€ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ์ง€ ์•Š๋‹ค๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค,
00:46
you don't have a rich vocabulary, you don't use...
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ ํ’๋ถ€ํ•œ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค , ๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค...
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You don't have many synonyms to express the same ideas and thoughts.
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๊ฐ™์€ ์ƒ๊ฐ๊ณผ ์ƒ๊ฐ.
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And what you need to do instead is to show off your vocabulary, and the way you can do
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๊ทธ ๋Œ€์‹  ํ•ด์•ผ ํ•  ์ผ์€ ์ž์‹ ์˜ ์–ดํœ˜๋ ฅ์„ ๊ณผ์‹œํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์€
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it is to take the question, find the key words and make sure that you can generate lots of
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋ฐ›๊ณ  ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ๊ณ  ๊ทธ ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋งŽ์€ ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์ƒ์„ฑํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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synonyms for those key words, because if you can do that then you'll use all those kind
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋ฉด ๋™์ผํ•œ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๋ฐ˜๋ณตํ•˜๋Š”
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of synonyms throughout your essay instead of repeating the same vocabulary.
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๋Œ€์‹  ์—์„ธ์ด ์ „์ฒด์—์„œ ์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ ๋ชจ๋“  ์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๋™์ผํ•œ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๊ณ„์† ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ธฐ ์œ„ํ•ด
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Isn't it kind of a shame when you only have maybe 250 words on your IELTS essay or 300
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IELTS ์—์„ธ์ด์— 250๋‹จ์–ด,
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to 350 on your TOEFL essay to keep using the same vocabulary?
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TOEFL ์—์„ธ์ด์— 300~350๊ฐœ์˜ ๋‹จ์–ด๋งŒ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉด ์•ˆํƒ€๊น์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ ?
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Don't do that.
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ํ•˜์ง€๋งˆ. ์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋‹ค๋ฅด๊ฒŒ
01:28
Learn to do something a little bit differently.
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ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฒ•์„ ๋ฐฐ์šฐ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค .
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Let's see how to do it. Okay?
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์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ํ•˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค. ์ข‹์•„์š”? ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— TOEFL ์‹œํ—˜์˜
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So I've got a sample question, here, from the TOEFL exam.
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์ƒ˜ํ”Œ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
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A part of the question.
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์˜ ์ผ๋ถ€์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
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This is...
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์ด๊ฒƒ์€...
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This says: "Many students choose to attend university outside their home countries."
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"๋งŽ์€ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ๋ชจ๊ตญ ๋ฐ–์—์„œ ๋Œ€ํ•™์— ๊ฐ€๊ธฐ๋กœ ์„ ํƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ."
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Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
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And maybe after that they said: "Do you agree or disagree?" or something like that.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์•„๋งˆ๋„ ๊ทธ ํ›„์— ๊ทธ๋“ค์€ "๋‹น์‹ ์€ ๋™์˜ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๊นŒ, ๋™์˜ํ•˜์ง€ ์•Š์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ? "๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ–ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋˜๋Š” ๊ทธ๋Ÿฐ ๊ฒƒ.
01:47
Okay? Doesn't matter.
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์ข‹์•„์š”? ์ƒ๊ด€์—†์–ด.
01:49
So, what are the...?
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ, ๋ฌด์—‡์ž…๋‹ˆ๊นŒ...?
01:51
How do you find the key words?
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ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด๋Š” ์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ์ฐพ๋‚˜์š”?
01:52
Key words are almost any of the important words.
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ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด๋Š” ๊ฑฐ์˜ ๋ชจ๋“  ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๋‹จ์–ด์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
01:56
For example: "many".
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์˜ˆ: "๋งŽ์€".
01:57
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
01:58
So if you're going to talk about this in your essay and you're going to give your opinion,
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ ์ด๊ฒƒ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์˜๊ฒฌ์„ ์ œ์‹œํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ
02:03
then you want to use different words.
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์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
02:04
So what could you use instead of "many"?
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๋‹ค๋ฉด "๋งŽ์€" ๋Œ€์‹ ์— ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
02:07
Well, try to make a list.
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๊ธ€์Ž„, ๋ชฉ๋ก์„ ๋งŒ๋“ค์–ด๋ณด์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
02:09
For example, I made my list: "myriad students", "countless", "an increasing number".
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์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋“ค์–ด "๋ฌด์ˆ˜ํžˆ ๋งŽ์€ ํ•™์ƒ", "๋ฌด์ˆ˜ํ•œ", "์ฆ๊ฐ€ํ•˜๋Š” ์ˆ˜"๋ผ๋Š” ๋ชฉ๋ก์„ ๋งŒ๋“ค์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:15
It could be another word, it could be an expression.
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๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด์ผ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ๊ณ  ํ‘œํ˜„์ผ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ธฐ๋ณธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ
02:19
Anything that expresses the basic idea.
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ํ‘œํ˜„ํ•˜๋Š” ๋ชจ๋“  ๊ฒƒ .
02:21
And sometimes when you're using a synonym you're expanding on the idea, and that's okay, too.
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๋•Œ๋กœ๋Š” ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ๋•Œ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋ฅผ ํ™•์žฅํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ๋„ ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:26
You're changing the idea a little bit, and that's all right.
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๋‹น์‹ ์€ ์ƒ๊ฐ์„ ์กฐ๊ธˆ ๋ฐ”๊พธ๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค . ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:29
That's fine.
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์•„.
02:30
So, that was one of the key words.
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด ์ค‘ ํ•˜๋‚˜์˜€์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:33
Second key word: "students".
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๋‘ ๋ฒˆ์งธ ํ‚ค์›Œ๋“œ: "ํ•™์ƒ".
02:35
If they said "students" in the essay question, don't use the word "students" every time in
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๊ทธ๋“ค์ด ์—์„ธ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์—์„œ "ํ•™์ƒ"์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ–ˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์—์„ธ์ด ์—์„œ ๋งค๋ฒˆ "ํ•™์ƒ"์ด๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค
02:40
your essay.
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02:41
Use another word, like: "pupils", or "young people", or "scholars".
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"ํ•™์ƒ", "์ฒญ์†Œ๋…„" ๋˜๋Š” "ํ•™์ž"์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
02:47
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
02:48
Again, changing the meaning.
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๋‹ค์‹œ, ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ๋ฐ”๊ฟ‰๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:49
"Scholar" is not exactly students, but it's okay to use that word somewhere.
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"ํ•™์ž"๋Š” ์ •ํ™•ํžˆ ํ•™์ƒ์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ์ง€๋งŒ ์–ด๋”˜๊ฐ€์— ๊ทธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ดœ์ฐฎ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:54
It also shows you have a lot of vocabulary, rich vocabulary.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋˜ํ•œ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๋งŽ์€ ์–ดํœ˜, ํ’๋ถ€ํ•œ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ์Œ์„ ๋ณด์—ฌ์ค๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
02:57
Next: "choose to". Right?
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๋‹ค์Œ: "์„ ํƒ". ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
03:00
Instead of saying: "...students choose to", what else could you say?
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"...ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ์„ ํƒํ•œ๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๋Œ€์‹ ์—, ๋ฌด์Šจ ๋ง์„ ๋” ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
03:04
You could say: "they decide to", "they opt to", "they prefer".
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"๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ๊ฒฐ์ •ํ•œ๋‹ค", " ๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ์„ ํƒํ•œ๋‹ค", "๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ์„ ํ˜ธํ•œ๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:09
All right?
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€?
03:10
So, what I'm suggesting that you do is take some of the essay questions. Right?
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์ œ์•ˆํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๋ช‡ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ์—์„ธ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
03:16
And when you're practicing before the exam, just from the essay questions see if you can
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์‹œํ—˜ ์ „์— ์—ฐ์Šตํ•  ๋•Œ ์—์„ธ์ด ๋ฌธ์ œ์—์„œ
03:22
generate lots of synonyms for the words used in the essay question.
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์—์„ธ์ด ๋ฌธ์ œ์— ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋œ ๋‹จ์–ด์˜ ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ๋งŽ์ด ์ƒ์„ฑํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
03:28
If you can do that, believe me, you're going to use those words in your essay writing.
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์ €๋ฅผ ๋ฏฟ์œผ์„ธ์š”. ์—์„ธ์ด ์ž‘์„ฑ์— ๊ทธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:32
Let's see how it continues.
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์–ด๋–ป๊ฒŒ ๊ณ„์†๋˜๋Š”์ง€ ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
03:34
"...to attend", "Many students choose to attend", what could you use instead of "attend"?
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"...์ฐธ์„ํ•˜๋‹ค", "๋งŽ์€ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ์ฐธ์„์„ ์„ ํƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ", "์ฐธ์„ํ•˜๋‹ค" ๋Œ€์‹  ๋ฌด์—‡์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
03:38
You could say: "to join", "to enroll in", "to apply to", "to pursue undergraduate studies"
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"๊ฐ€์ž…ํ•˜๋‹ค", "๋“ฑ๋กํ•˜๋‹ค", " ์ง€์›ํ•˜๋‹ค", "ํ•™๋ถ€ ๊ณผ์ •์„ ์ถ”๊ตฌํ•˜๋‹ค"
03:45
or "pursue graduate studies".
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๋˜๋Š” "๋Œ€ํ•™์› ์—ฐ๊ตฌ๋ฅผ ์ถ”๊ตฌํ•˜๋‹ค"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:47
All right?
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€?
03:48
Again, we're changing the meaning a little bit, but it's the same basic idea. Right?
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๋‹ค์‹œ ๋งํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ, ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ์˜๋ฏธ๋ฅผ ์•ฝ๊ฐ„ ๋ฐ”๊พธ๊ณ  ์žˆ์ง€๋งŒ ๊ธฐ๋ณธ ์•„์ด๋””์–ด๋Š” ๋™์ผํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
03:52
Because in order to attend you need to enroll, you need to apply, etc.
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์ฐธ์„ํ•˜๋ ค๋ฉด ๋“ฑ๋ก, ์ง€์› ๋“ฑ์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•˜๊ธฐ ๋•Œ๋ฌธ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
03:59
"Many students choose to attend university", here's another key word.
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"๋งŽ์€ ํ•™์ƒ๋“ค์ด ๋Œ€ํ•™์— ์ง„ํ•™ํ•˜๊ธฐ๋กœ ์„ ํƒํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค ", ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์— ๋˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ํ‚ค์›Œ๋“œ๊ฐ€ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—์„ธ์ด์—์„œ
04:03
Instead of saying "university" 15 times in your essay, you might want to say:
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"๋Œ€ํ•™"์„ 15๋ฒˆ ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๋Œ€์‹ 
04:08
"academic centres", or "an academic program", or "institutes of higher learning", or an "educational institution",
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"ํ•™์ˆ  ์„ผํ„ฐ", "ํ•™์ˆ  ํ”„๋กœ๊ทธ๋žจ", " ๊ณ ๋“ฑ ๊ต์œก ๊ธฐ๊ด€", "๊ต์œก ๊ธฐ๊ด€"
04:17
or "school", "college", "academy".
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๋˜๋Š” "ํ•™๊ต"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. "๋Œ€ํ•™", "ํ•™์›".
04:20
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
04:21
Instead of the word "university".
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"๋Œ€ํ•™"์ด๋ผ๋Š” ๋‹จ์–ด ๋Œ€์‹ .
04:22
Don't keep using the same word.
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๊ฐ™์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ๊ณ„์† ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์ง€ ๋งˆ์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
04:24
Use the same idea, but not necessarily the same word.
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๊ฐ™์€ ๊ฐœ๋…์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋˜ ๋ฐ˜๋“œ์‹œ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ํ•„์š”๋Š” ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
04:28
Next.
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๋‹ค์Œ.
04:29
Next part, key part: "...outside their home countries".
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๋‹ค์Œ ๋ถ€๋ถ„, ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋ถ€๋ถ„: "... ๋ชจ๊ตญ ๋ฐ–์—์„œ".
04:33
Instead of saying: "outside their home countries", say: "abroad", "overseas", "in a foreign country",
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"๊ณ ๊ตญ ๋ฐ–์—์„œ"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๋Œ€์‹  "ํ•ด์™ธ", "ํ•ด์™ธ", "์™ธ๊ตญ์—์„œ",
04:41
"away from their homeland".
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"๊ณ ๊ตญ์—์„œ ๋ฉ€๋ฆฌ"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
04:43
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
04:44
Now, you don't have to write this sentence again, but what I'm asking you to do is to
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์ด์ œ ์ด ๋ฌธ์žฅ์„ ๋‹ค์‹œ ์“ธ ํ•„์š”๋Š” ์—†์ง€๋งŒ ์ œ๊ฐ€ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์—๊ฒŒ ์š”์ฒญํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€
04:50
take the question, find the key words, and see if you can come up with lots of vocabulary
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์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ๋ฐ›๊ณ  ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ๊ณ  ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋งŽ์€ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด ๋‚ผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
04:56
for that.
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.
04:57
In this case, what was the topic?
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์ด ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ฃผ์ œ๋Š” ๋ฌด์—‡์ด์—ˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๊นŒ?
04:59
Education. Right?
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๊ต์œก. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
05:01
So this way you'll be able to check whether you have lots of educational vocabulary.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์œผ๋กœ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ๊ต์œก์šฉ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๋งŽ์ด ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ๋Š”์ง€ ํ™•์ธํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:05
Now, I also have some other lessons and videos all about how to generate more vocabulary
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์ด์ œ ํŠน์ • ๋ถ„์•ผ์—์„œ ๋” ๋งŽ์€ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ์ƒ์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ˆ˜์—…๊ณผ ๋น„๋””์˜ค๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:11
in certain fields.
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. ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์ค‘ ์ผ๋ถ€๋ฅผ
05:12
You might want to check out some of those other videos.
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ํ™•์ธํ•˜๊ณ  ์‹ถ์„ ์ˆ˜๋„ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
05:14
They also have videos about how to use vocabulary besides "good" and "bad". Right?
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๊ทธ๋“ค์€ ๋˜ํ•œ "์ข‹์€"๊ณผ "๋‚˜์œ"์™ธ์— ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋น„๋””์˜ค๋ฅผ ๊ฐ€์ง€๊ณ  ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
05:19
So, do that.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‹ˆ ๊ทธ๋ ‡๊ฒŒ ํ•˜์„ธ์š”.
05:21
All right.
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€.
05:22
Sorry, I just realized something here.
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์ฃ„์†กํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ ๊นจ๋‹ฌ์€ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:25
"Institutions" wrote it a little too often.
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"๊ธฐ๊ด€"์€ ๋„ˆ๋ฌด ์ž์ฃผ ์ผ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:31
"Institutions", okay?
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"๊ธฐ๊ด€", ์•Œ์•˜์ง€?
05:32
That was pointed out.
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์ง€์ ํ•œ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:34
All right, we're going to do one more example and then we'll go from there.
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์ข‹์•„์š”, ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๋Š” ํ•˜๋‚˜์˜ ์˜ˆ๋ฅผ ๋” ํ•  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
05:38
Now let's look at another essay question.
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์ด์ œ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์—์„ธ์ด ๋ฌธ์ œ๋ฅผ ์‚ดํŽด๋ณด๊ฒ ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
05:41
Okay?
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05:41
This one also comes from the TOEFL exam, but you can use questions from your IELTS exam
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
์ด๊ฒƒ๋„ TOEFL ์‹œํ—˜์—์„œ ๋‚˜์˜จ ๊ฒƒ์ด์ง€๋งŒ IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์— ์‘์‹œํ•˜๋ ค๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์˜ ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค
05:46
if you're going to be appearing for the IELTS.
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.
05:47
No problem.
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์•„์š”.
05:48
So, it says: "A person should never make an important decision alone."
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ " ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ๊ฒฐ์ •์„ ํ˜ผ์ž ๋‚ด๋ ค์„œ๋Š” ์•ˆ ๋œ๋‹ค."
05:54
So, what would be the key words here?
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๊ทธ๋ ‡๋‹ค๋ฉด ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด๋Š” ๋ฌด์—‡์ผ๊นŒ์š”?
05:56
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
05:57
So they would be: "person", let's say here: "should never", "important", "decision", and
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๊ทธ๋ž˜์„œ ๊ทธ๋“ค์€ "์‚ฌ๋žŒ"์ด ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์—ฌ๊ธฐ์„œ๋Š” "์ ˆ๋Œ€ ์•ˆ ๋œ๋‹ค", "์ค‘์š”ํ•˜๋‹ค", "๊ฒฐ์ •",
06:05
"alone", so that's what we're going to try to find synonyms for.
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"ํ˜ผ์ž"๋ผ๊ณ  ํ•ฉ์‹œ๋‹ค. ์ด๊ฒƒ์ด ์šฐ๋ฆฌ๊ฐ€ ๋™์˜์–ด๋ฅผ ์ฐพ์œผ๋ ค๊ณ  ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:09
"Person", instead of saying "person", you can say: "an individual".
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"์‚ฌ๋žŒ"์€ "์‚ฌ๋žŒ"์ด ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ "๊ฐœ์ธ"์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:13
Or sometimes when you have something like this what you can do is turn it into the plural.
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๋˜๋Š” ๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ ์ด์™€ ๊ฐ™์€ ๊ฒƒ์ด ์žˆ์„ ๋•Œ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์€ ๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ๋ณต์ˆ˜๋กœ ๋ฐ”๊พธ๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:19
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
06:20
That will also make it much easier for you to write throughout your essay.
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๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋ฉด ์—์„ธ์ด ์ „์ฒด์—์„œ ์“ฐ๊ธฐ๊ฐ€ ํ›จ์”ฌ ์‰ฌ์›Œ์ง‘๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:24
Because when you say "a person", then you sometimes have to say: "himself", "herself", "oneself".
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"์‚ฌ๋žŒ"์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋ฉด ๋•Œ๋•Œ๋กœ "์ž์‹ ", "์ž์‹ ", "์ž์‹ "์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•ด์•ผํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:29
Instead of that, you can say: "people" and you just say "themselves" and you don't have
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๊ทธ ๋Œ€์‹  "์‚ฌ๋žŒ"์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๊ณ  " ์ž์‹ "์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋ฉด
06:34
to give it a gender. Okay?
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์„ฑ๋ณ„์„ ์ง€์ •ํ•  ํ•„์š”๊ฐ€ ์—†์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ข‹์•„์š”?
06:37
Next: "A person should never", so you could say instead of "never", you could say: "at no time".
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๋‹ค์Œ: "A person should never", ๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ "never" ๋Œ€์‹  "at no time"์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:43
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
06:45
"...make an important", instead of "important", you could use words like: "critical", "crucial", "significant".
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"์ค‘์š”ํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋งŒ๋“ค๊ธฐ"๋Š” "์ค‘์š”ํ•œ" ๋Œ€์‹  "์ค‘์š”ํ•œ", "์ค‘์š”ํ•œ", "์ค‘์š”ํ•œ"๊ณผ ๊ฐ™์€ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:53
The point is not that I'm giving you these words.
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์š”์ ์€ ๋‚ด๊ฐ€ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์—๊ฒŒ ์ด ๋ง์„ ์ „ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ด ์•„๋‹™๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:55
The point is whether you can think of these words. Right?
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์š”์ ์€ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ด ๋‹จ์–ด๋“ค์„ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š๋ƒ ํ•˜๋Š” ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ? ๊ณฐ๊ณฐํžˆ
06:57
These are some words that I thought about.
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์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด๋ณธ ๋‹จ์–ด๋“ค์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
06:59
If you...
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๋งŒ์•ฝ ๋‹น์‹ ์ด...
07:00
When you try this exercise cannot come up with even, let's say at least two words, maybe
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์ด ์—ฐ์Šต์„ ์‹œ๋„ํ•  ๋•Œ ์—์„ธ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ์˜ ๋ชจ๋“  ํ•ต์‹ฌ ๋‹จ์–ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ ์–ด๋„ ๋‘ ๋‹จ์–ด, ์•„๋งˆ๋„
07:06
three, ideally three, but at least two words for every key word in the essay question,
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์„ธ ๋‹จ์–ด, ์ด์ƒ์ ์œผ๋กœ๋Š” ์„ธ ๋‹จ์–ด, ํ•˜์ง€๋งŒ ์ ์–ด๋„ ๋‘ ๋‹จ์–ด๋ฅผ ์ƒ๊ฐํ•ด ๋ด…์‹œ๋‹ค.
07:13
then you're probably going to have difficulty writing your essay with enough interesting
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์ถฉ๋ถ„ํ•œ ํฅ๋ฏธ๋กœ์šด ์–ดํœ˜๋กœ ์—์„ธ์ด๋ฅผ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•˜๋Š” ๋ฐ ์–ด๋ ค์›€์ด ์žˆ์œผ๋ฏ€๋กœ
07:17
vocabulary, so it means you need to work on vocabulary.
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์–ดํœ˜์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ์ž‘์—…์ด ํ•„์š”ํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:22
Next: "decision", you could say: "life choice", "selection", "determination".
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๋‹ค์Œ: "๊ฒฐ์ •", "์ธ์ƒ ์„ ํƒ", "์„ ํƒ", "๊ฒฐ์ •"์ด๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:28
And at different points in your essay use a different term.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ์—์„ธ์ด์˜ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์ง€์ ์—์„œ ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ์šฉ์–ด๋ฅผ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
07:31
Right?
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์˜ค๋ฅธ์ชฝ?
07:32
"Alone", instead of saying "alone", you could say: "by oneself", "on one's own", "by themselves".
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"ํ˜ผ์ž", "ํ˜ผ์ž"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•˜๋Š” ๋Œ€์‹  "ํ˜ผ์ž์„œ", "ํ˜ผ์ž์„œ", "ํ˜ผ์ž์„œ"๋ผ๊ณ  ๋งํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์Šต๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
07:39
All right?
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๊ดœ์ฐฎ์€?
07:40
If you said: "People.
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"์‚ฌ๋žŒ.
07:41
People should never...
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์‚ฌ๋žŒ์€ ์ ˆ๋Œ€...
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At no time should people make significant life choices by themselves."
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์ ˆ๋Œ€๋กœ ์Šค์Šค๋กœ ์ค‘์š”ํ•œ ์‚ถ์˜ ์„ ํƒ์„ ํ•ด์„œ๋Š” ์•ˆ ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค."
07:48
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
07:49
Of course, you don't have to write the question in your own words, but in fact throughout
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๋ฌผ๋ก  ์งˆ๋ฌธ์„ ์ž์‹ ์˜ ๋ง๋กœ ์ž‘์„ฑํ•  ํ•„์š”๋Š” ์—†์ง€๋งŒ ์‹ค์ œ๋กœ ์—์„ธ์ด ์ „์ฒด์—์„œ
07:54
your essay you are going to be arguing a particular point of view for which you will need these
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์ด๋Ÿฌํ•œ
08:00
kinds of vocabulary words.
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์ข…๋ฅ˜์˜ ์–ดํœ˜๊ฐ€ ํ•„์š”ํ•œ ํŠน์ • ๊ด€์ ์— ๋Œ€ํ•ด ๋…ผ์Ÿํ•˜๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:03
Now, if you want more tips on doing well on your TOEFL exam or on your IELTS exam, if
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์ด์ œ TOEFL ์‹œํ—˜์ด๋‚˜ IELTS ์‹œํ—˜์„ ์ž˜ ์น˜๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ๋” ๋งŽ์€ ์ •๋ณด๊ฐ€ ํ•„์š”ํ•˜๊ฑฐ๋‚˜
08:11
you're doing TOEFL, check out our website: www.goodluckTOEFL.com;
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TOEFL์„ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด ์ €ํฌ ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋ฅผ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค: www.goodluckTOEFL.com;
08:15
if you're doing IELTS, check out www.goodluckIELTS.com.
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IELTS๋ฅผ ํ•˜๊ณ  ์žˆ๋‹ค๋ฉด www.goodluckIELTS.com์„ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:19
And on both...
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‘˜ ๋‹ค...
08:20
In both of these websites you'll find not only tips, but also vocabulary that you can
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์ด ๋‘ ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ์—์„œ ์—ฌ๋Ÿฌ๋ถ„์€ ํŒ๋ฟ๋งŒ ์•„๋‹ˆ๋ผ
08:26
use on these tests and you'll also have lots of essay questions which you can use so that
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์ด ํ…Œ์ŠคํŠธ์—์„œ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ์ฐพ์„ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์œผ๋ฉฐ ์ด ์—ฐ์Šต์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋„๋ก ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋งŽ์€ ์—์„ธ์ด ์งˆ๋ฌธ๋„ ์žˆ์„ ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
08:31
you can do this exercise for yourself; and model essays where you'll see good vocabulary,
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์ž์‹ ์„ ์œ„ํ•ด; ์ข‹์€ ์–ดํœ˜,
08:38
interesting, varied vocabulary, advanced vocabulary being used in actual sentences.
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ํฅ๋ฏธ๋กญ๊ณ  ๋‹ค์–‘ํ•œ ์–ดํœ˜, ์‹ค์ œ ๋ฌธ์žฅ์—์„œ ์‚ฌ์šฉ๋˜๋Š” ๊ณ ๊ธ‰ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ ๋ณผ ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ชจ๋ธ ์—์„ธ์ด.
08:44
Okay?
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์ข‹์•„์š”?
08:45
So, also, if you want to do a quiz on this, go to our website at www.engvid.com.
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๋”ฐ๋ผ์„œ ์ด์— ๋Œ€ํ•œ ํ€ด์ฆˆ๋ฅผ ํ’€๊ณ  ์‹ถ๋‹ค๋ฉด ๋‹น์‚ฌ ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ www.engvid.com์œผ๋กœ ์ด๋™ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.
08:53
And all the best with your essay.
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๊ทธ๋ฆฌ๊ณ  ๋‹น์‹ ์˜ ์—์„ธ์ด์— ์ตœ์„ ์„ ๋‹คํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค. ํ• 
08:57
You can do it.
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์ˆ˜ ์žˆ์–ด์š”.
08:58
Lots of ways to do it.
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๊ทธ๊ฒƒ์„ ํ•  ์ˆ˜์žˆ๋Š” ๋งŽ์€ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•. ๋‹น์‹ ์ด ์ž˜ํ•  ์ˆ˜ ์žˆ๋Š” ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์—
08:59
Check out some other videos also that talk about ways you can do well, but this is definitely
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๋Œ€ํ•ด ์ด์•ผ๊ธฐํ•˜๋Š” ๋‹ค๋ฅธ ๋น„๋””์˜ค๋„ ํ™•์ธํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค . ๊ทธ๋Ÿฌ๋‚˜ ์ด๊ฒƒ์€ ํ™•์‹คํžˆ ์–ดํœ˜๋ฅผ
09:06
one way, by improving your vocabulary.
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ํ–ฅ์ƒ์‹œํ‚ค๋Š” ํ•œ ๊ฐ€์ง€ ๋ฐฉ๋ฒ•์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค .
09:08
All the best to you.
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๋‹น์‹ ์—๊ฒŒ ์ตœ์„ ์„ ๋‹คํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค.
์ด ์›น์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ ์ •๋ณด

์ด ์‚ฌ์ดํŠธ๋Š” ์˜์–ด ํ•™์Šต์— ์œ ์šฉํ•œ YouTube ๋™์˜์ƒ์„ ์†Œ๊ฐœํ•ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์ „ ์„ธ๊ณ„ ์ตœ๊ณ ์˜ ์„ ์ƒ๋‹˜๋“ค์ด ๊ฐ€๋ฅด์น˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ˆ˜์—…์„ ๋ณด๊ฒŒ ๋  ๊ฒƒ์ž…๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๊ฐ ๋™์˜์ƒ ํŽ˜์ด์ง€์— ํ‘œ์‹œ๋˜๋Š” ์˜์–ด ์ž๋ง‰์„ ๋”๋ธ” ํด๋ฆญํ•˜๋ฉด ๊ทธ๊ณณ์—์„œ ๋™์˜์ƒ์ด ์žฌ์ƒ๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ๋น„๋””์˜ค ์žฌ์ƒ์— ๋งž์ถฐ ์ž๋ง‰์ด ์Šคํฌ๋กค๋ฉ๋‹ˆ๋‹ค. ์˜๊ฒฌ์ด๋‚˜ ์š”์ฒญ์ด ์žˆ๋Š” ๊ฒฝ์šฐ ์ด ๋ฌธ์˜ ์–‘์‹์„ ์‚ฌ์šฉํ•˜์—ฌ ๋ฌธ์˜ํ•˜์‹ญ์‹œ์˜ค.

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